科学— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì và hình thức động từ), rút gọn câu không cần thiết và phát triển câu chủ đề rõ ràng. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó đưa ra 1–2 lý do ngắn gọn, dùng liên từ phù hợp (because, so, therefore) và tránh lặp ý. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

範例: No, I don't like science. I find it difficult because it requires a lot of logical thinking and careful calculations. As a result, it often takes me much longer to complete tasks than other subjects.

建議: Sửa lỗi trật tự từ và lựa chọn từ (word choice). Trả lời trực tiếp nêu thời điểm (ví dụ: in primary school / when I was 7), rồi giải thích ngắn gọn cảm xúc/khó khăn. Dùng linking word như 'because' và tránh cụm từ mơ hồ.

範例: I started learning science in primary school, when I was about seven years old. At that time it felt very new and difficult because many concepts were unfamiliar to me.

建議: Trả lời trực tiếp và dùng từ chính xác (e.g., 'not keen on most subjects' thay vì 'all resources'). Giải thích lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: topics about the human body) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Giữ câu ngắn, rõ ràng.

範例: I'm not keen on most science subjects because they seem complicated, but if I had to choose I would pick biology. I enjoy biology because it explains how the human body works, which I find fascinating.

建議: Cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể và mô tả ngắn gọn kết quả hoặc trải nghiệm. Tránh lời nói lặp và tiếng lắp. Dùng linking words như 'for example' hoặc 'for instance' để liệt kê hoạt động và mô tả ngắn kết quả học được.

範例: One interesting science activity I did was experiments to investigate temperature change in water bottles. For example, I measured how quickly warm and cold water reached room temperature and learned about heat transfer.

建議: Trả lời rõ ràng, sửa lỗi từ vựng ('theory of science' not 'theory of silence') và dùng cấu trúc mạch lạc: ý chính + lý do + ví dụ. Hạn chế câu dài và sai ngữ pháp; dùng thì phù hợp.

範例: Yes, I enjoy watching science TV programs. I find theoretical explanations a bit dry, but I get very excited when they show experiments because they make ideas easier to understand and spark my curiosity.

建議: Tránh đưa ra kết luận quá chung chung và sửa ngữ pháp số ít/ số nhiều. Trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No/Some do), nêu lí do cụ thể với bằng chứng hoặc ví dụ, và dùng linking words như 'because' hoặc 'for example'.

範例: Yes, many Chinese people visit science museums. In recent years China has made significant advances in science and technology, so people are curious and go to museums to learn and see new inventions.

× Absolutely no, because science required me to thinking logically.

✓ Absolutely not, because science requires me to think logically.

The student used 'no' instead of 'not' for negation and 'required' (past) instead of present 'requires' to match the present-tense general statement (subject-verb agreement). 'Thinking' is the -ing form but after 'requires me to' we need the base verb 'think'. Suggestion: use 'not' with preferences, use present simple for general truths and use 'to' + base verb after 'require'.

× So that is the only subject that I really hate when I learn at school because it is so complicated and is or may make me take so much time to have the answer for that question.

✓ So that is the only subject I really hated when I was in school because it was so complicated and could take me a long time to find the answer to a question.

The original mixes tenses and uses awkward phrasing ('hate when I learn at school', 'is or may make me take so much time to have the answer for that question'). Use past tense 'hated' and 'was' to refer to past schooling. Replace 'is or may make me take so much time to have the answer for that question' with 'could take me a long time to find the answer to a question' for natural English. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and use common collocations like 'take a long time' and 'find the answer to'.

× I started to learn about science when I usual and at a time that was the really news experience for me because this is my first standard I assess with the subject.

✓ I started to learn about science when I was young and at that time it was a really new experience for me because it was the first grade in which I studied the subject.

The sentence has wrong word choice ('usual' -> 'young'), wrong tense and form ('news' -> 'new', 'first standard I assess' is incorrect). Use past tense 'was' and 'it was the first grade in which I studied the subject'. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary ('young', 'new', 'grade') and maintain past tense for past experiences.

