科学— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear, relevant and well-structured with a topic sentence and supporting details about your education and career. To improve further, reduce redundancy (e.g., avoid repeating “science” and “strong”) and tighten phrasing. Use one linking phrase to connect education to career (e.g., “as a result” or “consequently”) and correct small grammar issues ("help people manage chronic conditions").

範例: Yes — I enjoy science and exploring new discoveries. I studied medicine and consequently pursued a career in dietetics. Now I help people manage chronic conditions through nutrition, so my scientific background is very useful.

建議: Your answer contains useful content (start time, family influence) but is hampered by hesitations, unclear phrasing and grammar errors. Reduce fillers (uh, umm), use clear linking words (for example, “because” or “which”), and correct collocations ("introduced me to lots of practical experiments"; "built a strong foundation"; "I didn’t need to cram"). Keep it concise (2–4 sentences).

範例: I started learning science in sixth grade. My aunt, who was a biochemistry professor, introduced me to many practical experiments, which built a strong foundation. Because of that, I rarely needed to memorize facts and could focus on understanding concepts.

建議: Good direct topic sentence and an example. Improve accuracy and fluency by fixing grammar (plural/singular: "many topics"; "a teacher explains"; "we have those organs") and add a linking word such as “for instance” or “therefore” to make the connection smoother. Slightly expand with one more specific detail to increase precision.

範例: Biology has always fascinated me because many topics relate directly to our bodies. For instance, when a teacher explains how the heart or lungs work, it’s easy to visualize and remember their functions.

建議: Your answer shows practical applications, which is good, but hesitations and some awkward phrasing reduce clarity (

範例: Yes — I enjoy science and exploring new discoveries. I studied medicine and consequently pursued a career in dietetics. Now I help people manage chronic conditions through nutrition, so my scientific background is very useful.

建議: Your answer contains useful content (start time, family influence) but is hampered by hesitations, unclear phrasing and grammar errors. Reduce fillers (uh, umm), use clear linking words (for example, “because” or “which”), and correct collocations ("introduced me to lots of practical experiments"; "built a strong foundation"; "I didn’t need to cram"). Keep it concise (2–4 sentences).

範例: I started learning science in sixth grade. My aunt, who was a biochemistry professor, introduced me to many practical experiments, which built a strong foundation. Because of that, I rarely needed to memorize facts and could focus on understanding concepts.

建議: Good direct topic sentence and an example. Improve accuracy and fluency by fixing grammar (plural/singular: "many topics"; "a teacher explains"; "we have those organs") and add a linking word such as “for instance” or “therefore” to make the connection smoother. Slightly expand with one more specific detail to increase precision.

範例: Biology has always fascinated me because many topics relate directly to our bodies. For instance, when a teacher explains how the heart or lungs work, it’s easy to visualize and remember their functions.

建議: Your answer shows practical applications, which is good, but hesitations and some awkward phrasing reduce clarity (e.g., "oil free oil cooking", "produce healthier meat", and the final sentence is incomplete). Remove fillers, correct phrases ("oil-free cooking techniques", "preserve flavor and produce healthier dishes"), and finish thoughts. Use a linking phrase like "also" or "in addition" to connect examples.

範例: Recently I learned oil-free cooking techniques such as steaming, poaching and cooking eggs in water; my teacher showed that these methods preserve flavor and produce healthier dishes. In addition, I apply principles of balance and momentum during aerobic workouts to improve my form and efficiency.

建議: Clear answer with personal detail and contrast between past and present. Improve formality and grammar slightly ("I don't have time to watch full programmes"; "cutting-edge technology") and use a linking word like "however" to connect ideas. You could add a brief reason why short videos suit you.

範例: I loved watching National Geographic and the Discovery Channel as a child because I enjoyed learning about nature and technology. However, these days I don’t have time for full programmes, so I often watch short science videos on Facebook to stay updated on cutting-edge developments.

建議: You handled this unfamiliar-topic question reasonably by clarifying your lack of personal experience and citing a source. However, the response contains grammatical errors and vague phrasing ("a Facebook survey I've read a report", "Popular Science museum", plural/singular). Improve clarity by using one clear source description and correct nouns/plurals. Add a linking phrase like "however" and finish with a brief reason why such visits are popular (e.g., education, technology interest).

範例: I’ve never been to China, so I can’t speak from personal experience. However, I read a Facebook report saying China has many popular science museums, and people often visit them on school trips to learn about new technologies.

× Yes, I really enjoy science and I like exploring new discoveries.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy science, and I like exploring new discoveries.

The original sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' when joining two independent clauses. Add the comma to improve clarity and conform to punctuation rules.

× I was strong in science at school and later studied medicine, which led me to a career in the field of dietetics.

✓ I was strong in science at school and later studied medicine, which led me to a career in dietetics.

Remove the unnecessary article 'the' before 'field of dietetics' because 'dietetics' is an academic/professional field and does not require 'the' here. This is an article error related to past-tense narrative. Keep past tense verbs 'was' and 'studied' as they correctly indicate past events.

