梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장 구조와 반복을 줄이고 좀 더 자연스럽고 간결한 답변을 만드세요. 주제 문장을 먼저 말한 뒤 한두 개의 구체적 이유를 연결사(to explain)를 사용해 덧붙이십시오. 예: ‘I rarely remember my dreams’라고 말한 뒤 ‘they feel vivid during sleep but fade quickly after waking’ 같은 구체적 묘사를 추가하세요. 또한 중복(예: "wake wake up", "vanished"와 "forget")을 피하세요.

範例: I rarely remember my dreams. They often feel very vivid while I'm asleep, but they usually fade within minutes of waking, so I can't recall any details.

建議: 문장을 완성하고 불필요한 단어나 어색한 표현을 제거하세요. 주제 문장으로 바로 답하고, 왜 공유하는지 또는 공유하지 않는지 구체적 이유를 하나 더 제시하세요. 예: 'I share them with family when they're interesting because...'처럼 이유와 대상(누구에게)을 연결사로 설명하세요.

範例: I usually share interesting dreams with my family and boyfriend because they enjoy hearing strange or funny stories, and talking about them can be entertaining.

建議: 어휘 선택과 문장 명확성을 개선하세요 ('dim'은 부적절). 주제 문장으로 명확히 답한 뒤, 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 구체적 예를 제공하세요. 문장에서 문법 오류(예: 'serving the best problems')를 고치고 더 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸세요.

範例: I don't think most dreams have deep meanings, but they can sometimes reflect our emotions. For example, when I'm stressed about exams, I often dream about failing, which shows my anxiety.

建議: 응답을 더 간결하고 자연스럽게 구성하세요. 질문의 의미를 짧게 확인한 뒤(어떤 'dream'인지), 주제 문장으로 명확히 답하고 이유를 한 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 중복과 문장 잘림을 피하고 연결사를 사용하세요.

範例: If you mean nighttime dreams, I wouldn't want them to come true because they're usually unrealistic and sometimes disturbing, so I prefer they remain just dreams.

× I'm not good at remembering the dreams I had.

✓ I'm not good at remembering the dreams I have.

The original mixes past ('had') with a general present ability. Use present perfect or simple present to express ongoing difficulty recalling dreams: 'have' (present) or 'have had' (present perfect). Suggested: 'I have trouble remembering my dreams.'

× They feel very vivid while dreaming but vanished when I wake wake up.

✓ They feel very vivid while I'm dreaming but vanish when I wake up.

Tense and verb form mismatch: 'feel' describes current experience during dreaming, so use present progressive 'I'm dreaming'. The verb referring to what happens after waking should be present simple 'vanish' (habitual action), not past 'vanished'. Also remove duplicate 'wake'.

× I tend to share my dreams with my family and my boyfriend when the dreams are very interesting and.

✓ I tend to share my dreams with my family and my boyfriend when the dreams are very interesting.

Sentence was unfinished and ends with an extra conjunction 'and'. Remove 'and' to complete the sentence. Maintain present simple 'tend to' for habitual action.

× Required thing authors.

✓ (Remove sentence or clarify meaning; possibly: 'That's something I usually do.')

This fragment is ungrammatical and lacks a clear subject and verb. Either remove it or replace with a complete sentence conveying the intended meaning. Example replacement preserves context: 'That's something I usually do.'

× I think dreams usually don't have very dim meanings, although they can sometimes reflect our feelings or concerns.

✓ I think dreams usually don't have very deep meanings, although they can sometimes reflect our feelings or concerns.

'Dim' is inappropriate to describe meanings; 'deep' is the correct adjective meaning significant or meaningful. Also maintain negation placement with 'usually don't have'.

× For example, when I have difficulty serving the best problems, then I dream about failing the exam.

✓ For example, when I have difficulty solving the best problems, I dream about failing the exam.

The verb 'serving' is incorrect here; likely intended 'solving'. Remove unnecessary 'then' because 'when' already indicates time. Use 'dream about' is correct for content of dreams.

× If dreams in the question mean the dream which I had at night, then I don't want the dreams to come true because dreams my dreams are very unrealistic and sometimes disturbing.

✓ If 'dreams' in the question means the dreams I have at night, then I don't want them to come true because they are very unrealistic and sometimes disturbing.

Pronoun agreement and redundancy errors: match 'dreams' (plural) with 'mean' -> with quoted word it's singular, better: 'means the dreams' or rephrase to 'If "dreams" in the question means the dreams I have at night'. Use 'them' to refer back to 'dreams' and remove duplicated phrase 'dreams my dreams'. Also use 'are' for present description.

× I don't want. They actually happen.

✓ I don't want them to actually happen.

Split sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. Combine into one sentence with clear object 'them' referring to dreams and place adverb 'actually' before main verb for natural order.