音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., 'I like both sad and happy music') then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitation and avoid repetition.

範例: I like both sad and happy music. For example, sad songs can be comforting when I need to process emotions, whereas upbeat music lifts my mood and energizes me for the day.

建議: Use a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details with linking words. Correct verb forms and reduce repetition. Mention a specific example of your routine to be more concrete.

範例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel excited. For example, I play upbeat songs while getting ready in the morning, which motivates me and improves my mood for the rest of the day.

建議: Fix grammar (use present perfect/ past forms) and be concise. Start with a direct answer, then give a brief specific detail about what you learned. Avoid repeating phrases.

範例: I haven't taken formal music classes outside school, but I studied music in eleventh grade. There I learned basic musical notes and rhythms from a supportive teacher, and I still keep my notes because they were very helpful.

建議: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use present simple for routines and include one concise reason. Remove filler words and correct verb forms.

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things, especially in the morning. Listening to upbeat songs while I get ready helps me feel energetic and sets a positive tone for the day.

× I prefer both because it I think it mostly depends upon our my mood and uh, music also play a very crucial role in everyone's life, not only me, because we can also change our mood by listening the music and we also give us the peace when we need some.

✓ I prefer both because I think it mostly depends on my mood, and music also plays a very crucial role in everyone's life; not only for me, because we can change our mood by listening to music and it also gives us peace when we need it.

Multiple pronoun and reference errors: 'it I think' has an extra pronoun 'it'; 'our my mood' mixes pronouns—use 'my mood' to match the speaker. Use 'not only for me' to clarify scope. Also adjusted related verbs and objects for agreement and clarity. Suggestion: choose one correct pronoun and keep it consistent within the sentence. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× we can also change our mood by listening the music

✓ we can also change our mood by listening to music

Incorrect preposition: the verb 'listen' is followed by the preposition 'to' when specifying what is heard. Also 'the music' is unnecessarily definite; use 'music' generally. Suggestion: use 'listen to' + noun. (Grammar problem type ID: 11)

× and we also give us the peace when we need some.

✓ and it also gives us peace when we need it.

Pronoun and subject errors: 'we also give us the peace' incorrectly uses 'we' as subject for giving to ourselves and awkward noun phrase 'the peace' and vague 'some'. Use 'it' (music) as the subject, 'gives us peace', and 'when we need it' for clarity. Suggestion: identify the correct subject and use appropriate pronouns. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× Yes, it definitely happened in my life that when I listen to the happy music, it can make me more excited and as well as I after listening the music, I feel more motivational because I usually do that this routine when I get ready in the morning.

✓ Yes, it definitely happens in my life: when I listen to happy music, it makes me more excited, and after listening I feel more motivated because I usually follow that routine when I get ready in the morning.

Tense and verb form errors: 'happened' suggests past but the speaker describes a habitual present experience—use present tense 'happens'. 'When I listen' should agree with habitual meaning; 'it can make me' is better as 'it makes me' for general truth. 'I feel more motivational' incorrectly uses adjective 'motivational' for the person; use 'more motivated'. Remove redundant words 'this' and 'do that'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct adjective vs. participle forms. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× And I think that was the best part of my life because my overall mood depend upon the morning routine.

✓ And I think that is the best part of my life because my overall mood depends on my morning routine.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'was' implies past but speaker indicates present opinion—use 'is'. 'Mood depend' lacks subject-verb agreement; use 'depends'. Use 'depends on' rather than 'depend upon' for natural phrasing and 'my morning routine' to specify possession. Suggestion: match tense to current opinion and ensure verb agrees with singular subject. (Grammar problem type ID: 27)

× No, I haven't take any music classes once in my life, but when I was in my 11th grade, then I took the subject of music at there.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes in my life, but when I was in 11th grade, I took music as a subject there.

Auxiliary and past participle error: after 'haven't' use past participle 'taken', not 'take'. Also 'once in my life' is awkward with present perfect—'in my life' is sufficient. Phrases 'my 11th grade' and 'at there' are incorrect; use 'in 11th grade' and 'there'. Suggestion: use present perfect correctly and simplify time expressions. (Grammar problem type ID: 4)

× I also I learned different kind of beats, musical notes at there and their teacher was very kind and she explained everything very well.

✓ I also learned different kinds of beats and musical notes there, and the teacher was very kind and explained everything very well.

Redundant pronoun 'I also I' and incorrect pluralization 'different kind' should be 'different kinds'. 'At there' is incorrect preposition; use 'there'. 'Their teacher' is wrong reference—use 'the teacher' because it refers to the class context. Suggestion: remove redundancies, correct plurality, and use appropriate determiners. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× And now I keep the notes of music that music to capture with myself and it was very helpful.

✓ And now I keep my music notes with me, and they have been very helpful.

Awkward quantifier and phrasing: 'the notes of music that music to capture with myself' is ungrammatical. Use 'my music notes' or 'notes on music' and 'keep with me'. Also match tense: if they are still helpful, use present perfect 'have been'. Suggestion: simplify to 'keep my music notes with me' and use clear pronouns. (Grammar problem type ID: 14)

× Yes, I do because it is very common in my morning routine because, uh, when I was get ready in the morning, then I usually, uh, took, then I usually listen to the music because it, I feel very excited and motivational at that time and my overall mood depend upon my morning routine.

✓ Yes, I do because it is a normal part of my morning routine: when I get ready in the morning, I usually listen to music because it makes me feel excited and motivated at that time, and my overall mood depends on my morning routine.

Tense inconsistency: mixing past ('was get ready', 'took') and present habitual actions. Use present simple for routines ('I get ready', 'I usually listen'). 'Feel very excited and motivational' misuses 'motivational'; use 'motivated'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'mood depend' -> 'mood depends on'. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and correct adjective forms. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× So I prefer to listen music every day in the morning while I was get ready.

✓ So I prefer to listen to music every morning while I get ready.

Missing preposition after 'listen' — use 'listen to music'. Tense: 'while I was get ready' is incorrect; use present simple 'while I get ready' for habitual action. Also 'every day in the morning' is more natural as 'every morning'. Suggestion: use 'listen to' and present simple for routines. (Grammar problem type ID: 11)