自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make the response more concise, correct the phrasing “raised each other” (which is incorrect in this context), and add one precise detail to make it more vivid (e.g., where you rode or how it felt). Also watch sentence variety to avoid repetition. Keep to fewer than five sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a pink bicycle as a child that I used to ride around my neighborhood. My older brother taught me how to balance and pedal, and we would practice together every evening after dinner. Riding felt liberating because I could explore nearby parks and visit friends without asking for a lift.

建議: This answer is clear, well-structured and contains relevant reasons. To raise the score further, add a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., “Furthermore” or “For example”), include a specific statistic or example if possible, and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “cost-effective” instead of “inexpensive”). Keep it to two or three sentences for conciseness.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many students and office workers cycle during rush hour because it is eco-friendly and a cost-effective way to navigate crowded city streets.

× I loved it because my older brother taught me to ride and we often raised each other in the evenings.

✓ I loved it because my older brother taught me to ride and we often rode together in the evenings.

The original sentence uses 'raised each other', which is incorrect in this context. 'Raise' means to lift or to bring up (as in children), not to ride a bicycle. This is a vocabulary/verb choice error that affects meaning. Replace 'raised each other' with 'rode together' to convey that you cycled with your brother. Also 'rode' is the correct past tense of 'ride', matching the past narrative. Suggestion: choose verbs that match the intended action and ensure past-tense consistency (e.g., 'we often rode together in the evenings').

× ...because cycling is eco friendly and an inexpensive way to get around crowded cities.

✓ ...because cycling is eco-friendly and an inexpensive way to get around crowded cities.

'Eco friendly' should be written as the hyphenated compound adjective 'eco-friendly' when it directly modifies a noun ('way' is implied here). This is a word-formation/usage issue. Use the hyphen to form a clear compound adjective. Suggestion: use 'eco-friendly' for clarity and correctness in descriptive phrases.