音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response a clear topic sentence and complete it with a brief condition. Avoid grammar mistakes and unnecessary words. For example, use correct article use and complete the conditional clause: say whether you sometimes prefer sad music and why. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and use linking words like 'although' or 'but'.

範例: I usually prefer happy music because it lifts my mood. However, if I feel very sad, I sometimes listen to sad songs to reflect and calm down.

建議: Start with a direct answer then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove filler words like 'yeah' and use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'energised', 'concentrate').

範例: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited and energized. Moreover, it helps me concentrate on tasks because the upbeat rhythm keeps my mind alert.

建議: Be concise and avoid inappropriate phrasing. Give a short reason and, if possible, mention alternatives you use to learn. Replace 'we're just a poor people' with a more neutral phrase like 'we couldn't afford them'.

範例: No, I haven't. We couldn't afford formal music lessons, so I learned a lot by watching online videos and practicing on my own.

建議: Give a direct answer, then list 2–3 activities with brief reasons, avoiding fillers and repetition. Use correct grammar ('it gives me peace of mind') and natural phrasing instead of colloquialisms like 'you know what I'm saying?'.

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while studying, cleaning, or washing dishes because it helps me relax and stay motivated. For example, calm music improves my focus when I study, while upbeat songs make chores more enjoyable.

× Actually for me I prefer a happy music, but if my emotions are not.

✓ Actually, I prefer happy music, but sometimes I don't (if my emotions are not).

The noun 'music' is uncountable and should not take the indefinite article 'a'. The phrase 'if my emotions are not' is incomplete and unclear; it should be rephrased to indicate when emotions differ, e.g., 'sometimes I don't.' Suggestion: drop 'a' before 'happy music' and clarify the second clause (e.g., 'but sometimes I don't when my emotions are different').

× Yes, I feel more excited about happy music and also it helps me focus, yeah.

✓ Yes, I feel more excited with happy music and it also helps me focus.

The sentence mostly uses present tense correctly, but word order and preposition use can be improved. 'Excited about happy music' is acceptable but 'excited with' or 'excited by' are also common; moved 'also' to flow better. Suggestion: use 'it also helps me focus' or 'it helps me to focus' for clarity.

× No, because we don't have money for some music classes. We're just a poor people.

✓ No, because we don't have money for music classes. We're just poor people.

'Some' before 'music classes' is unnecessary and sounds odd here; 'music classes' as a general concept is fine without 'some'. 'A poor people' is incorrect: 'people' is plural and cannot take 'a'; use 'poor people' or 'a poor family/person' depending on meaning. Suggestion: remove 'some' and 'a' before 'poor people'.

× Yes, I really love listening to music when I do something like studying, umm, cleaning, washing some dishes, because it's gives, it gives you Peace of Mind, you know what I'm saying?

✓ Yes, I really love listening to music when I do things like studying, cleaning, or washing dishes, because it gives you peace of mind.

Use parallel gerund forms: 'studying, cleaning, or washing dishes'. Remove 'some' before 'dishes' and correct 'it's gives' to 'it gives' (subject 'it' with verb 'gives' does not take 'is'). 'Peace of Mind' should be lowercased as 'peace of mind'. Suggestion: ensure verbs in the list are all -ing forms and avoid redundant words like 'it's gives'. 'You know what I'm saying?' is conversational; keep or remove depending on formality.