梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 대답을 직접적으로 시작하고, 문법과 어휘를 정확하게 써서 의미를 명확히 하세요. 현재 문장은 시제와 관사 사용, 문장 구조에서 오류가 있습니다. 응답은 한두 문장으로 간결하게 하고, 필요시 구체적 예시(어떤 꿈을 꾸었는지)나 이유를 덧붙이세요. 연결어를 사용해 문장이 자연스럽게 이어지도록 연습하세요. 예: 과거의 경험을 말할 때는 ‘when I was young’ 다음에 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고, 직업을 말할 때는 관사(a/an/the)를 포함하세요.

範例: Yes, I can. When I was young, I often dreamed of becoming an artist because I loved drawing and painting. For example, I used to imagine painting big murals with bright colours.

建議: 의도를 분명히 표현하세요(거절인지 비밀 유지인지). 현재 문장은 어법과 어순, 단어 선택 오류가 있어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 감정(두려움)을 표현할 때는 간단한 이유 문장을 추가하고, 연결어로 문장을 매끄럽게 연결하세요. 예: ‘I don't share my dreams because I am preparing for them and I am afraid others might steal my ideas.’처럼 현재진행/현재시제 표현을 정확히 사용하세요.

範例: I don't usually share my dreams because I'm still preparing to achieve them, and I'm afraid others might take my ideas. However, I sometimes tell close friends for advice.

建議: 문법(주어-동사 일치)과 어휘 선택을 고치고, 주장 뒤에 구체적 이유나 예시를 덧붙이세요. 현재 문장은 중복과 모호한 표현이 많습니다. ‘Dreams have special meanings’라는 입장을 밝힌 뒤, 왜 그런지 구체적으로 설명하세요(감정적 동기, 계획, 관계 등). 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 논리를 전개하세요.

範例: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings because they often motivate me to study and socialise. For example, dreaming about success encourages me to work harder at school and meet people who can help me.

建議: 의도를 명확히 하고 완전한 문장으로 표현하세요. 현재 문장은 단절되고 의미 전달이 불분명합니다. ‘지금 준비가 안 되었다’와 ‘미래에 이루고 싶다’는 생각을 두 문장으로 나누어 명확히 설명하고, 어떻게 이룰지 간단한 방법을 덧붙이세요. 연결어(and, but, however)를 적절히 사용하세요.

範例: I'm not ready to pursue my dreams right now because I'm still studying, but I definitely want to make them come true in the future. I plan to prepare by improving my skills and gaining experience step by step.

× I dreamed artist.

✓ I dreamed of becoming an artist.

The original sentence omits the necessary preposition and correct verb structure. In English, after 'dream' to express aspirations or imagined roles, use 'dream of' + noun or 'dream of becoming' + noun. Use the gerund or 'of' construction: 'dreamed of becoming an artist.' This fixes verb pattern and clarity. Suggestion: Use 'dream of' or 'dreamed about' + noun/gerund (e.g., 'I dreamed of being an artist').

× I'm not showing my dreams with others because I'm preparing now so I scared others know my new dream.

✓ I'm not sharing my dreams with others because I'm preparing now and I'm scared others will find out about my new dream.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb choice 'showing' should be 'sharing' for discussing dreams; 'scared others know' is ungrammatical—use 'scared others will find out' to indicate future possibility; coordinate clauses require 'and' not 'so' here for reason plus result. Also use future modal 'will' to express likely discovery. Suggestion: Use 'sharing' for conveying information and 'scared others will find out' for fear about future knowledge.

× Yes, dreams is not just dream, dream is encouraged me so I'll live this life and school and meet friends.

✓ Yes, a dream is not just a dream; it encourages me, so I will live this life, go to school, and meet friends.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: 'dreams is' is incorrect—use singular 'a dream is' or plural 'dreams are'. Also need articles before 'dream' and correct verb form 'encourages me' (present simple third-person singular). 'I'll live this life and school and meet friends' is ungrammatical: use 'live this life, go to school, and meet friends' for parallel verbs. Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb agreement and articles, and keep parallel structure in lists.

× Now I'm not ready my dreams but.

✓ I'm not ready for my dreams yet.

Missing preposition 'for' after 'ready' and 'yet' fits better than trailing 'but.' The original ends with a conjunction without continuation. Use 'I'm not ready for my dreams yet' to indicate current unpreparedness. Suggestion: Remember 'ready for' collocation and avoid sentence fragments.

× I will bring up through. Exactly.

✓ I will work on them and make them happen.

'Bring up through' is incorrect and unclear. Use a clear phrasal verb or expression for pursuing dreams: 'work on them' or 'make them happen.' Also avoid short fragments like 'Exactly.' Suggestion: Use complete, idiomatic expressions for future intentions (e.g., 'I will work hard to make them happen').