音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (like “uh” and “gonna”), correct grammar (e.g., “make me feel happier” not “more of happy emotions”), and limit to 2–3 sentences. Add one specific detail or example to support your preference.

範例: I prefer happy music because it cheers me up and makes me feel happier. For example, at parties I usually play upbeat pop songs to create a fun, energetic atmosphere.

建議: Give a direct answer and use accurate grammar. Replace awkward phrases like “make me feel more exciting” with “make me feel more excited” and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain why and provide one brief example of how it affects you.

範例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited and energetic. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs before exercising, the rhythm motivates me and helps me work out harder.

建議: Keep the answer direct and use careful, respectful language when discussing personal circumstances. Use past tense consistently and correct articles ("a music class" not "a music classes"). Offer a short comment about current alternatives (self-study, online resources) to add positivity and depth.

範例: No, I haven't taken any music classes because my family couldn't afford them at the time. Instead, I learned songs by watching free tutorials online and practicing on my own.

建議: Answer directly and organize supporting details with linking words. Use precise verbs and correct prepositions ("listen to music", "while reading or writing"). Explain how music helps (e.g., improves concentration or mood) and give one specific example of a genre or situation.

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things, especially when I'm reading or writing. For example, soft instrumental music helps me concentrate and makes studying more enjoyable.

× I prefer happy music because it's gonna cheer up my mood and make me feel more of happy emotions.

✓ I prefer happy music because it’s going to cheer up my mood and make me feel happier.

Use of informal 'gonna' should be 'going to' in formal speech; 'make me feel more of happy emotions' is ungrammatical. After 'make me feel' use an adjective or noun phrase: 'happier' is correct comparative adjective. Also avoid 'more of' before abstract noun here.

× Especially I'm in a celebration.

✓ Especially when I am celebrating.

Phrase 'I'm in a celebration' is unnatural; English uses 'celebrating' or 'at a celebration'. 'When I am celebrating' fits the context and connects to the previous sentence.

× Uh, I feel like I want to enjoy or celebrate something.

✓ I feel like I want to enjoy or celebrate something.

Sentence is acceptable; no grammatical change needed. However, keep 'feel like' followed by base verb or '-ing' consistently; 'feel like I want to enjoy' is slightly redundant but grammatical. No change required so kept as is.

× I listen happy music.

✓ I listen to happy music.

Verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object: 'listen to music' is correct.

× Definitely, having music actually make me feel more exciting and energetic because what I'm already happy, I would like to feel a lot of emotions which can actually I get from happy music and lyrics.

✓ Definitely, music actually makes me feel more excited and energetic because when I'm already happy, I want to feel many emotions that I can get from happy music and lyrics.

Multiple issues: 'having music make' should be 'music makes' (subject-verb agreement); 'feel more exciting' should be 'feel more excited' (use adjective describing person); 'what I'm already happy' is wrong—use 'when I'm already happy'; 'I would like to feel a lot of emotions which can actually I get from' is ungrammatical—reorder to 'I want to feel many emotions that I can get from'. Corrections maintain tense and meaning.

× No, I have not taken any music classes.

✓ No, I have not taken any music classes.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present perfect to indicate experience up to now. No change needed.

× As I was really poor, I didn't have a lot of money to spend on music classes.

✓ Because we were really poor, we didn’t have much money to spend on music classes.

Use 'because' instead of 'as' for clarity; 'I was really poor' is odd—use 'we were really poor' if referring to family situation, or keep 'I' if personal. 'a lot of money' better as 'much money' in negative sentences. Maintain past tense.

× For example, I wanted to attend a music classes but my mom said that we cannot afford that.

✓ For example, I wanted to attend music classes, but my mom said that we could not afford them.

Use no article before plural 'music classes' (not 'a music classes'); 'cannot' better as past 'could not' to match 'wanted'; refer back to plural with 'them'.

× Yes, I prefer to listen music while I'm doing other things such as reading books at the same time, listening some music in the background, also writing.

✓ Yes, I prefer to listen to music while I'm doing other things such as reading books, listening to music in the background, and writing.

'Listen' requires 'to' (listen to music); parallel gerund forms should be consistent: 'reading, listening to music, and writing'. Remove redundant 'at the same time' and ensure conjunctions are correct.

× So while I'm reading and writing, the music can actually amplify my focus due to it.

✓ So while I'm reading and writing, the music can actually amplify my focus.

Ending with 'due to it' is redundant and ungrammatical. 'Due to' requires a noun phrase (e.g., 'due to the music'), but here simply deleting it yields a natural sentence.

× I really like to listen to music.

✓ I really like listening to music.

Both forms are grammatical, but 'I really like listening to music' is more natural and concise. No pronoun error; this is a stylistic improvement.