自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unnecessary or repetitive phrases and correct grammar (e.g., tense, articles, plurals). For example, say you didn’t have a bike, briefly explain why, and give a short concrete detail about what you saw instead.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my family couldn’t afford one. Instead, I remember watching other children ride past our street, and only wealthier families owned bicycles in my neighbourhood.

建議: Answer directly and organize your points with linking words. Use correct grammar and be specific about who uses bikes and why. Offer one clear reason and one short example or comparison. Keep it within 2–3 sentences to remain natural.

範例: Yes, bicycles are common in Nigeria, but their popularity varies by area. In wealthier neighbourhoods and among students, bikes are often used for commuting to school, whereas in poorer areas many families cannot afford them.

× No, my parents could not even afford 3 square meals, not more of a bike so they couldn't afford it.

✓ No, my parents could not even afford three square meals, let alone a bike, so they couldn't buy one.

This sentence shows inappropriate modal verb phrasing and redundancy. 'Could not afford' is fine, but 'not more of a bike' is ungrammatical. Use a fixed expression 'let alone' to contrast necessities and luxuries. Also spell out numbers ('three') in speech-style writing and use 'buy one' for clarity.

× We only see bike passing so I've never gotten any of the bike.

✓ We only saw bikes passing, so I never had a bike.

Tense and verb form issues: the context is past time ('when you were a child'), so use simple past 'saw' not present 'see' or present perfect 'I've never gotten'. 'Bike' needs plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'Gotten' is awkward here; use 'had' to indicate possession in the past. Also use 'so' to link clauses correctly.

× Yes, bike are very popular in my country Nigeria, but so many the environment where I grew a lot of poor people.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, Nigeria, but in the area where I grew up there were a lot of poor people.

Multiple issues: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to agree with verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). The clause describing location and past time needs 'where I grew up' and past 'there were' to match past context. Also insert commas around 'Nigeria' and reorder words for grammatical sentence structure.

× The only people that could have afford a bike are the rich people, so we only see them riding to school.

✓ Only rich people could afford a bike, so we only saw them riding to school.

Mix of modal perfect and tense mismatch: use simple past 'could afford' (not 'could have afford' which mixes modal perfect with base verb) and past 'saw' to keep past narration consistent. 'That' can be omitted; 'only rich people' is clearer. Maintain past tense throughout the response.