自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, fluency and concision. Use correct past tense and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating filler words.

範例: Yes, I had access to bikes as a child, but I never owned one. For example, I often borrowed my older brother’s bike or bikes belonging to visitors, so I usually rode only occasionally rather than every day.

建議: Reduce repetition and hesitations; use clearer linking and more specific reasons. Start with a direct opinion, then give two concise supporting points with linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'also'). Use precise vocabulary like 'cyclists' or 'bicycles'.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys and commuting. For example, you can see many cyclists on city streets during rush hour, and bicycles are popular because they are cheap and eco-friendly.

× I don't have my own bike.

✓ I didn't have my own bike.

The question is about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Don't have' is present tense; use 'didn't have' to match past context. Suggestion: Use past simple for states in the past: 'I didn't have...'.

× When I were, when I was still a child, I only borrowed, uh, my brother's bike and whoever comes to our house, who, uh, who brings their bike?

✓ When I was a child, I only borrowed my brother's bike, and whenever someone came to our house with their bike, I borrowed it.

Multiple errors: 'were' is incorrect for singular first person in past ('was' is correct). The clause about others uses present tense 'comes' and 'brings' but needs past tense to match 'when I was a child' and 'borrowed'. Also sentence structure is fragmented and unclear. Suggestions: Use 'was' for 'I', change 'who comes... who brings' to 'whenever someone came... with their bike', and clarify pronoun reference 'it' for the bike.

× I always borrow their bikes.

✓ I always borrowed their bikes.

The adverb 'always' is fine, but because the context is past ('when I was a child'), the verb should be past simple 'borrowed' not present 'borrow'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent: 'I always borrowed their bikes.'.

× I think bikes are popular in our country because there are a lot of bike bikes, bikers along the road that uh, you will see, umm,

✓ I think bikes are popular in our country because there are a lot of bikes and bikers along the roads that you can see.

Repetition 'bike bikes' is erroneous. 'A lot of' should modify plural noun 'bikes'. 'Along the road' is acceptable but plural 'roads' is more natural here. 'That you will see' is awkward; 'that you can see' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'a lot of bikes and bikers along the roads that you can see.'.

× and also bike is a very useful, uh, vehicle.

✓ and also bikes are very useful vehicles.

Subject-verb agreement and number: 'bike is... vehicle' sounds generic but in context about bikes in general, plural is natural: 'bikes are useful vehicles.' Use plural nouns for general statements and match verb accordingly. Suggestion: Say 'bikes are very useful vehicles.'.