梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct verb tenses and articles, and keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences). Add one specific detail to make the story vivid, and use a linking word when giving the example.

範例: I don't remember most of my dreams, but a few are very memorable. For example, last month I had a terrifying dream where an unknown man chased me with a machete, and I woke up in panic. It felt so real that I couldn't fall back asleep.

建議: Fix vocabulary errors and sentence structure. Use correct words ("dream" not "gym"), match verb tenses, and finish your sentences. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because", "so").

範例: It depends on the dream. If it's a frightening or strange dream, I usually tell my girlfriend because talking about it helps me calm down. If it's a private or embarrassing dream, I prefer not to share it.

建議: Be concise and avoid filler words like "uh." Start with a clear opinion, then give a specific reason and a brief example. Use linking words ("because", "for example") to connect ideas and choose precise vocabulary ("nightmares" instead of "horror dreams").

範例: I don't think every dream has a hidden meaning. However, I believe stress can influence dreams; for example, when I'm under pressure before exams I often have nightmares because my mind is anxious.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar: avoid filler sounds, use correct conditional forms and articles, and be specific about the dream. Provide one supporting detail and a linking word ("if", "for example"). Keep it within 3 sentences.

範例: It depends on the dream. If it's a realistic goal like having a fulfilling career and a comfortable salary, I definitely want it to come true because I value stability and personal achievement.

× I don't remember all the dreams I had, but certainly there are some dreams that are relatively memorable than others.

✓ I don't remember all the dreams I had, but there are certainly some dreams that are more memorable than others.

Use of 'relatively memorable than' is incorrect. Use comparative form 'more memorable than' when comparing two groups. Also move 'certainly' to natural position. Suggestion: use 'more' + adjective for comparisons and place adverbs like 'certainly' before 'some dreams' or after the verb.

× For example, last month I have a horrible dream that I was chased by a unknown person with a machete and and I woke up because it's horrible.

✓ For example, last month I had a horrible dream that I was chased by an unknown person with a machete, and I woke up because it was so frightening.

The time expression 'last month' requires simple past ('had'), not present perfect ('have'). Also 'a unknown' should be 'an unknown' (article with vowel sound). 'It's horrible' should match past narrative ('it was so frightening'). Avoid duplicate 'and and'. Suggestion: use past tense for events with specific past time and correct articles before vowel sounds.

× Actually, I believe it depends on what kind of gym I had at the time.

✓ Actually, I believe it depends on what kind of dream I had at the time.

The word 'gym' is incorrect here; context requires 'dream'. This is a word choice error rather than a preposition, but it disrupts meaning. Replace with correct noun. Suggestion: read context carefully to choose the intended word.

× For example, if I have a horrible dream that I experienced last month, I was chased by a guy with machete, I would immediately share with my girlfriend and she'll listen to me and she.

✓ For example, if I had a horrible dream like the one I experienced last month, in which I was chased by a guy with a machete, I would immediately share it with my girlfriend and she would listen to me.

Mixing conditional forms and past tense is incorrect. Use second conditional 'if I had... I would...' to describe hypothetical reactions. Also add 'a' before 'machete' and 'share it with' for clarity; finish the clause 'she would listen to me' rather than unfinished 'and she.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent in conditional sentences and complete clauses.

× Personally, I don't think all dreams have special meaning.

✓ Personally, I don't think all dreams have a special meaning.

Adding the indefinite article 'a' before 'special meaning' is more natural in this context. Without the article the phrase sounds awkward. Suggestion: use 'a special meaning' when referring to 'meaning' as a countable idea.

× However, I do believe that if a person is stressed out or having a lot of uh, stress recently, I do think they will tend to have uh, horror dreams instead of normal dreams.

✓ However, I believe that if a person has been stressed recently or is under a lot of stress, they will tend to have horror dreams rather than normal ones.

'Having a lot of stress recently' is awkward; use 'has been stressed recently' (present perfect) to link recent period to present. 'Will tend to have' is acceptable but keep consistent. Use 'rather than' for contrast and 'normal ones' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use present perfect for recent states affecting present and choose concise phrasing.

× Actually, in my opinion, it depends on what dreams that uh to become true.

✓ Actually, in my opinion, it depends on which dreams are going to come true.

Phrase 'what dreams that uh to become true' is ungrammatical. Use 'which dreams' or 'what kind of dreams' and a proper verb structure 'are going to come true' or 'can come true.' Suggestion: use clear clause structure: subject + verb + complement.

× If it is a dream about uh, having a uh, beautiful life in the future, for example, I will get a career that I choose for and have a good salary pay, I would hope it come true.

✓ If it is a dream about having a beautiful life in the future—for example, getting the career I choose and earning a good salary—I would hope it would come true.

Multiple issues: 'a career that I choose for' is wrong; use 'the career I choose' or 'getting the career I want.' 'Have a good salary pay' is incorrect; use 'earning a good salary.' Tense in result clause should match conditional: 'I would hope it would come true.' Also remove unnecessary filler 'uh.' Suggestion: use correct verbs ('get' vs 'getting', 'earn') and consistent conditional forms.