镜子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like looking in the mirror and how often, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and irrelevant details (e.g. buying a new phone is confusing here). Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g. because, so).

範例: Yes, I like looking at myself in the mirror several times a day. I usually check my appearance before leaving the house because I do my makeup and want to make sure it looks neat. For example, I spend a few minutes adjusting my lipstick and hair so I feel confident.

建議: Start with a direct answer and then give a specific reason and one example. Be careful with repetition (you said you have three mirrors twice). Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ and keep to 2–3 sentences to be natural and effective.

範例: Yes, I have bought mirrors before because I enjoy collecting decorative items. I currently have three mirrors in my room and I plan to buy new ones in different shapes to create an attractive display on my wall.

建議: Give a short direct answer, then add one clear reason and an example. Reduce hesitations and filler words. Use linking words like ‘because’ and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

範例: No, I don't usually carry a mirror because I use my smartphone camera to check my appearance. For instance, I often open the front camera to fix my hair or makeup when I'm out.

建議: Answer directly, then give a specific reason about decoration (e.g. they make the room look larger or brighter). Avoid vague adjectives like ‘designable’ and reduce filler words. Provide one example of how you'd place a mirror or its effect.

範例: Yes, I would use mirrors to decorate my room because they make a space look brighter and larger. For example, I would place a large mirror opposite the window to reflect light and create the impression of a bigger room.

× I already have three mirrors in my room and I'm looking to buy a new phone because I really enjoy uh, preparing and umm, do my makeup in the mirror before going out so I can spend if my makeup is good or not.

✓ I already have three mirrors in my room and I'm looking to buy a new one because I really enjoy preparing and doing my makeup in the mirror before going out so I can see if my makeup is good or not.

The phrase 'buy a new phone' is inconsistent with context (mirrors); change to 'buy a new one' to refer to another mirror. 'Do my makeup' should be 'doing my makeup' to match parallel structure with 'preparing', and 'spend if' is incorrect—use 'see if' to indicate checking the result. Also 'a new one' fixes singular/plural reference.

× I really enjoy buying mirrors for myself and I even have three mirrors in my room and I want to buy new ones in different shapes so I can collect a lot of mirror in my room.

✓ I really enjoy buying mirrors for myself; I even have three in my room and I want to buy new ones in different shapes so I can collect a lot of mirrors in my room.

The final phrase used 'a lot of mirror' which is uncountable/incorrect here; 'mirrors' (plural) is correct. Also streamline repetition: 'three mirrors' to 'three' is acceptable. Using 'mirrors' matches plural quantification.

× No, it's not necessary for me to take a mirror with me because I can use my, uh, mobile phone to uh, check if I'm good or not. So I don't have a mirror to take it with me.

✓ No, it's not necessary for me to take a mirror because I can use my mobile phone to check if I look good or not. So I don't carry a mirror with me.

The phrase 'have a mirror to take it with me' misuses pronouns and word order. 'Take it with me' is redundant and unclear; use 'carry a mirror with me.' Also 'check if I'm good' is vague—'check if I look good' is clearer. Removed filler words and corrected pronoun/reference.

× Yes, I really enjoy having mirrors in my room and I believe that they make the room look, uh, more designable and perfect because everyone can see themselves in the mirror and feel good.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy having mirrors in my room and I believe that they make the room look more stylish and perfect because everyone can see themselves in the mirror and feel good.

'Designable' is not a correct adjective here. Use 'stylish' or 'decorative' to describe appearance. 'More stylish and perfect' sounds natural. The sentence also benefits from removing filler 'uh.'