分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は直接で意味は通じますが、文法ミスと語順の不自然さ、語彙の繰り返しが見られます。具体的には“when I was a young”は誤りで“when I was young”とし、過去の習慣を述べる際は“we used to share”や“we often shared meals”のように表現を整えると自然です。回答は1文で主旨を述べ、1〜2文で具体例を加えると良いでしょう。

範例: Yes. My parents taught me to share when I was young. For example, we often shared dishes at dinner, so I naturally learned to offer food and take turns with my siblings.

建議: 内容は伝わりますが、文が長く不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。まず短い主文で答え（I like sharing food）を示し、次に理由と具体例を1文で付け加えましょう。関係代名詞や接続詞を使って論理的につなぐと良いです。語彙も“many kinds of food”のように正確に。

範例: I like sharing food with friends. When we go out, I often ask to share plates because I want to try many kinds of food but cannot finish everything myself.

建議: 考えは明確ですが、時制と語順を整理すると自然です。“When flu and corona fought”は不自然なので“During the flu and COVID-19 outbreaks”などにし、“hot pot”を例に理由（close contact, shared utensils）を付け加えると説得力が増します。

範例: During the flu and COVID-19 outbreaks, I thought we shouldn't share hot pot. Sharing utensils and dipping into the same broth can spread viruses, so it's safer not to share such dishes.

建議: 情報はあるが文法と語彙に改善が必要です。“numerous of cakes”は誤りで“numerous cakes”または“a lot of cakes”を使い、過去の行動は過去形で統一（ordered, ate）。また理由を簡潔に述べると良いです。

範例: Yes. Recently I shared a lot of cakes with my friends because we wanted to sample different flavors. I ordered several varieties and we tasted them together.

建議: 答えは適切ですが文法と表現を改善してください。“I familiar with my mother”は誤りで“I am close to my mother”や“I am familiar with her”と表現します。理由を1文でまとめ、具体例（what kind of news）を加えればより良いです。

範例: I would share good news with my mother first because I am very close to her and we talk about our daily lives. For example, I would tell her about a job offer or a personal achievement first.

建議: 意味は分かるが文法・語彙・論理の混乱が目立ちます。“how fairly how felt she”は不明瞭。まず主文で答え（I share surprising or important news like natural disasters）を述べ、次に理由（I was shocked and wanted to check if they were safe）を具体的に説明しましょう。

範例: I usually share surprising or important news with my friends, such as natural disasters. For example, if there is an earthquake or flood, I tell them because I am shocked and want to make sure they are safe.

× So naturally I learn about how to share with my family.

✓ So naturally I learned how to share with my family.

The speaker is referring to a past habit formed in childhood, so the past tense 'learned' should be used instead of the present tense 'learn'. Use past simple for completed actions or habits in the past.

× One kind of things I like to share with others is this is when I catch us up with my friends I often ask them to share the plate because I want to try many kind of food but I can't eat all.

✓ One kind of thing I like to share with others is when I meet up with my friends; I often ask them to share a plate because I want to try many kinds of food but I cannot eat them all.

Errors: 'One kind of things' should be singular 'one kind of thing'. 'Catch us up' is incorrect verb phrase; use 'meet up'. 'Share the plate' should be 'share a plate'. 'Many kind of food' needs plural 'many kinds of food'. 'I can't eat all' should refer to 'them all' for foods. Suggestions: ensure agreement between singular/plural and use correct verbs and pronouns.

× When flu and corona fought all over the world, I thought we shouldn't share hot pot because it caused infection to eat that.

✓ When the flu and coronavirus were spreading all over the world, I thought we shouldn't share hot pot because it could cause infection when people eat from the same pot.

Pronoun and noun issues: use 'the flu' and 'coronavirus' with articles and correct noun form. 'Fought all over the world' is unnatural; use 'were spreading'. 'It caused infection to eat that' is ungrammatical; clarify subject and use 'could cause infection when people eat from the same pot'. Use modal 'could' for possibility.

× Yes, recently I shared numerous of cakes with my friends because we wanted to try many kind of taste. So I ordered a lot of cakes and eat that.

✓ Yes, recently I shared numerous cakes with my friends because we wanted to try many kinds of flavors. So I ordered a lot of cakes and ate them.

'Numerous of cakes' should be 'numerous cakes' (no 'of'). 'Many kind of taste' needs plural 'many kinds of flavors' (or 'many different flavors'). Final clause: past tense 'ate' instead of 'eat', and refer to 'them' (the cakes). Maintain past tense consistency.

× My mother is the first person I would like to share good news with because I familiar with my mother and we always talk about daily life so I want to share with her.

✓ My mother is the first person I would like to share good news with because I am close to her and we always talk about daily life, so I want to share it with her.

'I familiar with my mother' is missing verb; use 'I am familiar with' or better 'I am close to her'. Avoid repeating 'my mother'. Also specify 'share it with her' to refer to the news. Use commas to join clauses.

× One kind of news I shared with my friends was natural disaster because I was surprised about the news and I wanted to know how fairly how felt she.

✓ One kind of news I shared with my friends was about natural disasters because I was surprised by the news and I wanted to know how she felt about it.

Use 'about natural disasters' for the topic. 'Surprised about' should be 'surprised by'. The clause 'how fairly how felt she' is ungrammatical; correct word order is 'how she felt about it'. Maintain past tense and proper word order for indirect questions.