自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (use past tense consistently), make answers concise and coherent, and add a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "when", "so", "after that"). Keep it under five sentences and avoid filler sounds like "Umm."

範例: Yes, I had a mountain bike when I was a child. My first long trip was to Turlock Recreational Park, about 10 kilometers from my home, and I went with my friends Angelo and Daniel. We were very tired by the end of the ride, so we rested and had snacks before cycling back home.

建議: Make the main idea clear in one topic sentence, correct grammar and word choice, and give one specific reason with an example. Use linking words like "because", "for example", or "as a result" to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases such as "cold thing trend."

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because people of all ages use them for exercise and short trips. For example, many communities now organize weekend cycling groups where participants share routes and distances, which encourages more people to take up biking.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and it is a mountain bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was a mountain bike.

The sentence mixes present tense ('have', 'is') with past time reference ('when I was a child'). Use past tense consistently: 'had' and 'was'. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for events that occurred in childhood.

× Umm, my first long trip is that when I go in the Turlock Recreational Park, which is 10 kilometers away from my home and I am with my friends Angelo and Daniel.

✓ My first long trip was when I went to Turlock Recreational Park, which is 10 kilometers away from my home, and I was with my friends Angelo and Daniel.

This sentence uses present tense verbs ('is', 'go', 'am') while describing a past event. Change verbs to past tense ('was', 'went', 'was') and use 'to' rather than 'in' with park. Also add commas for clarity.

× That time we are so tired biking and then after that we just need.

✓ At that time we were so tired from biking, and after that we just rested.

'Are' is present tense; use 'were' for past. 'Tired biking' is ungrammatical; use 'tired from biking'. The clause 'we just need' is incomplete and mixes present; replace with a past action such as 'we just rested' or 'we just stopped'.

× I think bikes are popular in my country because not only the child, adults as well enjoy biking because right now there is a cold thing trend which is travel where you can share the distance where you go biking, running and exercising.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because not only children but adults also enjoy biking. Right now there is a trend of traveling and sharing routes where you can go biking, running, and exercising.

Pronoun and noun forms are incorrect: 'the child' should be plural 'children'. Word order and connectors are wrong: use 'not only X but also Y'. The phrase 'cold thing trend which is travel' is unclear; interpret as 'a trend of traveling'. 'Share the distance where you go' is awkward; use 'sharing routes' or 'sharing distances'. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× Now that it's become a trend, it is very useful.

✓ Now that it has become a trend, it is very useful.

'It's become' is informal contraction that can be acceptable, but grammatically the present perfect 'has become' is clearer to indicate a change up to now. Keeping present tense 'is' is fine. Suggestion: use 'has become' to show the trend developed and continues.