科学— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then briefly explain reasons and give one example. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to connect ideas.

範例: I don't really like science, because I find subjects like biology and chemistry too focused on memorization. However, I enjoy physics since it is more practical and experimental; for example, I preferred lab experiments to memorizing facts.

建議: Give a clear, direct answer with a simple timeline and clarify unfamiliar terms. Use one or two linking words and avoid hesitations and repetition.

範例: I started learning about science in the first grade, when it was called environmental studies. From third grade onwards we studied formal science topics like basic physics and biology.

建議: State your preference clearly and give specific reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid repeating phrases. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I find physics the most interesting because it emphasizes problem-solving and experiments rather than memorization. For example, I enjoyed building simple circuits in class because it showed how concepts work in practice.

建議: Provide specific details and sequence the activities with linking words. Reduce fillers and vague phrases; describe one or two projects concisely and explain why they were enjoyable or what you learned.

範例: I made a pulley mechanism for a class project, which helped me understand mechanical advantage. I also built a model of the solar system, which improved my knowledge of planet sizes and orbits and was a lot of fun to assemble.

建議: Be concise and precise: state your overall view, then give a clear example and explain why you like it. Avoid confusing references (Doctor House -> House, and it's medical drama). Use correct connectors like 'but' and 'because'.

範例: Yes, I enjoy science programmes, especially medical dramas. For instance, I watch House on Netflix because it combines medical problem-solving with character drama, which makes complex cases interesting to follow.

建議: Avoid vague or incorrect statements. If unsure, say so briefly and then give a reasonable opinion with supporting reasons. Use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: I'm not sure, but I think many Chinese people do visit science museums because these museums are educational and attract families and school groups. For example, schools often organize field trips to museums to encourage students' interest in science.

× Well, no, I didn't like the subject because I was not into the science thing.

✓ Well, no, I didn't like the subject because I was not into science.

Remove the definite article 'the' before 'science' and the word 'thing' is informal and unnecessary. The sentence correctly uses past tense 'didn't like' and 'was not', so only a wording correction is needed to make it natural.

× I hate biology, I hate chemistry.

✓ I hated biology and chemistry.

The rest of the response uses past-tense framing, so maintain past tense consistency: change present 'hate' to past 'hated' and combine clauses with 'and' for smoother structure.

× I somewhat like physics, but I was not into the science.

✓ I somewhat liked physics, but I was not into science.

Mixing present 'like' with past 'was not' creates tense inconsistency. Use past 'liked' to match the surrounding past-tense narration and remove 'the' before 'science'.

× I was not doing that great in my science exams also.

✓ I did not do that well in my science exams either.

Use simple past 'did not do' instead of past continuous 'was not doing' for completed exam results. 'That well' is natural collocation, and use 'either' instead of 'also' at the end.

× Well, I started learning about science in in the 1st grade.

✓ Well, I started learning about science in the 1st grade.

Remove duplicated word 'in in'. Past tense 'started' is correct for describing when learning began.

× Yeah, firstly it was in the name of the EVs, environmental studies.

✓ At first it was called EVS, environmental studies.

Use 'At first' rather than 'firstly' for this context and 'called' is the correct verb to describe the name. Abbreviate EVS (no apostrophe) and avoid 'in the name of'.

× After that, when I got into the grade third, it caught science.

✓ After that, when I got into the third grade, I started learning science.

Use 'third grade' word order and 'got into' is acceptable but 'started learning' clearly expresses beginning study; 'it caught science' is ungrammatical and replaced with correct phrasing.

× I really like the physics because it doesn't have to be that I have don't have to remember something.

✓ I really liked physics because I didn't have to memorize as much.

Remove definite article 'the' before 'physics'. Fix tense to past for consistency and replace awkward double negative 'have don't have to' with 'didn't have to'. Use 'memorize' for clarity.

× I, as I already told, told you that I hate chemistry and bio as it as it has all those remembering things.

✓ As I already told you, I hated chemistry and biology because they required a lot of memorization.

Maintain past tense 'hated' to be consistent. Remove the duplicated 'told' and 'as it as it' and use 'required a lot of memorization' for clearer, grammatical expression.

× So I like physics.

✓ So I liked physics.

Change present 'like' to past 'liked' to match the narrative past tense used throughout.

× I like to be more practical rather than the theoretical.

✓ I preferred practical work rather than theoretical work.

Change tense to past 'preferred' for consistency. Replace 'the theoretical' with 'theoretical work' and mirror 'practical work' for parallel structure.

× I still remember I made a pulley thing with for my like that activity project thing and yeah, I really enjoyed making that.

✓ I still remember making a pulley for a class activity project, and I really enjoyed it.

Streamline and correct structure: use gerund 'making', remove filler words 'thing' and 'like', and use 'it' to refer back to the pulley. This produces a concise past-tense sentence.

× I also made the solar system, the planets and everything.

✓ I also made a model of the solar system with the planets and everything.

Specify 'a model of' to clarify the activity and use past 'made' is fine; 'the planets and everything' is informal—explicit phrasing is clearer.

× Yeah, I really like watching science TV programs, although I didn't like the biology, but still I have started watching the series named Doctor House on Netflix as it is all based on the science, all based on the health problems and fixing that problems.

✓ Yeah, I really liked watching science TV programs. Although I didn't like biology, I started watching the series called House on Netflix because it is based on medical science and solving health problems.

Use past 'liked' and 'started' for tense consistency. 'Doctor House' is commonly 'House' and 'called' is better than 'named'. Replace awkward 'all based on the science, all based on the health problems and fixing that problems' with concise 'based on medical science and solving health problems'; fix plural 'problems'.

× Well, I don't have that much knowledge about this, but I think that he is.

✓ Well, I don't have much knowledge about this, but I think they do.

Remove 'that' in 'that much' to be more natural. The original 'I think that he is' is unclear and ungrammatical; replace with 'I think they do' (or 'people do') to convey the intended meaning that people often visit museums.

× Chinese people often visit science museums as it is not limited to only certain people.

✓ Chinese people often visit science museums because they are not limited to only certain people.

Use 'they are' to refer to museums (plural) rather than 'it is'. Maintain plural agreement and use 'because' to explain reason.

× It is available for every people around the world.

✓ They are available to people around the world.

'People' is plural and should not be preceded by 'every' in this way. Use 'available to people' and make the subject plural 'they' to refer to museums or programs. 'Around the world' is fine.