× Now I help people managing chronic condition through nutrition, so my scientific background is very useful.

✓ Now I help people manage chronic conditions through nutrition, so my scientific background is very useful.

Use the base verb 'manage' after 'help' (help + base form) and pluralize 'condition' to 'conditions' to match the meaning (many people have different chronic conditions). This fixes verb form and singular/plural errors.

× I started learning science in 6th grade.

✓ I started learning science in sixth grade.

Write ordinal numbers in words in formal speech/transcript and 'started' correctly uses past tense. This is a formatting/style correction rather than a tense error; using 'sixth' is standard in formal transcripts.

× Moreover, my aunt was a biochemistry professor. She introduced me lots of uh practical umm.

✓ Moreover, my aunt was a biochemistry professor. She introduced me to lots of practical things.

The original lacks the preposition 'to' after 'introduced me' and omits a noun after 'practical.' Add 'to' and a noun ('things') to complete the object. This fixes incorrect pronoun/preposition usage and sentence completeness.

× So umm umm build my strong foundation to learn many rule and regulations uh regarding science subject.

✓ This helped build a strong foundation for learning many rules and regulations regarding science subjects.

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Recast using a clear subject ('This') and verb phrase ('helped build'), use the article 'a', pluralize 'rule' to 'rules', and use 'for learning' and 'regarding science subjects' to correct sentence structure and agreement.

× I need not to cram anything.

✓ I did not need to cram anything.

In past context, use past modal negative 'did not need to' rather than 'need not to.' 'Need not to' is ungrammatical in this context. Changing the tense to past matches surrounding narrative.

× I was strong at understanding each other.

✓ I was strong at understanding things easily/others.

'Each other' is a reciprocal pronoun that requires two people; it is incorrect here. Replace with 'things' or 'others' depending on intended meaning. The corrected sentence clarifies that the student understood material or people.

× Biology has always been a fascinating subject for me because many topic related directly to our own bodies.

✓ Biology has always been a fascinating subject for me because many topics relate directly to our own bodies.

Pluralize 'topic' to 'topics' and use present tense 'relate' to express a general truth. This fixes quantifier/number agreement and tense.

× For example, when a teacher explain how the heart or lungs work, it is easy to understand and remember since we have those organ ourselves.

✓ For example, when a teacher explains how the heart or lungs work, it is easy to understand and remember since we have those organs ourselves.

Use third person singular 'explains' to agree with singular subject 'a teacher.' Also pluralize 'organ' to 'organs' to agree with 'heart or lungs.' These fix subject-verb agreement and singular/plural issues.

× I have recently learned several oil free oil cooking techniques, uh, steaming, poaching, and cooking eggs in water after my science teacher demonstrated how they preserve flavor and produce healthier meat.

✓ I recently learned several oil-free cooking techniques, such as steaming, poaching, and cooking eggs in water, after my science teacher demonstrated how they preserve flavor and produce healthier food.

Simplify 'have recently learned' to 'recently learned' to match narrative flow (present perfect is acceptable but simple past is clearer here). Hyphenate 'oil-free' and remove duplicate 'oil.' Change 'meat' to 'food' because techniques listed apply broadly and 'cooking eggs' is not meat. Also add commas for clarity.

× I have also applied basic scientific principles such as balance and momentum during my aerobic workout to improve my form and make.

✓ I have also applied basic scientific principles such as balance and momentum during my aerobic workouts to improve my form and performance.

The verb 'make' is incomplete; replace with a noun like 'performance.' Pluralize 'workout' if referring generally. This fixes the incomplete clause and word choice (adjective/noun usage).

× I loved watching the National Geographic and Discovery Channel when I was a child because I enjoyed learning about nature and technology.

✓ I loved watching National Geographic and the Discovery Channel when I was a child because I enjoyed learning about nature and technology.

Add 'the' before 'Discovery Channel' and remove 'the' before 'National Geographic' when used as a proper name. Past tense 'loved' and 'enjoyed' are correct.

× These days I don't have full time to watch a full program, but I often watch short science videos on Facebook to keep up with new discoveries, especially developments in cutting edge technology.

✓ These days I don't have the time to watch a full program, but I often watch short science videos on Facebook to keep up with new discoveries, especially developments in cutting-edge technology.

Use the idiom 'the time' rather than 'full time' in this context. Hyphenate 'cutting-edge.' This corrects article and adjective usage.

× I have never been to China so I can't speak from personal experience, but a Facebook survey I've read a report about China has many Popular Science museum.

✓ I have never been to China so I can't speak from personal experience, but I read a Facebook report saying that China has many popular science museums.

The original mixes clauses and tenses incorrectly. Use simple past 'I read' for the report, add 'saying that' to introduce reported content, lowercase 'popular science' and pluralize 'museums.' This fixes pronoun reference and sentence structure.

× People there often visit these museum for school trips and learning about new technology.

✓ People there often visit these museums for school trips and to learn about new technology.

Pluralize 'museum' to 'museums' to match 'these,' and use the infinitive 'to learn' for parallel structure. This corrects article/number agreement and verb form.