自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Сфокусируйтесь на чёткой и связной структуре ответа: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте 1–2 детали (например, кто помогал, как вы учились, какие эмоции вы испытывали). Избегайте повторов и заполнителей («uh», повтор «helped me»). Максимум 3–4 предложения. Употребляйте правильные слова (не «write», а «ride»).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me how to ride it in our neighborhood park, and I remember feeling very proud the first time I cycled without help. That bike allowed me to explore the area and spend more time outdoors.

建議: Сделайте ответ более естественным и конкретным: начните с прямого мнения, затем приведите 2 конкретных причины с примерами или сравнениями. Связывайте идеи словами-связками (for example, moreover, in addition). Избегайте ошибок в времени и согласовании (например, "it's helped" → "they help" или "cycling helps").

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles for short commutes because they are faster than walking and help avoid traffic. In addition, cycling is common in parks and university areas, especially among students and commuters.

× My dad, uh, helped me, helped me to learn how to write.

✓ My dad helped me learn how to ride a bike.

The student incorrectly used 'to learn' with repeated 'helped me' and wrote 'write' instead of 'ride'. With 'help' the noun/verb pattern is 'help someone do something' or 'help someone to do something'; the past participle form is not required here but clarity demands removing repetition. Also 'write' is a lexical error; context about bikes requires 'ride'. Suggestion: use 'My dad helped me learn how to ride a bike.'

× I support that bikes are popular in my country because it's a great way to move in the city fast.

✓ I think that bikes are popular in my country because they are a great way to get around the city quickly.

'Support' is not the correct verb to express opinion; use 'think'. 'It's' (singular) refers to 'bikes' plural; use 'they are'. 'Move in the city fast' is awkward: use 'get around the city quickly'. Suggestion: use 'I think that bikes are popular in my country because they are a great way to get around the city quickly.'

× Moreover, it's helped to avoid the traffic jams.

✓ Moreover, they help avoid traffic jams.

'It's helped' is incorrect because 'it' is singular and 'helped' (past) doesn't fit the general statement. Use present simple for general truths: 'they help'. Also 'the traffic jams' is unnecessary; use 'traffic jams' without 'the'. Suggestion: 'Moreover, they help avoid traffic jams.'

× Also, you can use it in the parks.

✓ Also, you can use them in parks.

Pronoun 'it' refers to a singular noun but 'bikes' is plural, so use 'them'. Also 'the parks' is unnecessary unless referring to specific parks; 'in parks' is more natural. Suggestion: 'Also, you can use them in parks.'