科学— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete endings.

範例: I don't like science very much because I find it abstract and hard to memorize formulas. For example, I struggle to remember chemical equations, so exams feel stressful and discouraging.

建議: Answer directly with a clear time reference, then provide one specific supporting detail. Use linking words (for example, but, however) and correct verb forms and articles.

範例: I started learning basic science in grade three at primary school. However, our English teacher often replaced the science lessons, so we rarely had proper science classes back then.

建議: Respond directly (name a subject or say none) and give a specific reason. Reduce repetition and correct phrasing (e.g., 'I struggle with memorizing' not 'I'm struggle').

範例: Honestly, none of the science subjects interest me much because I struggle with memorizing important formulas. For instance, physics formulas feel too abstract, so I lose interest quickly.

建議: Give one clear example and describe it briefly with sequence words (first, then, finally). Fix tense and word choice errors and avoid filler sounds.

範例: I haven't done many science projects, but once I grew plants as a class assignment. First I planted seeds and watered them regularly, then I recorded growth and adjusted light, and finally I presented the results to the class.

建議: State your opinion clearly and give a specific reason with an example. Remove hesitation and repetition; use linking words like because or for example.

範例: I don't enjoy science TV programs because some shows include experiments that seem cruel to animals. For example, I saw an episode where animals were harmed for demonstration, so I avoid such programs.

建議: Make a clear general statement and support it with a specific reason or example. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and simplify sentences to avoid confusion.

範例: Yes, many Chinese families visit science museums because they want their children to learn about technology and careers. For instance, parents often take kids to interactive exhibits to inspire future interests like medicine or engineering.

× Oh well. For me I don't like science and science is too abstract for me.

✓ Oh well. For me, I don't like science because it is too abstract for me.

The original sentence uses 'and' to join two clauses that express cause and effect; 'because' more clearly indicates the reason. Also missing comma after introductory phrase 'For me'. Use of a conjunction that matches the relationship improves clarity.

× Also I have difficulty in learning science as I need need to remember the formula of some knowledge and need to take a examination which is very difficult for me and.

✓ Also, I have difficulty learning science because I need to remember some formulas and take exams, which is very difficult for me.

'Have difficulty in learning' is better as 'have difficulty learning' (verb + -ing without 'in'). 'Need need' is a repetition error. 'Formula of some knowledge' is unnatural; use 'some formulas'. 'a examination' uses wrong article and should be plural or 'an examination'. Trailing 'and.' should be removed. Commas improve sentence flow.

× Uh, I remember that I was in the grade 3, uh, in my primary school at the schools open this lesson for us as uh, However, I remember that, uh, the English teacher take to cut the science lesson and she taught the English all the time.

✓ Uh, I remember that I was in grade 3 in primary school when the school opened this lesson for us. However, I remember that the English teacher used to cut the science lessons and taught English all the time.

Use past tense consistently: 'was in grade 3' is fine, but 'schools open' should be 'the school opened' (past). 'take to cut' is incorrect; use 'used to cut' or 'cut'. 'She taught the English' should be 'taught English'. Also remove extra filler words and fix plural/singular agreement.

× She seldom, she seldom mentioned about this.

✓ She seldom mentioned this.

Duplicate phrase 'She seldom, she seldom' is redundant. 'Mentioned about' is incorrect; the verb 'mention' does not take 'about' when followed by a direct object. Place adverb 'seldom' before the verb.

× Uh, to be honest, I don't really think that this all the science and subjects are really interesting to me.

✓ Uh, to be honest, I don't really think that all science subjects are interesting to me.

'This all the science and subjects' is ungrammatical. Use 'all science subjects' or 'all the science subjects'. Remove redundant 'really' when used twice. Adjust word order for natural English.

× As I mentioned about I'm struggle in the memorizing some knowledge of it and some of the formulas are very important as I couldn't fully remember and some of them are too abstract for me.

✓ As I mentioned, I'm struggling to memorize some of it, and some formulas are important but I can't fully remember them; some concepts are too abstract for me.

'I'm struggle' should be 'I'm struggling' (verb + -ing). 'the memorizing' should be 'to memorize' or 'memorizing' with different structure. 'couldn't' refers to past; present inability requires 'can't'. Use pronoun 'them' to refer to formulas. Clarify sentence with conjunctions and punctuation.

× Uh, well, uh, to be honest, I, there's no interesting things I have done with science, but I remember that I try to grow some plants with the help of science as the science teacher give give me a C and then I need to use some knowledge to plan the seeds eventually.

✓ Uh, well, to be honest, there are no interesting things I have done with science, but I remember trying to grow some plants with the help of science because the science teacher gave me a C and I needed to use some knowledge to plant the seeds.

'There's no interesting things' mixes singular 'there's' with plural 'things' — use 'there are'. 'I try to grow' should be past 'I remember trying to grow' to match context. 'Give give' is repetition and should be 'gave'. 'Plan the seeds' is incorrect; use 'plant the seeds'. Maintain consistent past tense.

× No, I don't really like watching science TV program and some episodes are very cruel to animals.

✓ No, I don't really like watching science TV programs, and some episodes are very cruel to animals.

'Science TV program' should be plural 'programs' or preceded by an article 'a science TV program'. Add comma before 'and' for clarity.

× Some scientists in the TV show have experiments with the, uh, cute animals.

✓ Some scientists in the TV show perform experiments on the cute animals.

'Have experiments with' is not idiomatic. Use 'perform experiments on' or 'conduct experiments on'. Remove filler 'the, uh,' and place preposition 'on' correctly with 'animals'.

× For me it is it is crucial. I don't really like to watch.

✓ For me, it is crucial; I don't really like watching them.

Duplicate 'it is it is' should be single. 'I don't really like to watch' is vague; use 'watching them' to specify TV programs. Use semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses.

× I think that many Chinese people often visit science museums as they as most of them are interesting in the science and their children may need to see many things related to science in which is very helpful to their future as someone need to be a doctor is.

✓ I think that many Chinese people often visit science museums because many of them are interested in science, and their children may need to see things related to science, which is very helpful for their future if they want to become doctors.

'Are interesting in the science' should be 'are interested in science' (adjective + preposition). Remove duplicate 'as they as'. 'In which is very helpful' is incorrect clause structure; use 'which is very helpful'. 'Someone need to be a doctor is' is ungrammatical; replace with 'if they want to become doctors'. Ensure correct tense and agreement.