镜子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons. Reduce repetition and correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'when I'm going out'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I do. I check the mirror every morning because I like to make sure my outfit and hair look right before I leave. For example, I often adjust my accessories or makeup so I feel more confident.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific detail about the purchase (when, why, where). Correct grammar (use past tense consistently, plural/singular). Avoid vague phrases like 'unusual item' without explanation.

範例: Yes, I have. I bought a new mirror last year after I accidentally broke my old one. I purchased it online because I wanted a full-length mirror for checking outfits, and it now hangs by my wardrobe.

建議: Start with a direct answer and include one clear reason or example. Correct grammar (past vs present: 'gave', 'when I go out') and use linking words like 'so' or 'for' to connect ideas. Be specific about the type of mirror and situations you use it.

範例: Yes, I do. A friend gave me a small compact mirror, so I carry it in my bag to check my makeup or hair during the day, especially after commuting or before meetings.

建議: Give a direct opinion about decorating with mirrors, then add one specific way you use them. Fix grammar and avoid unrelated comments. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to make your answer coherent.

範例: Yes, I would. Mirrors are my favorite decorative item because they make a small room look brighter and larger. For example, I placed a tall mirror opposite the window to reflect light and create the illusion of more space.

× Yes, I'm very keen on looking at myself in the mirror and I do that on a daily basis.

✓ Yes, I'm very keen on looking at myself in the mirror, and I do that on a daily basis.

Comma needed before coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses; this is punctuation affecting sentence clarity rather than tense, but keep present simple continuous meaning. Suggestion: add a comma to separate clauses for readability.

× I think it's so exciting and I can look over my outfit when I'm going out to.

✓ I think it's so exciting and I can check my outfit when I'm going out.

Use 'check' instead of 'look over' for personal appearance and remove unnecessary preposition 'to' at the end. 'Going out' already conveys the action; 'going out to' is incomplete. Suggestion: use 'check my outfit when I'm going out.'

× Yes, umm bought it when I broke an old mirror so I can buy a new things to use to continue to use it every day.

✓ Yes, umm I bought it when I broke an old mirror, so I bought a new one to continue using every day.

Subject 'I' is missing before 'bought'. Actions are in the past, so use past tense consistently ('bought'). 'A new things' is plural with singular article; use 'a new one'. 'To use to continue to use it' is redundant; use 'to continue using it'. Suggestion: include subject and keep past tense, fix article and redundancy.

× I think it's unusual item in my room.

✓ I think it's an unusual item in my room.

Missing indefinite article 'an' before a singular countable noun. Also 'unusual' modifies 'item' (adjective usage correct) but needs article. Suggestion: add 'an' before 'unusual item'.

× Yes my friend give me a minor mirror so can bring it with me when I'm go out and I can check my makeup or another things in myself by the mirror.

✓ Yes, my friend gave me a small mirror so I can bring it with me when I go out, and I can check my makeup or other things on myself with the mirror.

Multiple errors: verb tense for past action should be 'gave' (third person singular past). 'Minor mirror' is incorrect word choice; use 'small mirror'. Missing subject in 'so can bring' — add 'I'. 'I'm go out' should be 'I go out'. 'Another things' should be 'other things' (plural). Preposition 'in myself' is wrong; use 'on myself'. Use 'with the mirror' for instrument. Suggestion: correct past tense, add subjects, fix word choice and prepositions.

× Yes, I think it's my favorite items in my room so I can decorate anywhere in the small thing.

✓ Yes, I think it's my favorite item in my room so I can decorate with it anywhere in the small space.

Subject refers to a single item, so use singular 'item' not plural 'items'. 'Decorate anywhere in the small thing' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'decorate with it anywhere in the small space/room'. Suggestion: use 'item' and replace 'thing' with 'space' and include 'with it' to show instrument.

× So it's very cute and I use it every day.

✓ So it's very cute, and I use it every day.

Add comma before 'and' to join independent clauses for clarity. Tense is fine (present simple).

× It can easy to block and I still buy a new thing.

✓ It can be easily broken, so I plan to buy a new one.

'Can easy to block' is ungrammatical: use modal + be + past participle/adverb ('can be easily broken') to describe susceptibility. 'Block' is wrong verb; likely 'broken'. 'I still buy a new thing' should be 'I plan to buy a new one' or 'I still buy a new one' depending on meaning; here 'plan to buy' is clearer. Suggestion: use passive structure with past participle and correct noun phrasing 'a new one'.