梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundancy and incorrect word forms (e.g., use “days” → “details” or “dreams”).

範例: I usually can’t remember my dreams anymore. When I was a child, however, I remembered many dreams in detail, but as I got older those memories faded, so I rarely recall what I dreamed last night.

建議: Good content and relevance. Improve coherence by using linking words and condensing repetitive phrases. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., “tell” or “talk about” instead of repeating “share”) and provide one clear example with a brief reason why you share the dream.

範例: Yes, I often tell people about unusual dreams because they’re interesting to talk about. For example, if I dream about my favorite singer I usually tell my friends since we all like the same music, whereas family-related dreams I discuss with my parents to explain my feelings.

建議: Correct grammar and vocabulary mistakes and make the argument clearer and more specific. Begin with a direct answer, then explain briefly why you believe dreams have meaning, using one concrete example or reason. Replace misspellings like “trims” with “dreams.”

範例: Yes, I believe dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our unconscious thoughts or feelings. For instance, dreaming about failing an exam might indicate anxiety about performance in real life.

建議: Answer directly and clarify your reasoning with a coherent, grammatical explanation. Avoid filler phrases and repetition. Give one specific reason and a short example to illustrate why making dreams literal would be undesirable.

範例: No, I wouldn’t want to make my dreams come true because they are often fragmented and unrealistic. For example, a dream combining random people and places could cause confusion if it happened in real life, which is why I prefer them to remain imaginary.

× No, I cannot remember the dreams I had, but when I was young I used to remember every little days of my dream.

✓ No, I cannot remember the dreams I had, but when I was young I used to remember every little day of my dream.

The phrase 'every little days' mixes singular/plural incorrectly and conflicts with 'every' which requires a singular noun. Use 'every little day' to be grammatically correct. Note: 'every little day of my dream' is slightly odd stylistically; consider 'I used to remember every detail of my dreams' for clarity.

× But as I have grown I cannot remember a single thing about what I have dreamed last night.

✓ But as I have grown I cannot remember a single thing about what I dreamed last night.

The clause 'what I have dreamed last night' incorrectly combines present perfect with a specific past time expression 'last night'. Use simple past 'dreamed' with 'last night'. Also note tense consistency: 'as I have grown' is acceptable, but you could also use 'as I grew' for consistent past perspective.

× Yes, I often share my dreams with others when the dreams feel unusual or special.

✓ Yes, I often share my dreams with others when the dreams feel unusual or special.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change is required.

× Like if I dream about my idol, my favorite singer, I will share it with my friends, and if I dream about my family, I will share it with my family so that they know what I've been thinking.

✓ If I dream about my idol, my favorite singer, I will share it with my friends, and if I dream about my family, I will share it with my family so that they know what I've been thinking.

Beginning a sentence with 'Like' as a discourse marker is informal and can be unnecessary. Removing 'Like' makes the sentence clearer. Otherwise verbs and pronouns are correct. Consider replacing the repeated phrase 'share it with my family' with 'tell them' to avoid repetition.

× Yes, I do think trims has special meanings because trims are literally our unconscious mind playing some scenario from our minds, so they too have special meanings for our mind.

✓ Yes, I do think dreams have special meanings because dreams are literally our unconscious mind playing some scenarios from our minds, so they too have special meanings for our mind.

The word 'trims' is a mis-spelling of 'dreams'. Also 'dreams has' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; plural subject 'dreams' requires plural verb 'have'. 'Some scenario' should be plural 'some scenarios' to agree with 'playing'. Correcting these makes the sentence grammatically coherent.

× No, that would be ridiculous because every dream I have dream of is like a little piece of something, a little bit of some that.

✓ No, that would be ridiculous because every dream I have is like a little piece of something, a little bit of that.

The phrase 'every dream I have dream of' is ungrammatical and repetitive. Use 'every dream I have' or 'every dream I dream' but not both. 'A little bit of some that' is unclear and ungrammatical; 'a little bit of that' or better 'a little piece of something' conveys the meaning. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and fixes word choice.

× So yeah, I I wouldn't want to make my dreams come true because that would be scary.

✓ So yeah, I wouldn't want to make my dreams come true because that would be scary.

There is a repeated pronoun 'I I' which is a typographical/repetition error. Removing the duplicate yields a correct sentence. Otherwise tense and structure are appropriate.