音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “I prefer sad music when I’m feeling low, but usually I like happy songs.”). Use correct grammar (avoid “I am prefer”; use “I prefer” or “I like”). Give one or two specific reasons and link them with a simple connector (because, so, when). Keep answers under five sentences.

範例: I prefer sad music when I’m feeling low because quiet songs help me relax and think. However, most of the time I enjoy upbeat music because it lifts my mood and helps me concentrate.

建議: Answer directly and use clearer sentence structure. Begin with a short yes/no topic sentence, then add one or two specific effects and a linking word (so, therefore). Avoid filler words (“you know”) and unclear phrases. Use concrete examples of tasks the music helps with.

範例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more energetic. For example, lively songs with strong rhythms motivate me to focus on my studies and make housework less boring.

建議: Give a direct answer and support it with a brief explanation and a specific detail. Remove hesitations and repetitions (avoid “uh”, “you know”). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to show cause. Mention where you listen to music as a relevant detail.

範例: No, I haven’t taken any formal music classes because music wasn’t offered as a main subject at my school. I mainly learn about music by listening on platforms like Spotify and watching tutorial videos online.

建議: Be specific and organized: start with a clear topic sentence stating how often you listen while doing other activities, then give one or two specific examples using linking words (for example, while, when). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

範例: Yes, I listen to music for about one to two hours every day while doing other activities. For example, I usually play music while studying to stay focused and I also listen while doing housework or relaxing before bed.

× Yes, I am prefer music that have been you know.

✓ Yes, I prefer music that has, you know.

Student used 'I am prefer' which is incorrect because 'prefer' is a stative verb and should be in simple present ('I prefer'), and used 'have been' incorrectly for a relative clause; the noun 'music' is singular/unmarked and requires singular verb 'has' when a perfect verb is used. Suggestion: use simple present 'I prefer' and say 'that has' or rephrase to 'that I like'.

× It's depend.

✓ It depends.

The verb needs to agree with the singular subject 'it'; use third person singular present 'depends'. Suggestion: use 'It depends' for correct subject-verb agreement.

× I think it depends.

✓ I think it depends.

This sentence is already correct; no change needed. Kept for completeness.

× When my emotion is not good, I often choose some music that's quiet.

✓ When I'm not feeling well, I often choose quiet music.

'My emotion is not good' is unnatural; use 'I'm not feeling well' or 'I'm in a bad mood'. Also 'choose some music that's quiet' is wordy — 'choose quiet music' is natural. Suggestion: use natural expressions for emotional states and place adjective before noun.

× Yes is look is like my motion.

✓ Yes, it seems to reflect my mood.

The original is ungrammatical and uses incorrect words: 'is look is like my motion' is incorrect vocabulary and structure. Use 'it seems to reflect my mood' where 'mood' is the correct noun and the verb phrase 'seems to reflect' is appropriate. Suggestion: learn common collocations like 'reflect my mood' or 'match my mood'.

× Well, a card when I listen happy music, have the, you know, the real lyric and the music is very exciting.

✓ Well, when I listen to happy music, the real lyrics and the energetic music make me feel excited.

Errors include missing preposition 'to' after 'listen', incorrect article 'a card' (nonsense), incorrect verb form 'have the' and awkward noun usage. Recast the sentence to 'when I listen to happy music' and make subject-verb agreement: 'the lyrics and the energetic music make me feel excited.' Suggestion: use 'listen to', plural 'lyrics', and clearer adjectives like 'energetic'.

× I am very excited about everything and I can have the emotion to do some task like my study or my housework.

✓ I feel very excited about everything and I have the motivation to do tasks like studying or housework.

'I am very excited about everything' can be kept but 'I can have the emotion to do some task' is incorrect collocation: use 'have the motivation' or 'feel motivated to do tasks'. Also 'my study' should be 'studying' and 'my housework' should be 'housework'. Suggestion: use 'feel motivated' and gerund forms for activities.

× MMM, yeah, unfortunately, no.

✓ Mm, yeah, unfortunately not.

Short answer is fine but 'no' at end is slightly abrupt; 'not' is more natural here. This is minor; keep as 'unfortunately not.' Suggestion: use 'not' after adverb for natural response.

× You know, in my form, music is not, uh, it's not considered as a main subject.

✓ You know, in my school, music is not considered a main subject.

'In my form' is incorrect collocation; likely 'in my school' or 'in my country'. Also 'considered as' is unnecessary—use 'considered a'. Suggestion: use 'considered a main subject' and correct noun for context.

× So there's no class for music.

✓ So there are no music classes.

'There's no class for music' is understandable but 'music classes' plural is more natural because 'class' in general context is countable and refers to multiple sessions. Use 'there are' with plural. Suggestion: pluralize to match typical usage.

× Yes, I mainly listen to music on the Internet and Spotify.

✓ Yes, I mainly listen to music on the Internet, such as on Spotify.

Original is mostly correct but slightly awkward listing; better to say 'on the Internet, such as Spotify' or 'on Spotify'. Suggestion: simplify to 'I mainly listen to music on Spotify'.

× Yes, of course I can say that I spend about one to two hours every day listening to music while doing something like I often listening.

✓ Yes, of course I spend about one to two hours every day listening to music while doing other things.

Errors: unnecessary 'I can say that', incorrect gerund/participle 'I often listening', and awkward phrase 'doing something'. Simplify to 'spend... listening to music while doing other things.' Suggestion: use 'spend time doing' and correct gerund forms.

× I often listen to music while I'm doing. Why I while doing how culture, why even sleep?

✓ I often listen to music while I'm doing chores, studying, or even when I sleep.

Original sentences are fragmented and use incorrect word choices and word order. 'While I'm doing' must be followed by an activity; replace with examples like 'chores' or 'studying'. 'Why I while doing how culture' is unintelligible; interpret as listing activities. Suggestion: give clear examples and use 'while' + verb-ing or 'when' clauses.