自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and mostly natural, but it is a little wordy and has minor grammatical issues. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence, correcting tense/word choice, and adding one concise supporting detail. Use linking words (e.g., “because” is fine) but avoid redundancy such as “I did have” + “growing up.”

範例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My father bought it for me when I was three because I kept asking for one and most of my relatives already had bikes.

建議: Content is relevant but unclear and somewhat repetitive. Improve coherence by giving a direct topic sentence, linking reasons using cohesive phrases (e.g., “mainly because”), and providing a specific example or comparison. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., “there are many wide roads” not “filled with streets”; use present tense for general statements). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Not really — bikes are not very popular in my city, mainly because there are many wide roads and few protected cycle lanes. For example, in Abu Dhabi I found cycling unsafe compared with Dubai, which has dedicated bicycle paths.

× Yes I did have a bike growing up.

✓ Yes, I had a bike growing up.

Using 'did have' is unnecessary when forming simple past affirmative statements. The simple past 'I had' is correct and more natural. Suggestion: Use the simple past tense for affirmative past facts (I had, she went).

× My father bought me a bike when I was 3 because I kept begging for one since everyone in my family had.

✓ My father bought me a bike when I was three because I kept begging for one since everyone in my family had one.

The sentence mixes tenses but main issue is omission of the object 'one' after 'had'. Also spell out single-digit ages as 'three' in formal writing. Suggestion: Add the missing noun 'one' to complete the comparative reference and keep the past tense consistent ('bought', 'kept begging').

× No not really considering the country I'm living in, it's mostly filled with streets.

✓ No, not really. Considering the country I live in, it mostly consists of wide streets.

The original has tense inconsistency and a comma splice. 'I'm living in' is a present continuous used for temporary actions; for general facts use simple present 'I live in'. The clause was run-on; split into two sentences or use proper connectors. Also 'filled with streets' is awkward; 'consists of wide streets' or similar is clearer. Suggestion: Use simple present for general facts and avoid comma splices by separating sentences.

× I lived in Abu Dhabi.

✓ I live in Abu Dhabi.

Context indicates current residence. Using past tense 'lived' implies you no longer live there. If the speaker still lives there, use simple present 'I live'. Suggestion: Choose tense that matches intended meaning (present for current residence, past for former residence).

× Unlike other cities maybe like Dubai where they had specific lanes for the bicycles, it was most likely unsafe for bicycles to be moving around the city.

✓ Unlike other cities like Dubai, which have specific bicycle lanes, it is mostly unsafe for bicycles to move around the city.

Several issues: 'maybe like' is informal and redundant; use 'like'. 'Where they had' mixes past when a present fact is intended—use present 'have'. 'For the bicycles' is unnatural; use 'bicycle lanes' and 'bicycles' without 'the'. 'It was most likely unsafe' shifts tense; if discussing current condition use 'it is mostly unsafe'. Also 'to be moving around' is wordy; 'to move around' is simpler. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing, consistent present tense for current general statements, and correct relative clause structure.