分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Add one specific example to support the statement and use a linking word if needed.

範例: Yes. My parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, my mother always encouraged me to give toys to neighborhood children, so I learned generosity early on.

建議: Respond directly with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice and fewer hesitations. Use a linking word to list types and give a specific example of an idea or advice you shared.

範例: I like to share both physical items and ideas. For instance, I often give books to friends and also offer career advice when a colleague asks for feedback.

建議: Give a direct answer and avoid filler words. Use correct sentence structure and provide a clear reason and brief example why certain things are private.

範例: I think personal secrets and financial information are not suitable for sharing because they can harm relationships. For example, I would never reveal a family member's medical condition without their permission.

建議: Answer clearly and use the present perfect or present continuous correctly. Provide a specific recent example and link it to the reason you shared it.

範例: Yes, recently I've been sharing personal updates with my friends. For example, I told them about a new project at work and how it's affecting my schedule.

建議: Use singular/plural forms correctly and make the response natural. Start with a topic sentence, give a reason and a brief example of a recent good news you shared.

範例: I would tell my family first, especially my parents, because they are my priority. For instance, I called my mother first when I got a promotion because I knew she would be happiest for me.

建議: Provide a straightforward opening sentence, use correct tense and be specific about types of news. Give one concrete example of a topic you recently shared.

範例: I usually share personal updates and work-related news with friends. For example, I told them last week about a challenging project deadline and how I planned to manage it.

× Absolutely, my parents wants to to share what what I have to others because this is how Filipino looks or define if you're a something like that person.

✓ Absolutely, my parents wanted me to share what I have with others because this is how Filipinos are raised or defined.

Error: 'wants' is incorrect because the subject 'my parents' is plural and requires the base verb form without -s for present tense; however context refers to past teaching so 'wanted' is more appropriate. Also 'to to' is a duplication and 'what what' is repeated. Preposition 'to others' should be 'with others'. 'Filipino looks or define if you're a something like that person' was unclear; corrected to 'Filipinos are raised or defined' to convey cultural upbringing. Suggestion: match subject-verb agreement, remove duplicate words, choose correct tense, and use appropriate prepositions.

× I'm not only a gift, something like that, but idea or a a advice to to others so that they can improve or they can change their mind if needed.

✓ I don't only give gifts, but I also share ideas or advice with others so they can improve or change their minds if needed.

Errors: 'I'm not only a gift' is incorrect meaning and structure; use 'I don't only give gifts' to express action. 'a a advice' duplicates and 'advice' is uncountable so no article 'a' should be used. 'to to' duplicate and preposition 'with others' is correct. 'change their mind' needs plural 'minds' to match 'others'. Suggestion: fix quantifier/article usage for uncountable nouns, remove duplicates, and maintain plural agreement.

× Uh, for me, uh, they not shareable for sharing. Is that your secrets, your secrets for your family or for your dear friends? What about what are you talking about, about secrets? So don't be uh, uh, share it to others.

✓ For me, some things are not shareable, such as your family secrets or secrets for your close friends. If you are talking about secrets, do not share them with others.

Errors: 'they not shareable for sharing' lacks auxiliary and correct word order; use 'are not shareable' with plural agreement. Repetition 'your secrets, your secrets' removed. Preposition 'share it to others' should be 'share them with others' and pronoun number corrected. Suggestion: use correct 'there be' style with 'are' for plural items, avoid repetition, and use proper prepositions and pronouns.

× Yeah, recently I share a lot of story to my friends and I know what is happening to my life as of now.

✓ Yeah, recently I have shared a lot of stories with my friends and I know what is happening in my life right now.

Errors: 'I share' should be present perfect 'I have shared' when referring to recent actions affecting present. 'a lot of story' incorrect count; use plural 'stories' or 'a lot of stories'. Preposition 'to my friends' should be 'with my friends'. 'what is happening to my life' should be 'in my life' and 'as of now' is awkward; use 'right now'. Suggestion: use present perfect for recent actions, correct plural nouns, and appropriate prepositions.

× I would like to share a good news with my families and also my girlfriend because they are the priority of my life and you can trust with them.

✓ I would like to share good news with my family and also my girlfriend because they are my priorities in life and I can trust them.

Errors: 'a good news' incorrect article; 'news' is uncountable so no 'a'. 'families' should be singular 'family' in this context. 'they are the priority of my life' needs plural 'priorities' to match 'family and girlfriend' or rephrase; corrected to 'my priorities in life'. 'you can trust with them' is ungrammatical; intended 'I can trust them' or 'they are people I can trust'. Suggestion: fix article usage with uncountable nouns, use correct singular/plural nouns, and correct pronouns and verb phrases.

× Actually about my life, what is happening to my life as of now at the rest of the moment, and about my work, how's my day? Something like that.

✓ I usually share updates about my life—what is happening right now—and about my work, how my day went, things like that.

Errors: awkward and repetitive phrasing 'about my life, what is happening to my life as of now at the rest of the moment' should be streamlined. Preposition 'to my life' incorrect; use 'in my life' or 'about my life'. 'how's my day?' should be 'how my day went' to match past reference or 'how my day is' for current. Suggestion: use clear, concise phrases, correct prepositions, and consistent tense when describing typical sharing topics.