分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は直接的で内容は明確ですが、文法の誤りと語順の不自然さが見られます。また、詳細説明が短く繰り返しがあるため、より自然で流暢な一文＋具体例を加えると良いです。例えば過去の行為を述べるときは過去形を安定して使い、接続詞で情報をつなげてください。

範例: Yes, they did. My parents taught me to share from an early age because they believed it would help me make friends. For example, when I was small they encouraged me to give toys to other children at the park, which helped me become more social.

建議: 答えは分かりやすいですが、文が断片的で冗長な繰り返し（"When When"）や文法ミスがあります。主題文の後に1〜2文で具体例と理由をつなげ、接続詞を使って流れを良くしてください。語彙も少し改善できます。

範例: I usually like to share food with others. For example, if I buy a large portion of French fries at a cafe, I often offer some to my friends so we can enjoy them together, which makes the meal more fun.

建議: 考えは適切ですが、最後が中途半端で文が切れています。理由を具体的に説明し、接続詞（because, so, therefore）で結論につなげてください。また“share”より“lend”や“borrow”の語彙を正確に使うと良いです。

範例: I think money is not suitable for sharing or lending. For example, if a friend borrows money and cannot repay it, it can cause misunderstandings or damage the relationship, so I usually avoid lending large sums.

建議: 時制と語順の誤りが目立ち、意味が不明瞭な箇所（"Anga"など）があります。まずは過去の出来事なら過去形で統一し、誰が誰に何をしたかを明確に述べてください。助詞的な語（about work, with my friend）や接続表現を整理しましょう。

範例: Yes, I shared my feelings with a friend recently about a problem at work. We talked about the situation for a long time, and finally they gave me some useful advice on how to handle it.

建議: 答えは自然で理由も述べられていますが“to”の重複など小さなミスがあり、文がやや長めです。主題文＋短い理由で十分なので、句読点や接続詞を使い分けて簡潔にしてください。

範例: I would share good news with my mother first because she is very supportive and always cheers me up. Making her happy is important to me, so she is the first person I call.

建議: 回答が繰り返しや語彙の誤用（"current event"は不適切）で不完全に終わっています。正しい語彙（"recent news"や"what's happening in my life"）を使い、具体例を完結に述べてください。文は2〜3文に収め、余計な繰り返しを避けましょう。

範例: I usually share recent news about my life with friends, such as getting a new car or starting a new job. For example, when I bought a new car last month, I immediately sent them photos and details.

× My parents taught me to share an early age because they said it is important to make friends.

✓ My parents taught me to share at an early age because they said it was important to make friends.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. The teaching happened in the past, so time expressions and verbs related to that context should be in the past tense. Change 'an early age' to the correct prepositional phrase 'at an early age' and change 'is' to 'was' to maintain past tense consistency. Suggestion: Use consistent tense for past events: 'taught' with 'was'.

× I like sharing food with others.

✓ I like sharing food with others.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Like' can be followed by the -ing form to describe a habitual preference. No change needed. Suggestion: Keep using 'like' + verb-ing to describe general preferences.

× For example, when When I buy a large portion of French fries.

✓ For example, when I buy a large portion of French fries, I usually share it with others.

The original fragment repeats 'When' and is an incomplete subordinate clause lacking a main clause. Combine with the main clause and correct pronoun agreement: 'a large portion' is treated as a single shareable item, so 'it' fits better than 'them'. Also remove the duplicate 'When'. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments by completing subordinate clauses with main clauses and ensure no duplicate words.

× I enjoy having a fun.

✓ I enjoy having fun.

'Fun' is an uncountable noun here and does not require the indefinite article 'a'. Using 'a fun' is incorrect. Remove 'a' to make the noun usage correct. Suggestion: Use 'having fun' for general enjoyment.

× I think lending money is best not to share because for example, if a friend borrows money and cannot repay it, it causes

✓ I think lending money is not a good thing to share because, for example, if a friend borrows money and cannot repay it, it causes problems.

The original has awkward word order ('is best not to share') and an incomplete final clause. Rephrase to 'is not a good thing to share' and complete the sentence with a noun 'problems'. Also add a comma after 'because' for clarity. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases ('not a good thing to share') and finish clauses with appropriate objects like 'problems'.

× Yes, I share my feelings with my friend recently about at work So we talked about Anga and finally they gave us gave me advice

✓ Yes, I shared my feelings with my friend recently about work. We talked about Anga and finally they gave me advice.

The adverb 'recently' indicates past time, so the verb should be past tense 'shared' rather than present 'share'. The phrase 'about at work' is incorrect—use 'about work' or 'about my work'. Remove duplicated words ('gave us gave me') and ensure pronoun agreement: if 'they' refers to multiple people, keep 'they gave me advice'; otherwise adjust to 'she/he gave me advice'. Suggestion: Match verb tense to time markers (use past tense with 'recently'), simplify prepositional phrases ('about work'), and remove duplicated words.

× I'd like to to share good news with my mother first because she is very supportive and always cheers me up so I'd like to make her happy with my good news.

✓ I'd like to share good news with my mother first because she is very supportive and always cheers me up, so I'd like to make her happy with my good news.

There is a duplicated word 'to'. Also the sentence is long and benefits from a comma before 'so' to join two independent clauses. Pronouns are fine. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words and use punctuation to separate clauses.

× I I share I usually share my current event in my life. For example, when I buy a new car, I immediately share my

✓ I usually share current events in my life. For example, when I buy a new car, I immediately tell others.

The original has repeated words ('I I share I') and an incomplete final clause. 'Current event in my life' should be plural 'current events' or 'news'. The example needs a complete verb phrase — 'tell others' or 'share the news'. Suggestion: Remove repetitions, use plural 'events' or 'news', and complete the example with an appropriate verb phrase such as 'tell others'.