梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để trả lời rõ ràng hơn; tránh tiếng “uh” không cần thiết; viết một câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể; dùng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: interested in, help people with their problems). Hạn chế độ dài trong 3–4 câu, sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc.

範例: Yes, I can. When I was young I wanted to be a teacher, but later I decided to study law. I became interested in legal work because I enjoy handling project contracts and helping people solve their problems. As a result, I focused my studies on relevant subjects.

建議: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt để câu rõ nghĩa; bổ sung liên từ và chi tiết cụ thể về cách họ ủng hộ (ví dụ: lời khuyên, giúp tìm tài liệu); thay “mature” bằng “career” hoặc “path”; giữ 2–3 câu súc tích.

範例: Yes, I do. I often tell my family and friends about my goals, and although they say this career path is difficult, they always support me. For example, my parents give me advice and my friends help me practice public speaking.

建議: Câu trả lời tốt nhưng có thể tự nhiên hơn bằng cách dùng liên từ và biến thể từ vựng; làm rõ mối liên hệ nguyên nhân-kết quả bằng cấu trúc ngắn gọn; giới hạn 2–3 câu và thêm một ví dụ ngắn gọn như bạn đã làm.

範例: Yes, I do. I believe dreams give people motivation because they set clear goals and encourage action. For example, someone who dreams of becoming a musician will practice regularly and seek performance opportunities.

建議: Loại bỏ cụm từ không chính xác như “Oh no” và sửa ngữ pháp; nêu một câu chủ đề mạnh rồi liệt kê các hành động cụ thể bạn làm để đạt mục tiêu; dùng liên từ để mạch lạc và hạn chế 3–4 câu.

範例: Yes, I do. Although I know it will be difficult, I work hard to achieve it. I study English regularly, learn new skills, and practice public speaking to build my confidence and professional abilities.

× when I was young, I wanted to become a teacher, but later I wanted to become a lawyer because I interested in project orders and I want to have people their problems.

✓ When I was young, I wanted to become a teacher, but later I wanted to become a lawyer because I was interested in project orders and I wanted to help people with their problems.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly and omits necessary verbs. 'Interested' needs the past auxiliary 'was' to form the past state. 'I want' should be 'I wanted' to maintain past-tense narrative. 'Have people their problems' is ungrammatical — use 'help people with their problems'. Suggestions: keep tense consistency in narratives (use past tense throughout when talking about past desires) and use appropriate verbs and prepositions (help ... with).

× Yes I do. I share my dreams with my family and my friends and they said to me this mature is really difficult and need to be hard but they always support me.

✓ Yes, I do. I share my dreams with my family and my friends and they told me that this matter is really difficult and needs to be handled carefully, but they always support me.

Pronoun and word-choice errors: 'said to me' is better as 'told me'. 'This mature' seems to be a wrong word choice; 'this matter' fits context. 'Need to be hard' is incorrect; use 'needs to be handled carefully' or 'is hard'. Also maintain tense: 'said' -> 'told' (past) matches earlier context. Suggestions: choose correct vocabulary (matter vs mature), use reporting verb 'told', and ensure subject-verb agreement ('needs').

× Yes, I do. I think dreams give people motivation to pursue what they love because they create a clear goal and inspire its action.

✓ Yes, I do. I think dreams give people motivation to pursue what they love because they create a clear goal and inspire action.

Pronoun reference error: 'its action' is unclear and ungrammatical here. 'Dreams' is plural, so use 'inspire action' or 'inspire them to act'. Suggestions: use clear noun phrases or plural pronouns that agree with antecedents; avoid unnecessary possessive pronouns when a simple noun works better.

× Oh no, I know my dream is difficult to be real, but I always try to do that.

✓ Oh no, I know my dream is difficult to become reality, but I always try to make it come true.

Awkward verb usage and collocation: 'difficult to be real' is not natural English — use 'difficult to become reality' or 'difficult to come true'. 'Try to do that' is vague; 'try to make it come true' is clearer and matches the present-tense statement 'I know' and habitual 'I always try'. Suggestions: use natural collocations (come true, make it happen) and avoid literal translations.

× I always practice English, learn new knowledge and to practice public speaking.

✓ I always practice English, learn new things, and practice public speaking.

Parallelism and infinitive misuse: items in a list should share the same form. The third item uses an extra 'to' ('to practice') while the first two are base verbs. Also 'learn new knowledge' is unnatural — use 'learn new things' or 'acquire new knowledge'. Suggestions: keep parallel verb forms and choose natural collocations.