音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and specific: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concrete reasons or examples. Avoid vague phrasing like "not in a good shape" and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer happy music because it instantly lifts my mood. For example, when I'm feeling stressed after work, upbeat pop songs help me relax and feel more energetic for the evening.

建議: Answer directly and keep examples consistent with the question. Don't contradict yourself (saying "happy music makes me excited" then giving an example of "calming music"). Use linking words and one clear example showing how happy music excites you.

範例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited. For instance, when I play an upbeat playlist in the morning, I feel more alert and motivated, which helps me tackle my tasks with more energy.

建議: Keep the answer concise and use a clear sequence (past to present) with linking words. Replace repetitive phrases and give one specific detail about what you learned or did in classes.

範例: Yes, I took music classes from elementary through high school. As a result, I learned vocal techniques and music theory, which helped me become choir president and perform confidently at school events.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific example and a brief reason. Avoid awkward phrasing like "finish it happily"—use natural expressions such as "make chores more enjoyable".

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores. For example, when I'm washing dishes or folding laundry, upbeat songs make the tasks more enjoyable and help me finish them faster.

× I prefer happy music because it boosts my mood whenever I'm not in a good shape.

✓ I prefer happy music because it boosts my mood whenever I'm not in good shape.

The phrase 'in a good shape' incorrectly uses the indefinite article and is not idiomatic. Use 'in good shape' to describe general condition. Also, present simple 'boosts' correctly matches singular noun 'music'. Suggestion: remove the article and say 'in good shape' for natural English.

× Yes, happy music makes me more excited. For example, I start the day by listening to calming music to soothe me and to be more productive within that day.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me more excited. For example, I start the day by listening to calming music to soothe me and to be more productive that day.

The phrase 'within that day' is unnatural. Use 'that day' or 'during the day' to indicate the same day. The rest of the sentence uses present simple appropriately. Suggestion: replace 'within that day' with 'that day' or 'during the day' for natural phrasing.

× I've taken music classes since I was in elementary and it has helped me become more knowledgeable and it helped me along throughout my high school days because I was part of the choir and I was the president of the singing group.

✓ I've taken music classes since I was in elementary school, and it has helped me become more knowledgeable and has helped me throughout high school because I was part of the choir and the president of the singing group.

When using 'since' with a starting point, present perfect 'I've taken' is correct but 'in elementary' is incomplete; use 'in elementary school'. Also maintain consistent present perfect: 'it has helped' and 'has helped' rather than switching to past 'helped'. 'Throughout my high school days' is wordy; 'throughout high school' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'elementary school', keep tense consistency, and simplify 'throughout high school'.

× Whenever I start my chores like washing the dishes or washing my clothes, I always listen to music because it helps me be able to finish it happily.

✓ Whenever I start chores like washing the dishes or doing my laundry, I always listen to music because it helps me finish them happily.

'Start my chores like washing the dishes or washing my clothes' repeats 'washing' and uses 'washing my clothes' awkwardly; 'doing my laundry' is more natural. 'Helps me be able to finish it' is redundant; use 'helps me finish them'. Match plural pronoun 'them' to 'chores'. Also use gerunds appropriately ('washing', 'doing'). Suggestion: avoid redundancy, use natural collocations, and ensure pronoun agreement.