音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, correct grammar, and make answers coherent with linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g., 'makes me feel'), avoid short fragments, and give one specific reason or example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I prefer happy music to sad music because it makes me feel optimistic and energetic. For example, when I listen to upbeat pop songs I feel more motivated to study or exercise. However, I sometimes enjoy sad songs for reflection, but they rarely lift my mood in the same way.

建議: Clarify vocabulary and avoid unclear or incomplete phrases. Use precise nouns (e.g., 'upbeat female vocals' instead of 'high female ****'), correct articles and prepositions, and link sentences with connectors. Provide one brief, specific example of when you feel excited.

範例: Yes, upbeat songs with strong female vocals usually make me feel energetic. For instance, when I listen to lively pop tracks while exercising, I feel like I'm floating on air and my energy levels rise immediately.

建議: Fix grammar and clarify meaning. Use correct pronouns and expressions ('I'm particularly bad at playing instruments'), and explain briefly why your parents made that choice. Keep it concise and coherent with linking words.

範例: No, I haven't taken any professional music classes. I'm actually not very good at playing instruments, so my parents encouraged me to focus on English instead. As a result, I never had formal lessons but I enjoy singing informally.

建議: Good content and examples; improve grammar and fluency by using smoother linking words and natural phrases. Combine short sentences to avoid redundancy and use correct articles ('reading a book').

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks as long as I'm not extremely busy. For example, if the road is clear I turn on the radio while driving, and I also listen to soft instrumental music when I'm doing homework or reading a book.

× Happy music always makes me feels optimistic, joyful.

✓ Happy music always makes me feel optimistic and joyful.

The verb 'make' is followed by the base form of the verb (make someone do something). Using 'feels' is incorrect because after 'makes me' the verb should be the base form 'feel'. Also add 'and' between adjectives for natural coordination.

× And relax while sad.

✓ It also relaxes me when I am sad.

The original fragment lacks a clear subject and verb. Rewriting with subject 'It' (referring to happy music) and verb 'relaxes' creates a complete sentence and uses 'when I am sad' to indicate condition.

× Music doesn't necessarily make me feel sad, but it doesn't make me feel as happy.

✓ Sad music doesn't necessarily make me feel sad, but it doesn't make me feel as happy as happy music does.

The pronoun 'it' is ambiguous. Clarify contrast by specifying 'sad music' and complete the comparison with 'as happy as happy music does' to make the comparison explicit and grammatically complete.

× Yes, high female **** always make me feel energetic.

✓ Yes, high female vocals always make me feel energetic.

Assuming the intended noun is 'vocals' (a plural noun), 'make' is correct; if the original word were singular, verb form would need adjustment. I replaced the obscured part with 'vocals' to make a clear, grammatical phrase. Ensure subject and verb agree in number.

× I feel almost a floating on the air when I listen to happy music.

✓ I almost feel like I am floating on air when I listen to happy music.

'A floating' and 'on the air' are unidiomatic. Use 'almost feel like I am floating' and the idiomatic 'on air' or better 'on air' -> 'on air' is used for broadcasts; 'floating on air' is common, so 'floating on air' or 'floating' works. I chose 'floating on air' and adjusted word order.

× You can make me feel very excited.

✓ Happy music can make me feel very excited.

The original 'You can make me feel very excited' wrongly addresses the listener as the cause. Specify the subject 'Happy music' to match the context and keep the sentence clear.

× I have not taken any professional music classes so far.

✓ I have not taken any professional music classes so far.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.

× I know it's particularly bad at playing musical instruments.

✓ I know I'm particularly bad at playing musical instruments.

'It' is incorrect as the subject; the speaker should use 'I' or 'I'm'. Replace 'it' with 'I'm' to indicate the speaker's ability. 'Particularly bad at' is correct otherwise.

× My parents didn't ask me to take any musical classes because they think my strength lives in English.

✓ My parents didn't ask me to take any music classes because they think my strength lies in English.

Use 'lies' instead of 'lives' for the idiom 'strength lies in'. Also 'musical classes' is acceptable but 'music classes' is more natural. The verb tenses 'didn't ask' and 'think' are acceptable together here.

× Yes, I love to listen to music while doing other things if I'm not extremely busy.

✓ Yes, I love listening to music while doing other things if I'm not extremely busy.

Both forms are possible, but 'love listening' is more natural. Change 'to listen' to the gerund 'listening' for smoother style.

× For example, when the road conditions are not super complicated, I always turn on my radio music channel while I'm driving.

✓ For example, when road conditions are not too complicated, I always turn on a radio music channel while I'm driving.

'Super complicated' is informal; use 'too complicated'. 'My radio music channel' is odd—use 'a radio music channel' or 'the radio'. This corrects article use and word choice.

× And I also like to listen to music while I'm doing my homework, reading the book.

✓ I also like to listen to music while I'm doing my homework or reading a book.

Combine activities with 'or' for parallel structure and use 'a book' rather than 'the book' unless referring to a specific book. Remove the leading 'And' to avoid sentence fragments.