音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct basic grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct countable/uncountable forms and accurate verb forms. Add one specific detail to support your preference and use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: I prefer happy music because upbeat songs boost my motivation. For example, when I work out I play fast pop tracks which lift my energy, whereas sad songs make me feel too emotional, so I avoid them during exercise.

建議: Combine short fragments into smooth sentences and correct grammar (e.g., "I'm easily influenced"). Use one linking phrase and give a brief specific example of how excitement manifests (physically or mentally). Keep to max 4–5 sentences.

範例: Yes, it does because I'm easily influenced by the songs I hear. For instance, upbeat tracks make me want to move and increase my pace when I run, so I usually choose lively playlists to boost my energy during workouts.

建議: Use correct tense and phrasing (e.g., "I've been taking violin lessons since I was three"). Avoid awkward phrases like "perform all my violin"; say "perform on the violin". Be specific about achievements and link sentences coherently. Limit to 3–4 sentences and correct informal slang ("wanna").

範例: Yes. I've been taking violin lessons since I was three, and I often perform on the violin at school concerts and local competitions. I hope to win a gold medal in a future competition, especially since my friend frequently wins gold or silver.

建議: Make sentences smoother and correct repetition and small errors ("it it"). Use linking words like "however" and be specific about which tasks allow music. Give a brief example of an instrumental genre you choose for studying to show range of vocabulary.

範例: Yes, but it depends on the task. For example, when I'm studying I avoid music with lyrics because I can't concentrate; instead I listen to instrumental piano or lo-fi. However, when I'm doing chores or relaxing I enjoy K-pop and J-pop with vocals.

× I prefer listening to happy musics because upbeat and cheerful music make me really motivated.

✓ I prefer listening to happy music because upbeat and cheerful music makes me really motivating.

'Musics' is incorrect; 'music' is an uncountable noun (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 22). Also subject-verb agreement: 'upbeat and cheerful music' is treated as a singular uncountable noun, so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27). Suggestion: use 'music' (uncountable) and match the verb to singular subject: 'music makes me feel really motivated.'

× When I'm working out, the music beats relates to my mood and if I listen to sad music, I feel really emotional.

✓ When I'm working out, the music's beat relates to my mood, and if I listen to sad music, I feel really emotional.

'beats relates' mixes plural and singular forms. Either use plural 'beats relate' or singular 'beat relates'. A clearer option is possessive 'the music's beat relates' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27). Also add comma before 'and' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type ID 26).

× But when I listen to happy music, I feel so motivated and cheerful.

✓ When I listen to happy music, I feel motivated and cheerful.

Starting with 'But' is conversationally acceptable but redundant here; removing it makes the sentence smoother (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). No core grammatical error beyond style.

× Yes, it does. Actually. I'm really easily to be influenced by some kind of music I listen.

✓ Yes, it does. Actually, I'm easily influenced by the kind of music I listen to.

'Actually.' fragment should be connected with comma for fluency (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'I'm really easily to be influenced' is ungrammatical: use 'I'm easily influenced' or 'I am really easily influenced' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 and 6). Also 'some kind of music I listen' needs 'I listen to' to complete the verb-preposition construction (Grammar Problem Type ID 11).

× And when I'm working out, I really love to listen to cheerful music so that I can boost my energy.

✓ When I'm working out, I really love listening to cheerful music because it boosts my energy.

'Love to listen to' is acceptable but 'love listening to' is more natural (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). 'So that I can boost my energy' is wordy; 'because it boosts my energy' is clearer (Grammar Problem Type ID 26).

× Yes, since I was three years old, I've been taking violin lessons and I perform all my violin at concerts and sometimes I perform it at competition.

✓ Yes, since I was three years old I've been taking violin lessons, and I perform on the violin at concerts and sometimes at competitions.

'I've been taking' is correct for ongoing action (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'Perform all my violin' is incorrect; use 'perform on the violin' (preposition error, Grammar Problem Type ID 11). 'Competition' should be plural 'competitions' or with an article 'a competition' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 22).

× And one day I really wanna achieve my goal to get gold medal in the competitions.

✓ One day I really want to achieve my goal of getting a gold medal in competitions.

Avoid informal 'wanna' — use 'want to' (Grammar Problem Type ID 4). Use 'goal of getting' for correct noun phrase and 'a gold medal' with article (Grammar Problem Type ID 17 and 22). 'In the competitions' is awkward; use 'in competitions' or 'in the competitions I enter' (Grammar Problem Type ID 26).

× My friend, always get gold or silver medal.

✓ My friend always gets gold or silver medals.

Subject-verb agreement: 'friend' third person singular requires 'gets' not 'get' (Grammar Problem Type ID 2 and 27). Use plural 'medals' or 'a gold or silver medal' with article (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 22). Remove unnecessary comma after 'friend' (Grammar Problem Type ID 26).

× Yes, but it it depends on what kind of work I'm doing.

✓ Yes, but it depends on what kind of work I'm doing.

Duplicate 'it it' is a typo; remove the extra 'it' (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'Depends' correctly agrees with subject 'it'.

× For example when I'm studying I don't listen to music that has lyrics because I can't focus on my work.

✓ For example, when I'm studying I don't listen to music with lyrics because I can't focus on my work.

'Music that has lyrics' is grammatically acceptable but 'music with lyrics' is more natural and concise (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Add comma after 'For example' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type ID 26).

× But when I'm doing something but not studying I just listen to music with lyrics like K pop and J pop.

✓ When I'm doing something other than studying, I just listen to music with lyrics, like K-pop and J-pop.

Avoid starting with 'But' and using double 'but'; use 'other than' for contrast (Grammar Problem Type ID 16 and 26). Add comma before the final clause and hyphens in 'K-pop' and 'J-pop' for standard form (Grammar Problem Type ID 13).