音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "when I want to listen to music"). Also correct small mistakes like "on that time" → "at that time" and use contractions or natural phrasing.

範例: I like both sad and happy music, depending on my mood. For example, when I feel cheerful I usually choose upbeat songs to match my energy, but when I'm feeling down I prefer slower, sad tracks because they help me reflect and calm down.

建議: Improve grammar and fluency by removing filler words and ensuring tense consistency. Provide a clear topic sentence, then one specific supporting example with a linking word. Correct errors like "I'm already feel" → "I already feel" and "happy musics" → "happy music."

範例: Happy music can make me feel more excited, but it depends on how I feel beforehand. For instance, when I'm exercising upbeat tracks usually boost my motivation and energy, whereas if I'm already upset, cheerful songs often have little effect.

建議: Organize your answer into a clear topic sentence then brief supporting details with correct tense and prepositions. Replace awkward phrases like "have planned to take" → "plan to take" and "from next month" → "starting next month." Keep it concise and avoid unnecessary background unless relevant.

範例: No, I haven't taken any music classes, although I did attend painting lessons as a child. However, I plan to start guitar lessons starting next month to learn basic chords and practice regularly.

建議: Reduce filler words (uh, um) and correct grammar ("it make me" → "it makes me"; "distracting me to concentrate" → "distracts me from concentrating"). Start with a direct answer, then give two specific situations using linking words like "for example" or "however."

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores or exercising because it makes me feel more energetic and motivated. However, when I'm studying or working I avoid music because it distracts me from concentrating.

× Actually I have both sad and happy music on my playlist, but it depends on my mood when I want to listen to music.

✓ Actually I have both sad and happy music on my playlist, but it depends on my mood when I want to listen to music.

No grammatical change needed; sentence uses simple present correctly to describe general facts. Keep as is.

× If I feel cheerful I'll usually go for happy songs, but if I feel down or upset, I prefer sad music because I can't listen to exciting music on that time.

✓ If I feel cheerful I'll usually go for happy songs, but if I feel down or upset, I prefer sad music because I can't listen to exciting music at that time.

Preposition error: use 'at that time' rather than 'on that time'. 'On' is incorrect with 'time' in this context. Use 'at' to refer to a specific time.

× Sometimes happy music can make me feel more excited, but actually it depends on my mood.

✓ Sometimes happy music can make me feel more excited, but actually it depends on my mood.

No grammatical change needed; sentence correctly uses modal 'can' and present tense to discuss general possibility.

× If I'm already feel upset or falling down, even happy songs can't make me excited.

✓ If I'm already feeling upset or down, even happy songs can't make me excited.

Present participle needed: after auxiliary 'am' use 'feeling' rather than base verb 'feel'. Also 'falling down' is unnatural for mood — use 'down' to mean sad.

× But when I went to exercise, for example, umm, happy musics, umm can cheer me up.

✓ But when I go to exercise, for example, happy music can cheer me up.

Multiple issues fixed: tense consistency (use present 'go' not past 'went' because speaker describes habitual action), and uncountable noun: 'music' is uncountable so 'musics' is incorrect. Also remove filler 'umm' for clarity.

× No, unfortunately I've never taken any music classes.

✓ No, unfortunately I've never taken any music classes.

Correct as written: present perfect 'have never taken' is appropriate to express life experience up to now.

× When I was a child I liked art and I went to painting class and when I grew up I was always busy with studying.

✓ When I was a child I liked art and I went to painting classes, and when I grew up I was always busy studying.

Minor corrections: 'painting class' -> 'painting classes' fits repeated past activity; 'busy with studying' is better as 'busy studying' (more natural). Both use past simple appropriately.

× But I have planned to take guitar courses from next month.

✓ But I have planned to take guitar courses starting next month.

Use 'starting next month' or 'from next month' is possible, but 'from next month' after 'planned' is awkward in this context. 'I have planned' + 'to take ... starting next month' is clearer. Alternatively 'I plan to take guitar courses next month.'

× Yes, I listen to music when I clean my room or especially when I exercise because it make me more energetic and motivate.

✓ Yes, I listen to music when I clean my room, and especially when I exercise, because it makes me more energetic and motivated.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it make' should be 'it makes'. Also 'motivate' should be 'motivated' (adjective) to describe how the speaker feels. Added comma for clarity.

× But uh, when I'm studying or working, I can't listen to music because uh, it's distracting me to concentrate.

✓ But when I'm studying or working, I can't listen to music because it's distracting and prevents me from concentrating.

Use natural English collocations: 'it's distracting me to concentrate' is ungrammatical. Better: 'it's distracting' and 'prevents me from concentrating' (verb + preposition 'from' + gerund). Also removed filler words.