梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện phát âm và ngữ pháp cơ bản, trả lời trực tiếp hơn; sắp xếp câu rõ ràng (topic sentence + 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể) và tránh lỗi từ/cụm từ (ví dụ: 'rim' -> 'dream', 'for my for my family' -> 'for my family'). Dùng linking words đơn giản như 'for example' hoặc 'also'. Hạn chế số câu không quá 5 câu.

範例: Yes, I can remember my dreams. For example, one dream is to become a chef because I find cooking interesting and enjoyable. I often practise by making breakfast for my family and baking cakes for my friends at the weekend. This practice helps me improve my skills and keeps me motivated.

建議: Sửa ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ không phù hợp ('walk along' và 'brochure' không đúng ngữ cảnh). Trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích lý do với 1-2 ví dụ cụ thể, dùng linking words như 'because' hoặc 'for example'. Chuẩn hóa thì (I prefer to work alone).

範例: I usually don't share my dreams with everyone because I value my privacy. For example, I prefer to work on personal projects alone at first so I can test my ideas and learn from mistakes before telling others.

建議: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và rõ ràng về ý. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I am can' và dùng từ phù hợp ('dreams have meanings' → explain what meanings). Nên nêu ý chính rõ ràng rồi đưa ra ví dụ cụ thể/ kết quả. Dùng linking words như 'because' hoặc 'for instance'.

範例: Yes, I believe dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our feelings and priorities. For instance, dreaming about cooking and sharing meals might show how much I care for my family and enjoy spending time with them.

建議: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp ('clean gauge' unclear, 'small stiff' wrong, 'saving monies' → 'saving money'). Trình bày rõ kế hoạch cụ thể: mục tiêu, các bước hành động và kết quả mong muốn. Dùng linking words như 'because', 'for example', 'so'.

範例: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true because they motivate me and give me clear goals. For example, I save a small amount of money each month and take short courses to improve my skills so I can get closer to my dream job as a chef.

× Well the rim I had is I wanted to become a chef because it's very interesting and I love cooking for my lover sometime.

✓ Well, the dream I had is that I wanted to become a chef because it's very interesting and I love cooking for my loved ones sometimes.

The sentence has several issues: 'rim' is a typo for 'dream'; missing conjunction 'that' after 'is' to introduce the noun clause; 'lover' is an odd choice in context, 'loved ones' or 'my family' is more natural; 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Suggestion: proofread for typos, use 'that' to introduce clauses, choose appropriate nouns for context and use 'sometimes' for frequency. ID:26

× I often make breakfast with my for my family or make cake for my best friends at weekend.

✓ I often make breakfast for my family or bake cakes for my best friends on weekends.

Errors: 'with my' is extra and ungrammatical; 'make cake' should be 'bake cakes' (collocation and plural for recurring action); 'at weekend' should be 'on weekends' (correct preposition and plural for habitual actions). Suggestion: remove unnecessary words, use correct verb collocations (bake cakes), and use 'on weekends' for habitual weekend activities. ID:11

× Oh well, I don't share my dream with everyone because I value my privacy.

✓ Oh well, I don't share my dreams with everyone because I value my privacy.

Minor issue: 'dream' can be plural when referring to ambitions or recurring dreams. Using 'dreams' sounds more natural. Suggestion: use plural for general statements about hopes or ambitions. ID:12

× I prefer to walk along since it's quicker and let me try the thing I want with the brochure.

✓ I prefer to go along by myself since it's quicker and lets me try the things I want.

Problems: 'walk along' is awkward for meaning 'go alone'; 'let' must agree with subject 'it' and be 'lets'; 'try the thing I want with the brochure' is unclear—'with the brochure' is irrelevant and likely incorrect. Suggestion: use 'go along by myself' or 'go alone', ensure subject-verb agreement, and remove or clarify unrelated phrases. ID:26

× For example, I often play personal project by myself before I'm telling anyone.

✓ For example, I often work on personal projects by myself before I tell anyone.

Errors: 'play personal project' is incorrect collocation; use 'work on personal projects'; 'before I'm telling anyone' uses incorrect progressive form—use simple present or past depending on context; here simple present 'before I tell anyone' is appropriate for habitual action. Suggestion: learn common collocations like 'work on a project' and use simple present for habitual actions. ID:8

× Uh, yes, I think my dream is very special because I am can spend my love with my family or my friends.

✓ Uh, yes, I think my dreams are very special because I can spend time with my family and friends.

Errors: 'I am can' is ungrammatical—modal 'can' should not combine with 'am'; 'spend my love' is incorrect collocation—use 'spend time' or 'show my love'; use plural 'dreams' or rephrase; 'my family or my friends' better as 'my family and friends'. Suggestion: avoid combining 'am' with modal verbs, use correct collocations like 'spend time' or 'show my love'. ID:4

× For example, I am show my feeling and behavior for everyone is very good.

✓ For example, I show my feelings and behave well toward everyone.

Problems: 'I am show' is incorrect—use 'I show'; 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings'; 'behavior for everyone is very good' is awkward—use 'behave well toward everyone' or 'my behavior toward everyone is very good'. Suggestion: ensure correct subject-verb forms and use natural phrases ('show my feelings', 'behave well'). ID:12

× Well I'd want to make my dream come true because they give me motivations and a clean gauge.

✓ Well, I want to make my dream come true because it gives me motivation and a clear goal.

Issues: 'I'd want' (I would want) is conditional and less direct than simple present 'I want'; 'they give me motivations' misaligns singular 'dream' with plural 'they' and 'motivations' is awkward—use 'it gives me motivation'; 'a clean gauge' is incorrect phrase—use 'a clear goal'. Suggestion: use simple present for intentions, match pronouns in number, and use natural collocations ('motivation', 'clear goal'). ID:4

× For examples I said small stiff every month like saving monies and taking cautions so I can more closer to my dream job.

✓ For example, I set small steps every month, such as saving money and being careful, so I can get closer to my dream job.

Errors: 'For examples' should be 'For example'; 'I said small stiff' is unclear—likely 'I set small steps'; 'saving monies' should be 'saving money' (uncountable); 'taking cautions' should be 'being careful' or 'taking precautions'; 'so I can more closer' is ungrammatical—use 'get closer' or 'be closer'. Suggestion: use correct phrases for planning ('set small steps'), use uncountable 'money', and correct comparative expressions ('get closer'). ID:14