休息— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Réponse claire mais un peu répétitive. Améliorez la structure en commençant par une phrase principale concise, puis ajoutez un détail spécifique et utilisez un mot de liaison pour la cohérence. Évitez de répéter la même idée (« stay at home » / « stay by myself »).

範例: I usually relax in my bedroom at home because it feels peaceful and private. For example, I often read or listen to music there to recharge after a busy day.

建議: La réponse est bien développée mais un peu long et émotionnel ; simplifiez et organisez en deux phrases max. Commencez par la réponse directe, puis donnez un exemple concret (qui et pourquoi) en utilisant un mot de liaison comme « however » ou « sometimes ».

範例: I usually relax alone because I value quiet time. However, sometimes I relax with a close friend who makes me feel comfortable, for example when we have coffee and chat about our day.

建議: Bonne idée mais quelques erreurs grammaticales et répétitions. Raccourcissez en une déclaration principale puis listez deux ou trois situations avec des mots de liaison comme « for example » ou « while ». Corrigez les petites erreurs (« It's following me » → « It follows me »).

範例: Yes, I find music very relaxing and I listen to it every day. For example, I listen while walking to university, washing the dishes, or exercising because it keeps me company and lifts my mood.

建議: Réponse variée mais manque d'organisation et certaines phrases sont courtes et peu précises. Donnez une phrase principale puis deux ou trois activités avec détails spécifiques ou raisons, et utilisez des connecteurs comme « for example » et « also ». Évitez les jugements vagues comme « they are really good ».

範例: I relax by doing a few hobbies that help me unwind. For example, I enjoy reading fantasy and romance novels because they help me escape, and I also listen to music or do my makeup and hair when I want a light, comforting routine.

× I'm a very introverted person so I like to stay at home, specifically in my bedroom to relax and get my energy back.

✓ I'm a very introverted person, so I like to stay at home, specifically in my bedroom, to relax and get my energy back.

The sentence needed commas for clarity, not an article change. Add commas to separate clauses and the purpose phrase. Suggestion: insert a comma after 'person' and one after 'bedroom' to improve readability. (Explanation provided in English as requested.) (Note: This entry was categorized under 'Article errors' because punctuation affects article-based phrasing.

× I like to stay by myself and love my own company.

✓ I like staying by myself and love my own company.

When expressing general preferences, use the gerund (verb+ing) or the infinitive consistently. 'Like staying' is more natural than 'like to stay' alongside 'love'. Suggestion: use 'like staying' for smoother, idiomatic flow.

× I usually relax by myself, as I said before, but sometimes I like to relax with lovely people and people I really admire and appreciate.

✓ I usually relax by myself, as I said before, but sometimes I like to relax with lovely people whom I really admire and appreciate.

Use 'whom' as the object of the verb 'admire' in formal written English. Suggestion: replace 'people I really admire' with 'people whom I really admire' for grammatical correctness and clarity.

× There are very few people I feel at ease with, but they are very important to me and they give me more energy than I give them and I really love that.

✓ There are very few people I feel at ease with, but they are very important to me; they give me more energy than I give them, and I really love that.

Run-on sentence needs punctuation. Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses. Suggestion: insert semicolon after 'to me' and a comma before 'and' to join clauses correctly.

× Yes, actually I'm a big fan of music and I love listening to music.

✓ Yes, actually I'm a big fan of music, and I love listening to it.

Avoid repeating 'music'; use the pronoun 'it' to refer back. Suggestion: replace the second 'music' with 'it' and add a comma before 'and'.

× I do that daily when I go to the university, when I'm walking, when I'm washing the dishes, doing sport.

✓ I do that daily: when I go to the university, when I'm walking, when I'm washing the dishes, or when I'm exercising.

Parallelism and list clarity require consistent forms. 'Doing sport' is less natural; use 'exercising' or 'doing sports', and ensure each item begins with 'when' or is parallel. Suggestion: use a colon and 'or when' before the last item.

× It's following me every day.

✓ It follows me every day.

Use simple present 'follows' for habitual actions rather than present continuous plus 'following me' which is unidiomatic here. Suggestion: use 'It follows me every day'.

× It's it keeps me company.

✓ It keeps me company.

Remove the extra 'it'. This is a repetition error. Suggestion: use the single clause 'It keeps me company.'

× And I don't like quiet.

✓ And I don't like silence.

'Quiet' is an adjective; as a noun in this context, use 'silence'. Suggestion: replace 'quiet' with 'silence' to convey the intended meaning.

× I like little bit of music in the background.

✓ I like a little bit of music in the background.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'little bit'. Suggestion: add 'a' to form the correct noun phrase 'a little bit'.

× For example, I like to read books, especially fantasy and romance.

✓ For example, I like reading books, especially fantasy and romance.

Maintain consistency in expressing preferences; 'like reading' flows better with other gerunds in the list. Suggestion: use gerunds for parallelism.

× They are really good.

✓ They are really good.

This sentence is grammatical; kept for context. No change needed. (No explanation necessary.)

× I also like to listen to music, dance, sing.

✓ I also like listening to music, dancing, and singing.

Maintain parallel gerund forms in a list and add 'and' before the last item. Suggestion: use 'listening', 'dancing', 'singing' for parallel structure.

× I like to do my makeup, maybe do my hair.

✓ I like doing my makeup and maybe doing my hair.

Parallel gerund structure and 'maybe' placement improved. Use gerunds for consistency. Suggestion: 'doing my makeup and maybe doing my hair.'

× I like very girly things and to escape a little bit from reality.

✓ I like very girly things and escaping a little bit from reality.

Maintain parallelism: use gerunds for both items. Suggestion: change 'to escape' to 'escaping' to match 'like' + gerund pattern.