音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Speak more clearly and use correct grammar and vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I prefer happy music.”). Use correct verbs and nouns (e.g., “lifts my spirits,” “upbeat tempo”) and avoid unnecessary words. Add one specific supporting detail and a linking phrase. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my spirits with its upbeat tempo. For example, when I listen to cheerful pop songs during my commute, they help reduce my stress and put me in a better mood.

建議: Answer directly and use natural vocabulary. Start with a clear yes/no response and follow with one or two coherent reasons using correct words (e.g., “excited,” “positive,” “optimistic”). Avoid unclear or incorrect words like “exotic,” “violent,” or “deposition.” Use a linking phrase such as “because” or “for example.”

範例: Yes. Happy music makes me feel more excited because its fast rhythm and uplifting lyrics boost my energy. For example, upbeat songs help me feel more optimistic before meeting friends or starting a busy day.

建議: Use correct tense and avoid repetition and filler words. Begin with a straightforward statement (e.g., “Yes, I have taken violin lessons for three years.”). Then give one specific detail about what you learned in class, using linking words like “for example” or “we learned.” Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

範例: Yes, I have taken violin lessons for three years. During lessons, my teacher taught us how to hold the bow correctly and how to read sheet music, which really improved my technique.

建議: Answer directly and organize your response. Say when and why you listen to music, using correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary (e.g., “I often listen to music while studying or commuting,” “I focus on the lyrics”). Avoid unclear phrases like “subjected” or “roving.” Use one linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while studying and watching videos because it helps me relax. I usually choose happy songs and pay attention to the lyrics when I want to feel motivated.

× I refer happy music because it can lifting my spirit due to its upbeat temple and it can tackle whatever the day throws at me like stress or anxious.

✓ I prefer happy music because it can lift my spirits due to its upbeat tempo and it can help me tackle whatever the day throws at me, like stress or anxiety.

Errors: 'refer' should be 'prefer' (wrong verb), 'can lifting' mixes modal + -ing (should be base form after can), 'spirit' should be plural 'spirits' in this context, 'temple' is incorrect word, correct is 'tempo', and 'anxious' is an adjective; the noun 'anxiety' is needed. Suggestion: Use the correct verb 'prefer', after modal verbs use base verb ('can lift'), use plural for common expression 'lift my spirits', choose correct noun 'tempo', and use noun 'anxiety' for the list of things.

× Yes, happy music not only make me feel more exotic, it's can make me see the world incredible and violent.

✓ Yes, happy music not only makes me feel more excited, it can make me see the world as incredible and vivid.

Errors: 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'happy music' (subject-verb agreement), 'exotic' is wrong word for emotional state—'excited' suits meaning, 'it's can' is incorrect (auxiliary 'can' should stand alone), and adjectives 'incredible and violent' are inappropriate; likely 'incredible and vivid' or similar. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with subject ('music... makes'), avoid unnecessary contractions before modals, and choose adjectives that fit the intended meaning.

× Not only that, happy music can maintain achieve full deposition in my life.

✓ Furthermore, happy music can help me maintain a positive disposition in my life.

Errors: 'maintain achieve full deposition' is ungrammatical and uses wrong words; likely intended 'help me maintain a positive disposition'. 'Deposition' is incorrect; 'disposition' is the correct noun. Suggestion: Use appropriate collocations: 'help me maintain a positive disposition' or 'help me stay positive'.

× Yes, I have learning violin violin for three years and what during the lesson, the teacher talk about how the instrument uh, can be great and umm, and he uh, take us about how to use.

✓ Yes, I have been learning the violin for three years, and during the lessons the teacher talks about how the instrument can be great and he teaches us how to use it.

Errors: 'have learning' should be present perfect continuous 'have been learning' to indicate an action over a period; duplicate 'violin violin'; 'what during' is extraneous; 'teacher talk' needs third person singular 'talks'; 'he take us about how to use' is incorrect—should be 'he teaches us how to use it'. Suggestion: Use 'have been learning' for ongoing actions, ensure subject-verb agreement with 'teacher talks', remove filler words, and use 'teach someone how to do something'.

× Absolutely, I always, uh, listening to music while watching this is and I refer happy music because it can make me feel more subjected and, uh, I will roving to its lyrics.

✓ Absolutely, I always listen to music while watching shows, and I prefer happy music because it makes me feel more relaxed, and I pay attention to its lyrics.

Errors: 'always, uh, listening' should be simple present 'always listen' for habitual action; 'watching this is' unclear—likely 'watching shows' or 'watching videos'; 'refer' again should be 'prefer'; 'make me feel more subjected' is wrong—probably 'more relaxed' or 'more uplifted'; 'I will roving to its lyrics' is incorrect—use 'I pay attention to its lyrics' or 'I focus on the lyrics'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits, choose correct verbs ('prefer', 'listen', 'pay attention'), and select appropriate adjectives ('relaxed'/'uplifted').