分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently and avoid filler sounds (uh). Use linking words like 'for example' correctly.

範例: Yes. My parents taught me to share when I was a child. For example, they encouraged me to give my toys to friends and to take turns, which helped me learn empathy and cooperation.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence naming specific items, then explain why you share them. Use correct nouns and simple linking words (because, so, for example). Avoid confusing words like 'date' or 'tape'—choose the intended words (e.g. clothes).

範例: I usually share clothes with my sister. For example, we often swap shirts because we have similar tastes, so it saves money and makes it easy to borrow outfits.

建議: Start with a clear opinion and give a specific example with reason. Use correct vocabulary (personal items, hygiene). Use linking words like 'because' to explain why they are unsuitable to share.

範例: I think personal items are not suitable for sharing. For example, you should not share phones or toothbrushes because they are unhygienic and may spread germs.

建議: Answer clearly with a past or present perfect sentence describing what you shared and why. Keep sentences short and coherent; use correct pronouns and tenses. Provide one concrete detail about the item and situation.

範例: Yes. Recently I lent my yellow jacket to a friend because she had to go to work and forgot hers. She returned it the next day and I was happy to help.

建議: Begin with a direct answer (name the person), then give a specific example of the kind of news you would share and why. Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary (promoted, tell her first).

範例: I would definitely tell my mum first. For example, when I got promoted at work, she was the first person I called because she always supports and celebrates my achievements.

建議: State clearly the kinds of news you share, then give one or two specific examples. Use linking words like 'for example' and avoid repetition. Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

範例: I usually share everyday news with my friends, such as plans or small events. For example, I tell them about my weekend activities and I also share special news like relationship updates or job changes.

× Yes, uh, I did when I was a child. I remember watch my parent teach me sharing something which order for example I usually sharing.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child. I remember watching my parents teach me to share things; for example, I used to share often.

The sentence mixes past simple with incorrect verb forms. 'Watch' should be past participle/gerund 'watching' after 'remember'. 'Parent' should be plural 'parents'. 'Teach me sharing something' is incorrect; use 'teach me to share things'. 'I usually sharing' needs past habit 'I used to share' or 'I shared often'. Use consistent past tense for childhood events and correct verb forms. Suggestion: Use 'remember + -ing' for memories (I remember watching...), pluralize nouns when referring to both parents, and express past habits with 'used to'.

× Well I usually share church date. For example I sharing date or shirt with my sister is because we usually like the same tape and.

✓ Well, I usually share clothes. For example, I share dresses or shirts with my sister because we usually like the same styles.

'Share church date' is nonsensical; likely meant 'share clothes'. 'Sharing date' is wrong form; use 'I share'. 'Tape' is incorrect word choice; 'style' fits context. Prepositions are not the main issue but word choice and verb form require correction. Suggest using correct nouns and present simple 'I share' for habitual actions and 'because' to connect reason. Suggestion: Use clear nouns ('clothes', 'shirts') and present simple for regular habits.

× In my opinion, I think uh, some something impersonal is doesn't check for other people, for example, uh, for example phone.

✓ In my opinion, some personal items should not be shared with other people; for example, a phone.

The original has redundant words ('some something') and incorrect verb structure 'is doesn't check'. Use a clearer noun phrase 'personal items' and modal 'should not be shared' to express suitability. Also include the indefinite article 'a' before 'phone'. Suggest simplifying and using 'should not be shared' for advice.

× Yes I do recently I just checked my favorite date is yellow one with my friend because she have work and she want to you do it. Yes I keep her to.

✓ Yes, recently I lent my yellow jacket to my friend because she had work and needed it. I helped her.

Tense and word choice are incorrect. 'Do recently I just checked' is wrong; use 'recently I lent'. 'Date' likely meant 'jacket' or 'coat' and needs correct noun. 'She have' should be 'she had' (past). 'She want to you do it' is unclear; use 'she needed it'. 'I keep her to' is incorrect; 'I helped her' or 'I lent it to her'. Maintain past tense for a recent completed action.

× Uh, 100% sure go my mum, I usually share something with her. Uh, for example when I give promote from my job, I want to share her the third one.

✓ I'm 100% sure I'd tell my mum first; I usually share things with her. For example, when I got a promotion at my job, I wanted to tell her first.

Pronouns and verb forms are incorrect: 'go my mum' should be 'I'd tell my mum' or 'I would go to my mum'. 'Give promote' is wrong; use 'got a promotion'. 'Share her the third one' is unclear—likely meant 'tell her first'. Use correct pronouns and past tense for completed events. Suggest rehearsing 'tell someone' and 'get a promotion'.

× Well, actually I share, uh, daily life with my friend. Yes, I tend to share daily life, but uh, some is have something something special I usually share with.

✓ Well, actually I share my daily life with my friends. I tend to share everyday experiences, but when something special happens I usually share that.

Use plural 'friends' if referring generally and possessive 'my daily life'. 'Some is have something something special' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'when something special happens'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions and use clear noun clauses. Suggest practicing subject-verb-object order and using 'when' clauses for conditions.