自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., tense consistency, article use, possessive). Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly. Also correct phrases such as "my prefecture" and "my best friend's house."

範例: Yes. I had a bicycle as a child and I rode it a lot. Because traffic was light in my prefecture, it was normal to cycle to places, so I often rode to my best friend’s house.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give two contrasting specific reasons using correct linking words (e.g., "however", "because"). Remove repetitions and unclear phrasing. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "rural areas" instead of "countryside" is fine, but avoid redundant words).

範例: It depends on the area. In rural areas, bicycles are common because public transport is limited, so people cycle for short trips. However, in big cities like Tokyo, most people prefer trains because they are faster and more reliable.

× Yes, I was not athletic as a child, but I loved riding a bike and the traffic is not busy in my prefecture and it is very normal to take a bike to somewhere, so I often use a bike to best friend's house.

✓ Yes, I was not athletic as a child, but I loved riding a bike. The traffic in my prefecture is not busy, and it is very normal to ride a bike to places, so I often rode my bike to my best friend's house.

This original sentence has several issues: run-on sentences caused by incorrect conjunction use and inconsistent tense. Grammar problem type 16 (Incorrect conjunction use) and 26 (Sentence structure errors) apply. Also there is a tense inconsistency: the question asks about childhood (past), but the sentence switches to present (problem type 6 Present tense issue). Corrections: split into shorter sentences to avoid run-on structure; change 'the traffic is not busy in my prefecture' to 'The traffic in my prefecture is not busy' (clearer word order); use 'ride a bike to places' instead of 'take a bike to somewhere' for natural phrasing; use past tense 'rode my bike' to maintain reference to childhood and add possessive 'my best friend's house'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past for childhood), avoid stacking many clauses with 'and'—use periods or commas appropriately, and use natural collocations like 'ride a bike' and 'places' rather than 'take a bike' and 'somewhere'.

× It depends where you live.

✓ It depends on where you live.

This sentence lacks the preposition 'on' after 'depends' (problem type 11 Incorrect use of prepositions), which makes the phrase ungrammatical. Correction: add 'on' to form the correct verb-preposition collocation 'depend on'. Suggestion: learn common verb + preposition pairs and use 'depend on' for conditional contexts.

× In the countryside, people often ride bicycles because trains and other public transport are less common and the the number of trains is very is little and about in.

✓ In the countryside, people often ride bicycles because trains and other public transport are less common and the number of trains is very small.

This sentence contains redundancy, a typo ('the the'), extra words ('very is little and about in'), and word choice issues. Problems include sentence structure errors (26), incorrect article/redundancy (22/17), and incorrect adjective use ('little' vs 'small' for countable nouns like 'number'—problem type 13). Correction removes duplicate words, unnecessary fragments, and uses 'small' to describe 'number'. Suggestion: proofread to remove duplicated words, avoid inserting extra filler phrases, and choose appropriate adjectives: say 'the number of trains is small' or 'there are few trains' for clarity.

× In contrast, in big cities like Tokyo, most people prefer to use trains because it's very efficient.

✓ In contrast, in big cities like Tokyo, most people prefer to use trains because they are very efficient.

The original uses 'it's' which refers to a singular subject but the intended subject is plural 'trains'. This is a subject-pronoun agreement issue (problem type 27 Subject-verb agreement and 12 Incorrect use of pronouns). Correction: use 'they are' to agree with the plural noun 'trains'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents; replace 'it's' with 'they are' when referring to plural nouns.