音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar (e.g., "all kinds of music", "a big part of my life").

範例: I enjoy all kinds of music because it matches my mood. For example, I listen to sad songs when I want to reflect and calming effect, but I choose upbeat pop when I need energy for exercising.

建議: Reduce hesitation and repetitive phrasing. Give a clearer reason and a brief example. Replace unclear words ("obedient") with accurate vocabulary such as "energetic" or "uplifted". Use one linking word like "because" or "so".

範例: Yes, absolutely. Happy music makes me feel more energetic because the upbeat rhythm lifts my mood. For instance, I often listen to lively pop songs before meetings to feel more confident and focused.

建議: Avoid negative, absolute statements and improve grammar ("never taken", "my voice isn't good"). Provide a concise reason and, if possible, a brief alternative related to music to show nuance. Use one or two sentences only.

範例: I have never taken formal music lessons because I don't feel confident about my singing voice. However, I do enjoy listening to podcasts about music and sometimes try simple online tutorials to learn basic rhythm.

建議: Make sentences clearer and correct grammar ("when I'm travelling"; "household chores"). Use linking words like "for example" and be specific about types of music for activities. Limit to at most three sentences and remove fillers.

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while travelling or doing household chores because it helps me feel upbeat and makes time pass faster. For example, I play energetic pop on my commute and mellow acoustic music while cooking.

× I prefer all kind of music.

✓ I prefer all kinds of music.

The noun 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when preceded by 'all' to indicate various types. Use 'all kinds of' for countable varieties. Suggestion: Use 'all kinds of music' or 'every kind of music' depending on emphasis.

× music is a big part of our life and it depends on my mood.

✓ Music is a big part of my life and it depends on my mood.

The speaker refers to their personal experience, so 'our life' is inconsistent; 'my life' matches 'my mood'. Also capitalize start but here keep lower; main issue is pronoun consistency. Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent: 'my life' with 'my mood'.

× sometimes I'll be feeling low and sometimes I'll be feeling high and to match my energy, yeah, I will play sad music, happy music.

✓ Sometimes I feel low and sometimes I feel high, and to match my energy I play sad music or happy music.

Using 'I'll be feeling' overly complicates a habitual or recurring situation; simple present 'I feel' is appropriate for habitual states. Also combine ideas with 'and' and use 'or' between music types. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions: 'I feel' and 'I play'.

× So it totally depends on my mood and.

✓ So it totally depends on my mood.

The sentence ends with a trailing conjunction 'and' and is incomplete. Remove 'and' to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: Avoid ending sentences with unfinished conjunctions; complete the clause or remove the conjunction.

× Yes, uh, absolutely happy music, uh, can make me feel more excited.

✓ Yes, absolutely; happy music can make me feel more excited.

The sentence is acceptable but punctuation and filler words interrupt flow. 'Can' is correct modal. Correction improves clarity by removing fillers. Suggestion: Reduce fillers and use commas/semicolons to improve clarity.

× it will add a extra umm, happiness and a beat to my life

✓ It will add an extra happiness and a beat to my life.

Before a noun starting with a vowel sound, use 'an' not 'a'. Also 'extra happiness' is awkward but acceptable conversationally. Suggestion: Use 'an extra' before vowel sounds; consider 'a bit more happiness' for natural phrasing.

× I will, I will feel a little bit more obedient so umm, it can make me more excited.

✓ I will feel a little bit happier, so it can make me more excited.

'Obedient' is incorrect in context; the intended meaning is likely 'happy'. Replace with appropriate adjective. Also remove repeated 'I will'. Suggestion: Choose adjectives that match intended emotion ('happier' not 'obedient').

× I have never been complimented for my voice and yeah I can also tell my voice is not good.

✓ I have never been complimented on my voice, and I can also say my voice is not good.

Use 'complimented on' (preposition correction) and 'say' is more natural than 'tell' in this context. 'Have never been complimented' is present perfect and acceptable. Suggestion: Use correct preposition 'complimented on' and natural verb 'say'.

× So music is not for me and that's why I have never take any music lessons in my life

✓ So music is not for me, and that's why I have never taken any music lessons in my life.

When using present perfect 'have never', the main verb must be in past participle form 'taken', not base form 'take'. Suggestion: Use past participle with present perfect: 'have never taken'.

× and in in future also I don't see myself taking music.

✓ And in the future I don't see myself taking music lessons either.

Add article 'the' before 'future' and use 'lessons' for clarity; 'also' changed to 'either' for negative sentence. Remove duplicated 'in'. Suggestion: Use 'in the future' and place 'either' at end of negative clauses.

× Listen is is not not for me.

✓ Listening is not for me.

Redundant words and wrong form 'Listen' should be the gerund 'Listening' to act as noun. Remove duplicate negatives. Suggestion: Use gerund to refer to the activity: 'Listening is not for me.'

× It's not meant for me.

✓ It's not meant for me.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Explanation: 'It's not meant for me' correctly expresses that something is not suitable. Suggestion: No change required.

× I love listening to music when I'm, when I'm travelling, when I on my, when I'm on my way to work or even when I'm cooking, doing, uh, household shows it, it makes me feel going upbeat it and uh, time will also go faster with the music.

✓ I love listening to music when I'm travelling, when I'm on my way to work, or even when I'm cooking and doing household chores; it makes me feel upbeat and time goes faster with music.

Multiple problems: missing verb 'am' in 'when I on my', incorrect noun 'shows' should be 'chores', redundant fillers and pronoun placement. Use simple present 'goes' for general truth instead of 'will go'. Remove repetition of 'it'. Suggestion: Simplify clauses, correct vocabulary ('chores'), and use simple present for habitual actions.

× So I listen to musical.

✓ So I listen to music.

'Musical' is a noun meaning a musical theatrical show; the intended word is 'music'. Use 'music' as the uncountable noun. Suggestion: Use correct noun 'music' when referring to songs or audio.