梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Organize your response with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (verb tenses, articles, and word order), and use linking words for clarity. Be specific about examples and keep the answer concise (max 5 sentences). For instance, start with a direct statement about remembering dreams, add one or two supporting details using connectors like 'sometimes' or 'because', and finish with a short conclusion.

範例: I sometimes remember my dreams, but it depends on the type of dream. For example, I usually recall vivid or emotional dreams more clearly, especially if they feel personal or realistic. However, I often forget ordinary or short dreams by the next morning.

建議: Give a direct yes/no answer first, then explain briefly using correct grammar and linking words. Be specific about who you share with and why. Avoid redundancy and ensure sentences are coherent and limited in number.

範例: Yes, I often share my dreams with close friends and family. For instance, if I have a nightmare I discuss it with my sister because it helps me feel less stressed, and I also enjoy hearing other people's strange or funny dreams.

建議: Start with a clear opinion (yes/no/maybe) and then give a concise reason with a specific example. Avoid filler words and unclear phrasing. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas and make your answer coherent.

範例: I think dreams can have personal meanings because they often reflect our daily concerns or desires. For example, dreaming about buying a car might show that you are thinking about a major purchase or seeking more independence.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear, specific plan or reason. Use correct sentence structure and limit to a few coherent sentences. Mention one concrete goal and how you plan to achieve it or why it's important to you.

範例: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true, especially career and travel goals. For example, I plan to study English and apply for scholarships so I can go abroad and live in a foreign country where I can gain experience and improve my skills.

× Whether it's depend on the situation, Sometime I remember the odd dream which I had at the right, but sometime I did not remember what I saw the dream last night.

✓ Whether it depends on the situation. Sometimes I remember an odd dream I had recently, but sometimes I do not remember what I dreamed last night.

The original contains multiple sentence structure and tense issues: 'Whether it's depend' mixes question word with incorrect verb form (should be 'Whether it depends' or 'It depends'). 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (adverb) and 'had at the right' is unclear and incorrect; replaced with 'had recently' to match meaning. 'did not remember what I saw the dream last night' mixes past simple and incorrect verb usage; use 'do not remember what I dreamed last night'. Suggestions: split into clear sentences, use correct adverb 'sometimes', use 'depends' for subject-verb agreement, and use 'dreamed' (or 'dreamt') after 'remember'.

× So it just depends on the dreams, which dream I saw, if I saw the dream like it's my own.

✓ So it just depends on the dream I had and whether it felt like my own.

The sentence has awkward clause order and tense issues: 'which dream I saw' is unnatural—use 'the dream I had'. 'if I saw the dream like it's my own' mixes tenses and pronouns; use 'whether it felt like my own'. Suggestion: simplify clauses and keep consistent past tense for a remembered dream ('had', 'felt').

× Yes, I'm sure my other dreams with other because when I saw doing horror dreams then I want to discuss with other.

✓ Yes, I share my dreams with others because when I have scary dreams I want to discuss them with other people.

Pronoun use is incorrect and unclear: 'I'm sure my other dreams with other' is meaningless. 'When I saw doing horror dreams' mixes verbs and tenses; use 'when I have scary dreams'. 'Discuss with other' needs an object: 'discuss them with other people'. Suggestion: use 'share' and 'others', keep noun/pronoun references consistent ('dreams' -> 'them').

× Furthermore I believe that if I discuss these dreaming then I feel any not any pressure and sometime I'm really interested in other dreams.

✓ Furthermore, I believe that if I discuss these dreams, I do not feel any pressure, and sometimes I'm really interested in other people's dreams.

Errors: 'these dreaming' should be 'these dreams' (noun form). 'I feel any not any pressure' is incorrect word order—use 'I do not feel any pressure'. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'other dreams' needs possessive 'other people's dreams' to be clear. Suggestion: use proper noun forms and standard negative word order ('do not feel any').

× Why something so bad to dreams? You have a special meaning.

✓ Why do some dreams seem so bad? Do they have a special meaning?

Original is ungrammatical and unclear: 'Why something so bad to dreams?' lacks auxiliary and word order; add 'do' and adjust word order. 'You have a special meaning' is wrong subject; ask 'Do they have a special meaning?' Suggestion: form proper questions with auxiliary verbs and match subject ('dreams' -> 'they').

× For example, uh, if I saw the dreams like, uh, according to my, uh, situation of the life means I bought the car and I have English.

✓ For example, if I dream about things that reflect my life situation, like buying a car or improving my English,

Problems include wrong verb tense 'saw the dreams' (should be 'dream about' or 'dreamed'), awkward phrase 'according to my situation of the life' should be 'reflect my life situation', and 'I have English' is incorrect—use 'improving my English' or 'learning English'. Suggestion: use 'dream about' and express life situations clearly with correct prepositions ('about', 'reflect').

× So I think so that it is a very special meanings of dream.

✓ So I think that dreams can have a very special meaning.

Errors: 'I think so that' is awkward—use 'I think that'. 'a very special meanings' mixes singular/plural and article: use 'a very special meaning' or 'very special meanings'. Also 'of dream' should be 'of dreams' or better 'meaning' as above. Suggestion: choose correct singular/plural and simplify phrasing ('dreams can have meaning').

× Yes, I want to make my dreams come true because sometimes I just dream like my real own dreams so I want it's come just to like for example, if I want to go to abroad and in dream I also saw I am an Indian foreign country so I I.

✓ Yes, I want to make my dreams come true because sometimes my dreams feel very real. For example, if I want to go abroad and in a dream I see myself in a foreign country, I want that to happen.

Multiple errors: 'dream like my real own dreams' is redundant—use 'my dreams feel very real'. 'I want it's come' is ungrammatical—use 'I want that to happen'. 'go to abroad' should be 'go abroad'. 'I am an Indian foreign country' is incorrect—use 'I see myself in a foreign country'. Suggestion: avoid redundancy, use correct infinitive forms ('to go abroad') and 'see myself' for dream imagery.