分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cümle yapınızı ve zaman kullanımınızı düzeltmelisiniz. Ayrıca cevabınız net bir konu cümlesiyle başlamalı ve gereksiz tekrarlar kaldırılmalı. Duygularınızı ve nedenlerinizi kısa örneklerle destekleyin. Bağlaçlar (but, because) doğru yerlerde ve düzgün biçimde kullanılmalı; ayrıca kelime seçimi (refuse → resisted/was reluctant) daha uygun olmalı.

範例: My parents had different influences on me. My father encouraged me to share, but my mother promoted independence, so I was torn between the two. For example, my father would ask me to lend my toys to neighbors, while my mother told me to keep them safe. Because of this, I learned to share selectively.

建議: Cevabınızda doğrudan konu cümlesi kullanın ve nedenleri açıkça belirtin. Gereksiz dolgu sözcükleri (maybe, kinda, umm) azaltılmalı. Bağlaçlarla (instead of, because) mantığı net açıklayın ve örnek verin.

範例: I prefer to share ideas rather than physical possessions. For instance, I often discuss books and creative projects with friends because I value intellectual exchange more than lending my clothes or food.

建議: Cümleleriniz anlamsal olarak dağınık ve belirsiz; doğrudan cevap verip açık örnekler kullanmalısınız. "Special" ve "soul" gibi soyut ifadeleri somut örneklerle destekleyin. Maksimum 3-4 kısa cümle kullanın ve bağlaçlarla netlik sağlayın.

範例: Personal items that reflect my identity are not suitable for sharing. For example, I would not share a diary or personal letters because they reveal my private thoughts and feelings. These items are too personal to give to others.

建議: Cevabınızı daha düzenli ve dilbilgisi açısından doğru kurun. "Share myself" ifadesi yerine "share posts" veya "share personal stories" kullanın. Neden paylaştığınızı ve takipçilerden beklentinizi belirtin. İngilizce fiil uyumuna dikkat edin (I want → I wanted/ I want).

範例: Recently I have been sharing personal posts on my Instagram. I post photos and short stories because I enjoy getting feedback from friends and followers. For example, I shared a travel photo last week and asked for recommendations in the comments.

建議: Cevabınızda karışık ifadeler ve eksik nedenler var. Öncelikle doğrudan kim olduğunu söyleyin, sonra kısaca nedenini açıklayın. Aileyle paylaşmama nedeninizi net bir şekilde ifade edin ve cümleleri tamamlayın.

範例: The first person I would share good news with is my roommate. I trust them because we spend a lot of time together and they always support me. I sometimes don't tell my family right away because I prefer to process things with someone close first.

建議: Cümleleri tamamlayıp hedef kitlenizi doğru belirtmelisiniz (friends yerine family karışmış). Haber türlerini net kategorilerle ifade edin ve kısa örnekler verin. Bağlaçları düzgün kullanın ve cümleyi bitirin.

範例: I usually share creative or interesting information with my friends, such as articles, book recommendations, and ideas from what I read. For example, if I find an inspiring essay, I will send the link and explain why I liked it.

× Yes my father helps me to being a sharing person but I kinda refuse this idea because on to the other side my mother sets me be a selfish person and I choose this.

✓ Yes, my father helped me to become a sharing person, but I kind of rejected this idea because, on the other hand, my mother encouraged me to be a selfish person and I chose that.

The sentence has multiple tense and verb form issues. 'helps' should be past 'helped' to match 'when you were a child' context (Past tense issue but primarily third person singular form and tense), 'to being' is incorrect; use the infinitive 'to become'. 'kinda' is informal; use 'kind of'. 'sets me be' is ungrammatical; use 'encouraged me to be'. Also maintain consistent past tense. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent with past context and use correct infinitive forms. Problem Type IDs: 2 and 5.

× Maybe this is kinda sounds like abstract things, but I love to share my own ideas with the other persons but instead of sharing concrete things such as my foods or my clothes because they are umm.

✓ Maybe this kind of sounds abstract, but I love to share my ideas with other people rather than sharing concrete things such as my food or my clothes because they are personal.

Errors include informal 'kinda', incorrect plural 'the other persons' should be 'other people', and 'my foods' should be 'my food'. 'sounds like abstract things' is awkward; use 'sounds abstract'. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary -ing constructions here and use correct countable/uncountable nouns and natural phrasing. Problem Type IDs: 8 and 1.

× That makes me a special being in a being a human should be belongs to me instead of sharing the others, because at so illustrates when I see a clause reflects myself and my own soul so others this is special for me.

✓ That makes me feel special; as a human being, some things should belong to me and not be shared with others, because, for example, when I find something that reflects myself and my soul, it is special to me.

Many structure issues: 'a special being in a being a human' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'as a human being'. 'should be belongs to me' mixes modal and verb forms; use 'should belong to me'. 'sharing the others' should be 'sharing with others'. The latter part is unclear; reworded to convey meaning. Suggestion: simplify clauses, use correct verb forms after modals, and ensure prepositions like 'with' are used correctly. Problem Type ID: 26.

× Maybe it sounds as if I make a humorous thing, but I share myself with others recently on my Instagram accounts and I wants to make a comments from others on my Instagram.

✓ Maybe it sounds as if I were doing something humorous, but I have recently shared myself with others on my Instagram account and I want to get comments from others on my Instagram.

Tense and agreement errors: 'sounds as if I make' should be subjunctive/past-like 'sounds as if I were doing' or 'it may sound like', 'share myself... recently' should use present perfect 'have recently shared'. 'accounts' should be singular 'account' if referring to one, and 'wants' must be 'want' to agree with subject 'I'. 'make a comments' is incorrect; use 'get comments' or 'receive comments'. Suggestion: use consistent tense, correct subject-verb agreement, and natural collocations. Problem Type IDs: 5 and 27.

× This is my roommate, still not July. Because maybe you can think about why you share, why you not share with your success with your family. Because I really hide my success from my family because they maybe can.

✓ I would share it with my roommate first, although not yet in July. Maybe you wonder why I do or do not share your successes with your family. I really hide my successes from my family because they might react in certain ways.

Unclear structure and pronoun errors: 'This is my roommate' is abrupt; 'I would share it with my roommate' fits question. 'still not July' unclear; rephrased. 'why you not share with your success with your family' mixes pronouns; should be 'why I do or do not share my successes with my family'. 'they maybe can' is incomplete; clarified to 'they might react'. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent and complete modal expressions. Problem Type IDs: 26 and 12.

× If I see any creative information, what's I read about, I share with in my family my own information, my own ideas, what I think about the books, because sometimes I don't understand what I.

✓ If I find any creative information or read something interesting, I share my information and ideas with my family, such as what I think about books, because sometimes I do not understand everything myself.

Preposition and pronoun issues: 'what's I read about' should be 'or read something interesting', 'share with in my family' wrong preposition order; use 'share with my family'. 'what I' is incomplete; finish the thought 'do not understand everything myself'. Suggestion: reorder phrases for clarity, use correct prepositions, and complete clauses. Problem Type IDs: 11 and 12.