音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn khi trả lời: (1) Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi; (2) Tránh dùng nhiều tiếng ừ, lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'the song tells about story' → 'songs that tell stories'); (3) Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về lý do và ví dụ rõ ràng; (4) Giữ tổng số câu không quá 5 câu và dùng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý.

範例: I prefer sad music because I find emotional melodies more moving. For example, I have a Spotify playlist of songs that tell stories about past relationships and heartbreak. These songs help me reflect and feel connected to the emotions in the lyrics.

建議: Làm câu chính xác và chính xác về ngữ pháp; (1) Chú ý thì và số (make → makes; give → gives; song → songs); (2) Tránh lỗi từ vựng sai (ví dụ 'bad and catchy' nên là 'bass' hoặc 'strong and catchy'); (3) Thêm một liên từ hoặc ví dụ ngắn để mạch lạc; (4) Giữ câu ngắn, tự nhiên và có 1–2 chi tiết minh hoạ.

範例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because upbeat rhythms boost my mood and give me energy. For example, at parties lively songs with a strong, catchy beat make me want to dance and have more fun with my friends.

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, trật tự từ và chi tiết: (1) Sử dụng thì đúng (I practice → I practiced / I practised regularly on weekends); (2) Ghép các ý mạch lạc bằng liên từ; (3) Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về khoảng thời gian hoặc kỹ năng đã học; (4) Tránh lỗi nhỏ về danh từ số nhiều và giới từ.

範例: Yes, I have. I started music lessons in primary school, where I learned basic music theory and singing. Later, at secondary school I learned to play the guitar and practised on weekends, which helped me improve my strumming and chord changes.

建議: Làm rõ ý và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp/vựng: (1) Dùng động từ đúng thì và dạng số (Music gives; I like to listen; sad songs); (2) Tránh cụm từ không rõ nghĩa ('health work', 'concert right'); thay bằng chi tiết cụ thể (e.g. exercise, chores, concentrate); (3) Thêm một câu giải thích ngắn về lý do vì sao loại nhạc đó giúp tập trung; (4) Giữ câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và mạch lạc.

範例: Yes, definitely. Music gives me a better mood and more energy when I do homework or exercise, and it helps me stay motivated. For example, I often listen to sad, instrumental songs while studying because their calm melodies help me concentrate and avoid distractions.

× I have a passion for songs that have, uh, sad melodies.

✓ I have a passion for songs that have sad melodies.

Unnecessary filler 'uh' should be removed for correctness and fluency. Use of present participle is fine; remove filler words to make sentence natural.

× Uh, I have a playlist on Spotify that's on the song tells about story in the past, love and uh, bad feelings.

✓ I have a playlist on Spotify of songs that tell stories about past love and sad feelings.

Original sentence has incorrect preposition 'on' and wrong verb forms 'tells' and noun phrase order. Use 'of songs' not 'on the song', use plural verb 'tell' to agree with 'songs', and use 'sad feelings' instead of 'bad feelings' for natural collocation. Also remove filler 'uh'.

× Absolutely, upbeat music always make me feel more excited because it boosts my mood and give me energy.

✓ Absolutely, upbeat music always makes me feel more excited because it boosts my mood and gives me energy.

Subject 'upbeat music' is singular (uncountable), so verbs must be in third person singular: 'makes' and 'gives'. 'Boosts' is already correct for singular subject. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× For example, at party, lively song make me want to dance and have more fun with my friends, especially when the beat is bad and catchy.

✓ For example, at a party, lively songs make me want to dance and have more fun with my friends, especially when the beat is fast and catchy.

Use article 'a' with 'party' and plural 'songs' to match general meaning. 'Make' matches plural 'songs'. 'Bad and catchy' is incorrect collocation; likely meant 'fast and catchy' or 'good and catchy'. Choose 'fast and catchy' for clarity.

× Yes, I have. Music has been part of my life since primary school because I enjoy singing and learning basic theory at school.

✓ Yes, I have. Music has been part of my life since primary school because I enjoyed singing and learning basic theory at school.

Context 'since primary school' suggests past habitual activity; use past tense 'enjoyed' if referring to that time. Alternatively, keep 'enjoy' if meaning continuing to present. Choose tense to match intended meaning.

× When I was at secondary school, I used to learn to play the guitar and I practice regularly weekend.

✓ When I was at secondary school, I used to learn to play the guitar and I practiced regularly on weekends.

Use past tense 'practiced' to match 'used to' and add preposition 'on' before 'weekends'. Also plural 'weekends' is natural for repeated action.

× Yes definitely. Music give me a better mood and more energy when I do homework or health work and I often feel more motivated and focused.

✓ Yes, definitely. Music gives me a better mood and more energy when I do homework or household chores, and I often feel more motivated and focused.

Use third person singular 'gives' for 'music'. 'Health work' is unclear; likely 'household chores' or 'exercise'. Add comma before conjunction and correct noun choice for clarity.

× For example, I like listen to sad song while study because they help me concert right and keep me.

✓ For example, I like listening to sad songs while studying because they help me concentrate and stay focused.

Use gerund forms 'listening' and 'studying' after 'like' and 'while'. Use plural 'songs' to match general reference. 'Concert right and keep me' is incorrect; likely meant 'concentrate and stay focused'. Replace with appropriate verbs.