科学— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., "color computing" is unclear — perhaps you meant "organic chemistry" or "chemical equations"). Limit to 2–3 sentences and connect ideas with a linking phrase.

範例: Yes, I do like science because it helps me understand how things work. However, I struggle with chemistry, especially chemical equations, which I find quite difficult.

建議: Give a clear direct answer with a concise reason. Use correct grammar for age/time expressions and avoid filler words. Use one linking phrase to explain why.

範例: I started learning science when I was 14 because my school introduced the subject in the second year of junior high.

建議: Answer directly naming the subject, then give a specific reason. Avoid contradictory words like "not glad"; instead say "not very interested in other sciences." Use clear comparative language.

範例: I find biology most interesting because it is easier for me than other sciences and I enjoy studying animals and ecosystems.

建議: Keep sentences simple and factual. Describe one specific activity clearly (what you did, when, and what you learned). Avoid broken phrases and unclear words — prepare vocabulary (e.g., "dissected a frog," "observed its brain").

範例: When I was 16, I dissected a frog in biology class and observed its organs, including the brain, which helped me understand animal anatomy.

建議: Be concise and avoid repetition. Give one or two specific reasons and an example of a program or topic you enjoy to add detail.

範例: Yes, I enjoy science TV programs because they explain concepts clearly and make learning enjoyable; for example, I like documentaries about wildlife and space.

建議: Answer honestly but concisely. Start with a clear statement of uncertainty, then give a reasoned guess with a specific example or comparison. Use correct phrases like "I am not Chinese" and avoid repetition.

範例: I'm not Chinese, so I don't know for sure, but I think it depends on the person; for instance, some people visit science museums for family outings or school trips, while others do not.

× Yes, I like science, but actually I'm not good at chemistry and the color computing is very difficult for me.

✓ Yes, I like science, but actually I'm not good at chemistry and organic chemistry is very difficult for me.

The phrase 'the color computing' is incorrect and unclear; likely the student meant 'organic chemistry' or another branch. This is an incorrect word choice (adjective/noun misuse). Suggestion: use the correct subject name and keep parallel structure. Also keep 'not good at chemistry' as is since it is correct.

× I was very struggled.

✓ I struggled a lot.

'Was very struggled' mixes passive form with an active verb incorrectly. 'Struggled' is the correct simple past in active voice. Use 'a lot' or 'very much' for emphasis: 'I struggled a lot.'

× I began to study the science when I was 14 because our school, uh, began to learn them at second junior high school, so I began it.

✓ I began to study science when I was 14 because our school started teaching it in the second year of junior high school, so I began then.

'The science' is incorrect article use; 'science' as a subject is uncountable and usually used without 'the'. 'Them' incorrectly refers to 'science' (pronoun error) and 'second junior high school' is unclear; use 'the second year of junior high school'. Also 'began it' is unnatural; use 'began then.'

× I began to study the science when I was 14 because our school, uh, began to learn them at second junior high school, so I began it.

✓ I began to study science when I was 14 because our school started teaching it in the second year of junior high school, so I began then.

Pronoun 'them' is incorrect for 'science' (singular/uncountable) and 'it' should be used. Also fix surrounding wording for clarity. Use 'started teaching it.'

× Umm, actually I'm not glad our science, but I choose biology because it is easy for easier than other subjects for me and I like animals.

✓ Umm, actually I'm not fond of science, but I chose biology because it is easier for me than other subjects and I like animals.

'Not glad our science' is incorrect adjective usage and word order. Use 'not fond of' or 'not very interested in.' 'I choose' should be past 'I chose' if referring to a decision already made; tense must match context. 'Easy for easier than' is redundant and wrong; use 'easier for me than other subjects.'

× I, I don't know how to say in English, but uh, I, when I was 16, I, I wasn't, are the most body.

✓ I don't know how to say this in English, but when I was 16, I dissected a frog.

Original sentence is fragmented and tense/verb choice wrong. 'I wasn't, are the most body' is nonsensical. If the student meant examining a frog's body, a natural past-tense verb is 'dissected' or 'examined.' Use clear past tense to describe a past event.

× I see frog.

✓ I saw a frog.

Incorrect tense and missing article. For past event use 'saw' and include the indefinite article 'a' before countable singular noun 'frog.'

× Uh, I watched their brains or uh, Olligan.

✓ I looked at its brain or the brain tissue.

'mTheir' is wrong for singular frog; use 'its.' 'Olligan' is unclear; perhaps the student meant 'oligodendrocyte' or 'gilligan' which is incorrect. Replace with a clear phrase like 'brain tissue.' Ensure pronoun agreement and correct noun choice.

× It was very good study for me.

✓ It was a very good study experience for me.

Missing article 'a' and slightly awkward noun phrase. Use 'a very good learning experience' or 'a very good study experience' to be natural. Maintain past tense 'was.'

× Yes, I like it because I can learn science more easily easily and the the story of the program is very interesting for me, so that's why I think so.

✓ Yes, I like it because I can learn science more easily and the stories in the program are very interesting to me, so that's why I think so.

Redundant repetition 'easily easily' and 'the the.' 'The story of the program' should be plural or rephrased to 'stories in the program.' Use 'interesting to me' rather than 'for me.' Remove redundancy.

× I'm not yet Chinese so I don't know about the Chinese people, but I guess it's depends on people because in Japanese they every not everyone people likes science so I guess it depends on people.

✓ I'm not Chinese, so I don't know much about Chinese people, but I guess it depends on the person because in Japan not everyone likes science.

'I'm not yet Chinese' is odd; use 'I'm not Chinese.' 'It's depends' wrong verb form; use 'it depends.' Pronoun and determiner errors: 'people likes' should be 'people like' or 'not everyone likes.' Fix word order: 'in Japanese' should be 'in Japan.'