自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 语法与时态不一致，需要把过去的经历用过去时完整表达；句子冗长且有重复（例如“everyday weekend, every weekend”与“with my friends”重复），应分成两三句更自然；注意单词拼写（writing → riding）和冠词使用。可以用连接词（for example, often, because）使表达更连贯，并补充具体细节（公园的名字、骑行的感觉或学到的技能）。

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike for my seventh birthday, and I often rode it to the nearby park with my friends. We usually went every weekend, and those rides made me feel free and happy because I could explore the neighbourhood and play games with them.

建議: 回答清晰、时态正确，内容具体且相关。但可以用更多多样词汇和连接词丰富表达（例如 furthermore, moreover, for instance），并给出更具体的例子或对比（比如在城市与乡村的差异、政府的自行车道）。避免重复词汇（many people / them）。

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For instance, I often see people cycling to work or school because it is a cheap and convenient way to commute. Moreover, in big cities with heavy traffic, many cyclists prefer dedicated bike lanes, which makes cycling faster than driving during rush hour.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

原句与考官提问的时间一致性不符。考官问的是过去（“when you were a child”），因此应使用过去时。建议将“have”改为过去式“had”，以保持时态一致。

× When I was a child my parents bought it for me on my 7th birthday and I used to ride it to the park everyday weekend, every weekend when my friend with my friends, which made me feel very free and happy.

✓ When I was a child my parents bought it for me on my 7th birthday, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend with my friends, which made me feel very free and happy.

原句有多处问题： 1) “everyday weekend, every weekend” 冗余且“everyday” 用法不当，应使用“every weekend”表示“每个周末”。 2) 词序和短语搭配错误，“when my friend with my friends” 不通顺，应为“with my friends”表示“和我的朋友们一起”。 3) 句子较长，需用逗号分开从句以保持清晰。建议删除多余词、调整词序，并使用逗号连接从句。

× And I really love writing it.

✓ And I really loved riding it.

原句使用了“writing”显然与骑自行车无关，且时态应与描述童年经历的过去时一致。应使用动词短语“ride” 的过去式“loved riding”或“really liked riding”。建议根据语境将“writing”改为“riding”，并使用过去时态以保持时态一致。

× I often see many people riding them to work or school and they are a cheap and convenient way to get around, especially in cities where traffic is heavy.

✓ I often see many people riding bikes to work or school, and they are a cheap and convenient way to get around, especially in cities where traffic is heavy.

原句中“riding them” 指代不明确。虽然“them”可以指“bikes”，但在此句中直接使用名词“bikes”更清晰，避免代词指代模糊的问题。建议把“them”替换为“bikes”。