自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is confusing and contains many mistakes: wrong words (bank, bag), repetition, tense issues, and irrelevant detail. To improve, answer directly with a clear topic sentence about having a bike, use correct vocabulary, fix past tense, avoid repetition, and add one or two concise supporting details (why you liked the bike or a short memory). Use linking words if adding details.

範例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bright red bicycle when I was about seven, and I used it every day to ride to my friend’s house. It was light and easy to handle, so I learned to ride it quickly and felt very proud.

建議: This answer is unclear due to incorrect words and grammar ("whites", "dry bike forget on") and lacks coherence. To improve, start with a clear direct opinion, then give specific reasons and link them logically (for example: cost of fuel, traffic, health or environment). Use correct past/present tense and concise sentences (max 5).

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular, especially in cities. When fuel prices rose, many people chose bikes because they are cheaper to use and help avoid traffic. Also, biking has become more common for short trips and for exercise.

× Yes, I have a bank.

✓ Yes, I had one.

The student answered a question about past possession ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?') but used present tense 'have' and an incorrect noun 'bank' instead of referring to the bike. This is a pronoun/reference and tense issue: replace 'have a bank' with 'had one' to correctly refer to the bike in the past. Suggestion: use past tense for past situations and use pronouns (one) or repeat the noun (a bike) for clarity.

× When I was a child, my father bought bought a beautiful bag for me.

✓ When I was a child, my father bought a beautiful bike for me.

The question concerns a bike, but the student wrote 'bag' and duplicated 'bought bought'. The verb 'bought' is correct past tense, but duplication is an error. Correct the repeated word and use the correct noun 'bike' to match context. Suggestion: avoid typing duplicates; ensure nouns match the topic and maintain past tense for past events.

× It was pink because this color was my favorite color and I can't remember.

✓ It was pink because that was my favorite color, but I can't remember exactly now.

The original mixes tenses and repeats 'color'. 'It was pink because that was my favorite color' keeps past reference. 'I can't remember' is present and acceptable, but sounds abrupt; add 'exactly now' for clarity. Also replace 'this' with 'that' to maintain perspective of past. Suggestion: avoid repetition and keep temporal references consistent; use 'that' for past descriptions and add clarifying adverbs if needed.

× Yes that whites are popular in my country, especially when the price of oil was higher in my country, the people had to use the dry bike forget on the.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially when oil prices were higher and people had to use bicycles more often.

This sentence has multiple structural and word-choice errors: 'that whites' is meaningless in context, 'dry bike forget on the' is garbled. Correct the subject to 'bikes' and restate the reason clearly: when oil prices were higher, people used bicycles more. Use plural agreement 'bikes are' and past tense 'were higher' to match the time reference. Suggestion: simplify the sentence, use clear nouns ('bikes' or 'bicycles'), ensure subject-verb agreement, and remove unintelligible fragments.