自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more grammatically correct, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word order and tenses, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if needed and avoid repetition and filler words.

範例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was black and pink, and my dad bought it for me so I could learn to ride when I was eleven. I remember practicing in the park near our house until I felt confident.

建議: Answer directly then add one or two specific reasons or examples with clearer vocabulary and fewer hesitations. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct word choice (e.g., opportunities to ride, many young people).

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, I see many young people cycling in my city every day because the local government has built many bike lanes and parks, which makes cycling safe and enjoyable.

× Yes I had one I still remembered was a back black and pink and my dad bought me to learn to cycle a bike at 11 years old.

✓ Yes, I had one. I still remember it was a black and pink coaster bike, and my dad bought it for me to learn to cycle when I was 11 years old.

The sentence mixes past tense forms and has incorrect word order and word choice. Use 'remember' (present) when referring to a memory you still have: 'I still remember'. Use correct adjective order and noun: 'black and pink coaster bike' or 'black-and-pink bike'. Use correct object pronoun 'it' not omitted. Use 'bought it for me' rather than 'bought me', and use the time expression 'when I was 11 years old' to indicate age. Also add punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× Yes, umm, every day I see a big amount of youngsters riding a bike around my city and umm, they seem very happy to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, umm, every day I see many young people riding bikes around my city, and they seem very happy to ride them.

'A big amount of' is incorrect for countable nouns; use 'many' or 'a large number of'. 'Youngsters' is informal; 'young people' is more natural. Use plural 'bikes' and match pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'bikes'. Maintain present simple tense 'I see' and 'they seem' for habitual actions.

× And actually I'm proud of my city that umm provides so many opportunity to write uh.

✓ And actually I'm proud of my city because it provides so many opportunities to ride bikes.

The original uses incorrect conjunction/relative clause and wrong preposition/word choice. Use 'because' to give a reason: 'I'm proud of my city because it provides...'. 'Opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' to match 'so many'. 'Write' is a wrong verb here; the intended verb is 'ride' (to ride bikes). Also add 'bikes' to clarify the object. Ensure present simple 'provides' is used for a general truth.