学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ตอบให้กระชับและเป็นธรรมชาติ โดยเริ่มด้วยประโยคแสดงสถานะชัดเจน (topic sentence) แล้วอธิบายรายละเอียดสั้น ๆ โดยใช้คำเชื่อมถ้าจำเป็น หลีกเลี่ยงการเติมคำแบบไม่จำเป็น (uh, suddenly) และใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น "I'm studying" แทน "I'm study"

範例: I'm a student on a scholarship. I do a few small paid tasks for my school, but I wouldn't call it a job because it's not regular work.

建議: ระบุสถานที่อย่างชัดเจนเป็นประโยคเปิด แล้วให้รายละเอียดสนับสนุนสั้น ๆ โดยใช้คำเชื่อม (because, so) แก้ข้อผิดพลาดด้านไวยากรณ์และคำที่ไม่ครบ เช่น "middle part" → "central Thailand" และเติมจบประโยคให้สมบูรณ์

範例: I study in central Thailand, while my hometown is in the south. It's quite far, but I feel comfortable living here because the provincial capital is nearby and offers many conveniences.

建議: ตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคแสดงความเห็น แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจนและเป็นระบบ ใช้คำที่ถูกต้องและหลีกเลี่ยงคำไม่ชัด (เช่น UH pathometry) และกล่าวรายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจง เช่น ไม่ต้องจ่ายค่าเล่าเรียนหรือค่าเช่าที่พัก

範例: Yes, it's a great place to study because the university provides on-campus facilities and accommodation. As a result, I don't have to pay for a dormitory and my living expenses are lower.

建議: เริ่มด้วยการยอมรับด้านบวกแล้วเสนอข้อปรับปรุงอย่างชัดเจนและเป็นระบบ ใช้โครงสร้าง 'I like... but I wish...' และอธิบายสาเหตุ รวมทั้งให้ตัวอย่างการปรับปรุง เช่น ติดตั้งลิฟต์หรือปรับทางเดินให้สะดวกสำหรับคนพิการ

範例: I think my school is generally very good, but I wish the campus were more accessible. For example, installing elevators and improving ramps would make daily life easier for students with mobility issues.

建議: ตอบด้วยประโยคเป้าหมายชัดเจน เช่น 'I want to become a doctor' แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลและเส้นทางการศึกษา ใช้คำศัพท์เฉพาะที่เหมาะสม (medical terms, medicine) และเชื่อมเหตุผลด้วยคำเชื่อม เช่น 'because' หรือ 'so that'

範例: I would like to study medicine and become a doctor because I want to help people using my knowledge of biology. To achieve this, I plan to complete a medical degree and then gain practical experience in a hospital.

× Now I'm study at scholarship students, so I have some, uh, suddenly, but it's not too much.

✓ Now I'm studying as a scholarship student, so I have some duties, uh, suddenly, but it's not too much.

The verb 'study' should be in the present continuous form 'studying' to match 'Now I'm'. 'Scholarship students' is incorrect; it should be 'a scholarship student' (singular) to match the speaker. 'I have some, uh, suddenly' is unclear; likely 'duties' or 'responsibilities' fits. Suggestion: use 'Now I'm studying' and 'as a scholarship student' and replace vague word 'suddenly' with a clearer noun if needed.

× I don't think it's can count as a work, but it's, I just want to say that can make money.

✓ I don't think it can count as work, but I just want to say that it can help me make money.

Remove the extra 'it's' and use proper modal construction 'can count'. 'Work' is uncountable here, so no article. Add a subject 'it' before 'can help' and the verb phrase 'help me make money' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use 'I don't think it can count as work' and 'it can help me make money.'

× So now I'm starting at a middle part of Thailand, but my hometown is in southern part, so it's really far from my hometown.

✓ So now I'm living in the central part of Thailand, but my hometown is in the southern part, so it's quite far from there.

'I'm starting at' is incorrect for residence; use 'I'm living in' or 'I'm staying in'. 'Middle part' should be 'central part' and include 'the'. 'Southern part' needs 'the'. Avoid repeating 'my hometown' twice; replace second with 'there'. Suggestion: use 'living in the central part' and 'my hometown is in the southern part.'

× But it's really clear that I really comfortable to live here in the middle part because it's a capital nearby my school so I can.

✓ But it's clear that I am really comfortable living here in the central area because there is a city near my school, so I can access many facilities.

Missing verb 'am' before 'comfortable'. Use 'comfortable living' (gerund). 'Middle part' -> 'central area'. 'It's a capital nearby my school' is awkward; use 'there is a city' or 'a provincial capital near my school'. Complete the sentence: 'so I can access many facilities.' Suggestion: include the verb 'am', use gerund after 'comfortable', and complete the thought.

× Yeah, it's a great place to study because it's a UH pathometry inside.

✓ Yeah, it's a great place to study because there's a university pathology department nearby.

'It's a UH pathometry inside' is unclear and ungrammatical. Use 'there's' (there is) for existence and correct noun phrase 'university pathology department' or the intended unit. Suggestion: clarify the facility name and use 'there's' for existence.

× So I avoid my pay for uh dormitory and can avoid my pay for anything else.

✓ So I avoid paying for a dormitory and can avoid paying for other expenses.

Use the gerund 'paying' after 'avoid'. 'My pay for dormitory' is incorrect; use 'paying for a dormitory'. 'Anything else' -> 'other expenses' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'avoid paying for' + noun.

× I think my school nowadays is really good and the teacher is good, everything is good, but if they can make the easier to live like can use elevator or anything else can make the life easier.

✓ I think my school is really good nowadays and the teachers are good; everything is fine, but if they could make life easier, for example by installing an elevator or other facilities, that would help.

Article and number errors: 'the teacher' should be 'the teachers' or 'teachers' to refer generally. 'Make the easier to live' is ungrammatical; use 'make life easier'. Use conditional 'if they could' or 'if they can' with correct structure. 'Can use elevator' -> 'by installing an elevator' or 'providing an elevator'. Suggestion: pluralize 'teachers', use 'make life easier', and give concrete proposals.

× I love to learn and medical term like doctor or something else in. Hospital because I think I can help people with my knowledge.

✓ I would like to study medicine and become a doctor or work in a hospital because I think I can help people with my knowledge.

'I love to learn and medical term like doctor' is ungrammatical. Use 'study medicine' or 'learn medical terms' depending on intent; here 'study medicine and become a doctor' fits. 'In. Hospital' punctuation error and preposition use; use 'in a hospital' or 'work in a hospital'. Suggestion: rephrase to 'I would like to study medicine and become a doctor' and include 'a' before 'hospital' when needed.

× I can use my knowledge about biology to help heal them when they get hurt.

✓ I can use my knowledge of biology to help heal people when they get hurt.

'Knowledge about' is acceptable but 'knowledge of biology' is more natural. 'Help heal them' is okay but 'help heal people' avoids unclear pronoun antecedent. Suggestion: use 'knowledge of biology' and 'help heal people.'