梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example and explain the effect. Avoid repetition and fix tense and article errors.

範例: I don’t usually remember my dreams clearly. However, I sometimes recall scary dreams vividly; for example, a recent nightmare about being chased stayed with me for days and made me feel anxious when I woke up.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and reduce redundancy. Use linking words to explain when and how you share, and give a specific method or reason.

範例: Yes, I often share my dreams with my mother. If I remember the whole dream, I tell her the story, but if I only recall fragments I jot down keywords so I can remember the details later.

建議: Provide a clear opinion and justify it with reasons. Correct vocabulary mistakes (dreams not drinks) and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to show contrast between meaningful and meaningless dreams and give an example or reason.

範例: I think it depends. Sometimes dreams reflect our worries or desires and can have meaning—for instance, dreaming about exams may show anxiety—but other times they are just random images caused by fatigue.

建議: Answer directly and correct vocabulary and grammar. Distinguish between literal dreams and ambitions. Use linking words to contrast positive and negative dreams and give a concrete example of a dream you'd like to realize.

範例: It depends on the dream. If it is a positive dream—like becoming a teacher—I would certainly try to make it come true by studying and gaining experience. But I wouldn’t want terrifying nightmares to become reality.

× Not really most of the dreams that I couldn't remember too much, but for some horror, horror ones or even some make me frightened.

✓ Not really. I can't remember most of my dreams, but some horror ones or some that frighten me I remember for a long time.

The original is run-on and unclear. 'Couldn't remember too much' conflicts with present ability; use present simple 'can't remember'. Word order and clauses need restructuring to convey meaning. Split into two sentences and use relative clause 'that frighten me' or 'which frighten me' to describe 'some dreams'.

× I would remember for a long time and this leave me a strong impression.

✓ I remember them for a long time and they leave a strong impression on me.

Pronoun reference and verb agreement are incorrect. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'dreams' and present simple 'remember' to match typical statements. 'This leave' should be 'they leave' and add preposition 'on' with 'impression'.

× Yes, I often share my dreams with my mothers because when I remember the whole process of the dream, I would record and tell and tell to my mother or I would write down some keywords to that's myself recalled.

✓ Yes, I often share my dreams with my mother because when I remember the whole sequence of a dream I record it and tell her, or I write down some keywords to help myself recall it.

Use singular 'mother' unless plural intended. Remove redundant 'and tell and tell'. Use 'record it' and 'tell her' for clarity. 'to that's myself recalled' is ungrammatical; replace with 'to help myself recall it'.

× It's depend.

✓ It depends.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires third person singular 'depends'. Also 'depend' alone is base form; use present tense 'depends'.

× Depends on the situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

Sentence fragment missing subject and verb. Add 'It' to form a complete sentence.

× Some drinks will have some. Special meanings, but other ones that may just you very tired so your consciousness lets you have let.

✓ Some dreams may have special meanings, but others may just reflect that you were very tired, so your consciousness lets you have them.

Multiple issues: 'drinks' is wrong word (should be 'dreams'). Unnecessary 'some' and misplaced period. 'other ones that may just you very tired' lacks verb; rephrase 'others may just reflect that you were very tired'. 'lets you have let' is ungrammatical; 'lets you have them' or 'allow them' works better.

× It depends on what kind of drinks that I made.

✓ It depends on what kind of dreams I have.

'Drinks' should be 'dreams'. Tense and verb choice: 'that I made' is incorrect for dreams—use 'I have' or 'I had' depending on context. Keep present simple 'I have' when speaking generally.

× For instance, if I made some positive or some happy ones and that would achieve my goal and I would hope that dream can come true.

✓ For instance, if I have positive or happy dreams that relate to my goals, I would hope those dreams could come true.

Tense consistency: use present simple for general statements ('have'). 'That would achieve my goal' is vague; specify 'that relate to my goals'. Use 'those dreams could come true' for subjunctive possibility. Also avoid repeating 'some'.

× But for some horrible or terrible ones I would not hope.

✓ But for horrible or terrible dreams I would not hope for them to come true.

Sentence lacks object and clarity. Specify 'dreams' and what is not hoped: 'for them to come true'. Use 'hope for' or 'not hope' with an infinitive phrase.