科学— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear words. Correct grammar (use contractions or full forms correctly), and replace vague phrases like "compute the figure" with precise language such as "do calculations".

範例: I don't really like science because I find it difficult, especially chemistry. For example, I struggle with calculations in chemistry, which makes tests and homework very stressful for me.

建議: Give a clear, grammatically correct time reference and one specific detail about the experience. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so") appropriately and avoid hesitations. Correct tenses and articles.

範例: I started learning science more formally when I was 14, in my second year of junior high school. At that time I focused mainly on chemistry, but I didn't enjoy it because I often got low grades and found the topics hard to understand.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence naming the subject, then give specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary (biology, not 'buyer' or repeated words) and link reasons with words like "because" or "since". Keep it concise.

範例: I find biology more interesting than chemistry because it involves learning about living organisms, which feels more intuitive to me. Also, it doesn't require as much complex calculation as chemistry does.

建議: Be careful with sensitive descriptions; describe activities clearly and politely. Begin with a topic sentence about doing experiments, then give a specific, calmly worded example and explain what you learned. Use past tense consistently and avoid crude phrasing.

範例: I enjoyed doing biology experiments at school. For example, when I was 15 we dissected preserved specimens to study animal anatomy, which helped me understand how organs work.

建議: Make a clear, fluent response: state whether you like them, give specific benefits and an example. Avoid filler words and incorrect tense. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I enjoy science TV programs because they explain difficult concepts in a simple way. For example, documentaries often use demonstrations and stories that make chemistry easier to understand and more entertaining.

建議: If you are unsure, say so briefly and then give a reasonable opinion with clear reasons and an example. Use correct sentence structure and avoid repeating words. Finish your answer instead of leaving it incomplete.

範例: I'm not sure about all Chinese people, but I think visiting science museums varies by person. Some people go often for school trips or family outings, while others don't visit much because they prefer shopping or indoor hobbies; for example, I rarely go to museums myself because I prefer studying at home.

× No I don't because it is difficult for me.

✓ No, I don't because it is difficult for me.

Missing comma after interjection 'No' is punctuation rather than grammar; sentence otherwise uses present tense correctly to express.general truth. Add comma for clarity; no tense change needed.

× For example, I can't solve the question of chemistry.

✓ For example, I can't solve chemistry questions.

Use plural 'questions' for general statements about ability (singular/plural issue and natural noun choice). Also 'solve the question of chemistry' is unnatural; 'solve chemistry questions' is clearer.

× It is the most I most difficult subject for me because I can't con Co compute the figure.

✓ It is the most difficult subject for me because I can't compute the figures.

Remove duplicated words 'most I most' and correct verb 'compute' and noun 'figures' plural. The phrase 'most difficult' is correct superlative use; errors were repetition and wrong word forms.

× When I was 14, I began to learn science.

✓ When I was 14, I began to study science.

Use 'study' rather than 'learn' to describe formal education at a specific age. 'Began to study' is the appropriate collocation in English.

× I, I especially chemistry because our school learn to chemistry, uh, to junior second high school.

✓ I especially studied chemistry because our school taught chemistry until the second year of junior high school.

Original sentence has word order and verb problems. Use past tense 'studied'/'taught' to match 'When I was 14' and correct phrase 'junior high school' and 'second year'. Also remove filler and correct verb-object order.

× So, but it was not good memory because I couldn't get great grade.

✓ So, it was not a good memory because I couldn't get great grades.

Use article 'a' with 'good memory' and plural 'grades' when speaking generally. Past tense 'couldn't get' is correct; adjust nouns for natural English.

× In my school students roam both chemistry and the buyer biology I but I prefer to biology because it is easier than chemistry and as I said I didn't like the com calculation of chemistry so I didn't hate bio bio.

✓ At my school, students study both chemistry and biology, but I prefer biology because it is easier than chemistry. As I said, I don't like the calculations in chemistry, so I don't like biology less because of that.

Many issues: 'roam' is wrong verb; use 'study'. Remove extra words 'the buyer' and duplicate 'bio bio'. Maintain present tense for general statements: 'students study', 'I prefer'. Clarify comparison and use 'calculations in chemistry'. The final clause was unclear; corrected to reflect intended meaning without changing tense context.

× I enjoyed the experiment or biology.

✓ I enjoyed the biology experiments.

Use plural 'experiments' and place noun 'biology' as adjective before it. 'Enjoyed' past tense is fine; adjust noun phrase order to natural English.

× When I was 15 our school started to the experience of biology, especially the science study of animals.

✓ When I was 15, our school started biology experiments, especially studies of animals.

'Started to the experience of biology' is ungrammatical. Use 'started biology experiments' or 'began biology practicals'. 'Studies of animals' is clearer than 'science study of animals'.

× So we cut the the animals body and opened.

✓ So we dissected the animals and examined their bodies.

Use 'dissected' when describing cutting animals for study. 'Opened' is vague; 'examined their bodies' is clearer and grammatically complete.

× Yes, because it did.

✓ Yes, because they do.

Refers to 'programs' (plural) in present tense, so use 'they do' rather than 'it did'. Subject-verb agreement and correct reference pronoun are needed.

× These programs teach us to understood, uh, difficult subjects such as chemistry.

✓ These programs help us understand difficult subjects such as chemistry.

Use base verb 'understand' after 'help' (not 'to understood'). Correct verb form and remove filler; present tense fits general truth.

× So, uh, by watching them, I could learn chemistry easier.

✓ So, by watching them, I can learn chemistry more easily.

Use present modal 'can' for general ability and adverbial form 'more easily' rather than adjective 'easier'. This fits habitual/general situation.

× And, uh, it is very interesting because it could include a funny story.

✓ And it is very interesting because it can include funny stories.

Use 'can' for possibility and plural 'funny stories' for generality. 'Could' suggests past or conditional; 'can' is better for general statements.

× Actually, I don't know about the Chinese, so it is my guess.

✓ Actually, I don't know about Chinese people, so this is just a guess.

Use 'Chinese people' rather than 'the Chinese' to be natural and less awkward; 'this is just a guess' clarifies statement.

× This is my guessing.

✓ This is my guess.

'Guessing' is a verb form; use the noun 'guess' for a noun phrase. Simpler and grammatically correct.

× I suppose they it's depends on people and because in Japan, Japanese people, every Japanese people don't go to the MU Science Museum because, uh, the hobby is depend on people.

✓ I suppose it depends on the person. In Japan, not every person goes to the science museum because hobbies differ among people.

Original mixes pronouns and has grammatical redundancy. Use 'it depends on the person' and 'not every person goes' and 'hobbies differ' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× In my case, I don't go to the museum because.

✓ In my case, I don't go to museums.

Complete the sentence and use plural 'museums' for general habits. Removing trailing 'because' completes thought; present tense correctly expresses habitual action.