音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific, connected reasons using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and repetition. Keep the answer to no more than four sentences.

範例: I prefer happy music because it helps me relax and reduce stress. For example, when I’m tired after work I listen to upbeat songs to lift my mood, and they make me feel more energetic. However, I sometimes choose sad music when I want to reflect on my feelings.

建議: Give a clearer reason and a specific example. Begin with a direct answer, then explain how happy music affects you using coherent linking words. Remove repeated words and unclear phrases like “colourful location.”

範例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because the rhythm and melody increase my energy. For instance, when I listen to upbeat pop songs on my way to the gym, I feel more motivated and ready to exercise.

建議: Answer directly and use correct grammar. If you haven’t taken classes, say so and give a brief reason and an alternative related activity (e.g., listening or attending concerts). Use one or two supporting details.

範例: No, I haven’t taken any music classes because I’m not confident in my singing. Instead, I prefer listening to live performances and attending concerts, which helps me appreciate music without formal training.

建議: Be specific about activities and use linking words for clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then list two or three activities and explain briefly how music helps in each case. Avoid vague phrases like “happy life.”

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while studying, exercising and cooking. For example, soft instrumental music helps me concentrate when I study, lively tracks boost my energy during workouts, and cheerful songs make cooking more enjoyable.

× Uh, I prefer, uh, happy music because it is very helpful for my, uh, release my stress and relax my mind.

✓ I prefer happy music because it is very helpful for relieving my stress and relaxing my mind.

The verbs 'release' and 'relax' are incorrect after 'helpful for'; the gerund form is required (relieving, relaxing). Also 'release my stress' is unnatural; 'relieve my stress' is correct. Use parallel gerunds for both actions.

× Uh, but sometimes I like to, uh, listen, uh, sad music.

✓ But sometimes I like to listen to sad music.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Remove extra filler words and commas to form a correct clause.

× It's different from my, uh, situation and my mood in, and I think I really like to listen happy music.

✓ It depends on my situation and mood, and I think I really like to listen to happy music.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'depends on' to show variability with situation and mood. 'Listen' needs the preposition 'to' and 'listen to happy music' is the correct phrase.

× Yes, happy happy music make make me feel more excited because I think it is very umm, useful for me because umm.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because I think it is very useful for me.

The subject 'music' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' (third-person singular). Remove repetition and filler words for clarity.

× Very, uh, colour, colourful location.

✓ It creates a very colorful atmosphere.

The original is a fragment and uses incorrect noun 'location' and punctuation. 'