自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organise details with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid unclear phrasing (e.g. “they my father removed”). Use linking words to show sequence.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. At first it was a four‑wheeled training bike, but later my father removed the two rear wheels so it became a regular two‑wheel bicycle, which helped me learn to balance.

建議: Answer directly with correct subject and grammar, give a reason and a specific example. Replace filler words (umm) and vague adjectives like “usable” with precise vocabulary. Use a linking word to introduce reason.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people cycle to work or to the market since traffic and parking are difficult in cities.

× It was a four wheel bike but later they my father removed the two wheels in the back so it became a normal 2 wheel bike.

✓ It was a four-wheel bike, but later my father removed the two wheels in the back, so it became a normal two-wheel bike.

The sentence contains an incorrect pronoun 'they' before 'my father'; this is unnecessary and makes the sentence ungrammatical. Remove 'they' and add hyphens in compound adjectives ('four-wheel', 'two-wheel') and commas for clarity. Also spell out the number 'two' for consistency. Suggestion: omit stray pronouns, use hyphens for compound adjectives, and punctuate clauses with commas.

× His bike is very popular in my country because it is really convenient and also very, umm, usable.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because they are really convenient and easy to use.

The original answer uses 'His bike' which incorrectly refers to a specific person and doesn't match the general question about bikes in the country. Use the general plural subject 'Bikes' and the corresponding plural pronoun 'they'. Replace awkward adjective 'usable' with the more natural phrase 'easy to use'. Also remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: match noun reference to the question (general vs specific) and use natural collocations.