音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one brief reason and one short exception. Reduce hesitations and filler words, and use accurate grammar (e.g., past tense, plural forms). Use a linking word for the exception (e.g., "however").

範例: I prefer happy music because it relaxes me and motivates me. However, I sometimes listen to a few sad songs because they remind me of past experiences. Overall, I usually choose upbeat music when I want to feel cheerful.

建議: Answer directly and clearly: give a simple topic sentence (yes or no) and follow with one or two clear reasons and one example. Avoid repeating words and filler sounds. Use linking words (for example, when, especially) to connect idea of mood improvement to personal experience.

範例: Yes. Happy music makes me feel more optimistic and energetic because the melody and lyrics lift my mood. For example, when I’m stressed about my studies, I listen to upbeat songs to feel more hopeful and motivated.

建議: Be clear and grammatical: begin with a direct answer (No), then explain briefly why and give a specific future plan. Remove unclear words ("elastic", "interlike") and use precise vocabulary ("attend", "dance classes"). Limit to two or three sentences.

範例: No, I haven't taken music classes. I’m currently busy with my master’s degree, but I plan to attend music lessons or ballet classes in the future because I love the arts and want to explore performing skills.

建議: Give a concise, well-structured reply: start with a topic sentence, give two specific activities where you listen to music, then add the exception with a linking word (e.g., "however"). Improve grammar ("it distracts me", "helps me focus").

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while cooking or cleaning the apartment. However, I don't listen to music when I study because it distracts me and prevents me from concentrating on difficult tasks.

× Of course I prefer to hear like happy music because it's helped me to relax and motivate.

✓ Of course I prefer to hear happy music because it helps me to relax and feel motivated.

Error types: subject-verb agreement/present tense (IDs 6 and 27) and incorrect word form (ID 13). The student used 'it's helped' which mixes present tense contraction with a past participle incorrectly; the intended meaning is a habitual or general effect, so use simple present 'it helps'. Also 'motivate' is a verb; the correct adjective phrase is 'feel motivated'. Suggestion: use simple present for general truths and use 'motivated' as the adjective: 'it helps me to relax and feel motivated.'

× And, uh, but I have like 3 plays.

✓ But I have about three playlists.

Error types: incorrect word choice/quantifier (IDs 14 and 13) and sentence structure (ID 26). 'Plays' is incorrect here; the student likely meant 'playlists' or 'songs'. Also 'like' is filler and should be removed or replaced with 'about' to indicate approximation. Suggestion: replace 'plays' with 'playlists' and use 'about three' for clarity.

× It's sad music, but it's, it's just, uh, remind me of the time that I used to be in that emotion.

✓ It's sad music, but it just reminds me of times when I used to feel that way.

Error types: present tense (ID 6), verb+ -ing/past participle misuse (IDs 8 and 9), and pronoun/reference (ID 12). The student wrote 'it's just remind' which lacks subject-verb agreement; correct is 'it just reminds'. 'The time that I used to be in that emotion' is awkward; use 'times when I used to feel that way.' Suggestion: use 'reminds' for habitual present, and 'feel that way' for natural phrasing.

× So I, I hear it from a time to time, but most of the time I hear, I hear like, I love to hear like happy music.

✓ So I listen to it from time to time, but most of the time I love to listen to happy music.

Error types: incorrect verb choice and tense (ID 6), adverb placement (ID 20), and repetition/word choice (ID 26). 'Hear it from a time to time' is ungrammatical; say 'listen to it from time to time'. 'I hear like, I love to hear like' is redundant; simplify to 'I love to listen to happy music.' Suggestion: use 'listen to' with correct adverb placement 'from time to time' and avoid filler 'like'.

× MMM, yes, not just excited, uh, but feel like there is an, uh, optimistic about feeling optimistic feeling is that there is something good to happen.

✓ Yes, not just excited, but feeling optimistic, as if something good is going to happen.

Error types: sentence structure (ID 26), incorrect tense/word order (IDs 6 and 20), and article use (ID 17). The original is fragmented and repeats 'optimistic'. Use 'feeling optimistic' and 'as if something good is going to happen' for clarity and correct future-in-the-past sense. Suggestion: rephrase to a concise clause expressing the emotion and expectation.

× Even, uh, you are going if I got was going through like a rough time or hard time, Uh, especially at these days, I have like a lot of problems.

✓ Even if you are going through a rough or hard time, especially these days, I have a lot of problems.

Error types: past tense confusion and sentence structure (IDs 5 and 26), incorrect use of articles/prepositions (ID 11). The student mixed past and present ('got was going'); use 'are going' or 'go through'. 'At these days' is incorrect; use 'these days'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use 'even if' to introduce the condition.

× So I always like listen to to to.

✓ So I always like to listen to music.

Error types: verb infinitive usage (ID 4/8) and sentence structure (ID 26). The student repeated 'to' and omitted the object. Use the infinitive 'to listen' and specify 'music.' Suggestion: complete the verb phrase with its object.

× No, but I love to, I would love to have like an elastic, uh, in the future,

✓ No, but I would love to have lessons in the future,

Error types: incorrect word choice (ID 13) and article errors (ID 22). 'Elastic' is incorrect; likely 'lessons' or 'classical (guitar?)' was intended. 'Have like an elastic' makes no sense. Suggestion: replace with 'lessons' and remove filler 'like' and unnecessary article.

× but now I don't have like, I have a plan to attend any classes because I'm so busy with, uh, my studies, my mental studies, I'm doing like my masters.

✓ but now I don't; I have a plan to attend classes because I'm so busy with my studies; I'm doing my master's degree.

Error types: sentence structure (ID 26), article/possessive use (ID 22), and word choice (ID 13). 'Master's' needs the possessive form and 'degree' for clarity. 'Don't have like, I have a plan' is disfluent; separate into clauses with proper punctuation. Suggestion: use 'master's degree' and tidy sentence flow.

× So maybe in the future I would love to interlike and uh, not just music classes, but maybe like ballet or something like that related to art.

✓ So maybe in the future I would love to enroll, and not just in music classes, but maybe in ballet or other art-related classes.

Error types: incorrect verb choice/form (ID 13), preposition use (ID 11), and sentence structure (ID 26). 'Interlike' is not a verb; likely 'inter' was a fragment of 'interact' or 'intern'? The correct verb is 'enroll' or 'take'. Use 'in' before class types and 'art-related classes' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'enroll in' or 'take' and correct prepositions.

× Yes, I love to listen to music while cooking, while maybe like cleaning the apartment or even like doing umm, cleaning at home.

✓ Yes, I love to listen to music while cooking, cleaning the apartment, or doing other housework.

Error types: verb choice and sentence structure (ID 26) and redundancy (ID 13). 'Doing cleaning at home' is redundant; 'housework' or 'cleaning the apartment' is sufficient. Remove filler 'like' and repetition. Suggestion: use concise parallel phrases.

× But when I need to study, I don't listen to music because, uh, it's distract me and uh, not, it's not like helping me to focus on the things that I needed to study, especially like my studies so hard.

✓ But when I need to study, I don't listen to music because it distracts me and doesn't help me focus on the things I need to study, especially since my studies are so demanding.

Error types: third person singular (ID 2), present/past tense (IDs 6 and 5), and sentence structure (ID 26). 'It's distract me' is ungrammatical; correct is 'it distracts me.' 'Needed to study' should be 'need to study' for present relevance. 'My studies so hard' needs 'are so demanding' or 'are very difficult.' Suggestion: use correct third-person singular verb forms and maintain present tense when describing current situations.