× So at that time I felt it's really difficult and really hard to understand that subject.

✓ So at that time I felt it was really difficult and hard to understand that subject.

Mixes present 'it's' with past 'felt'. For past feelings use past tense 'it was'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense when describing past feelings.

× I can say that I'm not really keen on all resources because it so complicated for me to understand that, but if I had to choose, I will choose biology because I find out quite exciting and interesting because I study about body, human or how somebody make.

✓ I can say that I'm not really keen on the subjects because they are so complicated for me to understand, but if I had to choose, I would choose biology because I find it quite exciting and interesting since I study the human body and how people are made.

Problems: pronoun agreement ('all resources' unclear -> 'subjects'), missing verb agreement ('it so complicated' -> 'they are so complicated'), conditional tense ('if I had to choose' should pair with 'I would choose'), incorrect phrase 'find out' -> 'find', and awkward description 'study about body, human or how somebody make' -> 'study the human body and how people are made'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree with nouns, match conditional forms, and use natural vocabulary for anatomy.

× I think the most interesting that I've done with science is that I had the answer for the unusual phenomenon like, uh, how temperature of the water bottle or explain how the magnetic they always close or separate.

✓ I think the most interesting thing I've done in science is finding answers for unusual phenomena, like why the temperature of a water bottle changes or explaining how magnets attract or repel each other.

Errors: 'the most interesting that I've done' -> 'the most interesting thing I've done', tense and preposition issues ('in science'), 'had the answer for' -> 'finding answers for', word choice and grammar in examples ('how temperature of the water bottle' -> 'why the temperature of a water bottle changes', 'how the magnetic they always close or separate' -> 'how magnets attract or repel each other'). Suggestion: use 'thing' after 'interesting', correct prepositions, and use clear phrases for physical phenomena.

× Absolutely, yes. I can say that theory of silence is quite tedious.

✓ Absolutely yes. I can say that theory in science can be quite tedious.

Original 'theory of silence' is incorrect and likely a mistranslation. Use 'theory in science' or 'theoretical topics' and no comma after 'absolutely'. Also 'can be' softens generalization. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and articles; use 'theory' with specification (e.g., 'theoretical aspects').

× But when some TV programs they show the experiments, I really excited about that because I will know more about that and it will tickle my curiosity about science or sound experiments.

✓ But when some TV programs show experiments, I get really excited because I learn more and they spark my curiosity about science and sound experiments.

Errors: unnecessary subject repetition ('programs they show' -> 'programs show'), incorrect adjective usage 'I really excited' -> 'I get really excited', tense mismatch ('I will know' -> 'I learn'), and word choice 'tickle my curiosity' -> 'spark my curiosity' is more natural. Suggestion: avoid redundant subjects, use correct verbs for emotions, and prefer common collocations like 'spark curiosity'.

× Maybe I think that Chinese people is really excited in science because you know that Chinese witnesses are significant growth in this field.

✓ Maybe I think that Chinese people are really interested in science because, you know, China has seen significant growth in this field.

Errors: subject-verb agreement ('Chinese people is' -> 'Chinese people are'), wrong collocation 'excited in science' -> 'interested in science', wrong noun 'witnesses' -> 'has seen' or 'has experienced', and 'are significant growth' -> 'has seen significant growth'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and choose correct verbs for experiencing growth.

× So that is the simple reason to explain that Chinese people, they often visit Science Museum, like to stimulate their brain or like tackle their curiosity.

✓ So that is a simple reason to explain why Chinese people often visit science museums: to stimulate their minds or satisfy their curiosity.

Problems: redundant pronoun ('Chinese people, they'), article and capitalization ('Science Museum' -> 'science museums'), awkward infinitives ('like to stimulate their brain or like tackle their curiosity') -> 'to stimulate their minds or satisfy their curiosity'. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use plural 'museums', and use natural verbs like 'satisfy curiosity'.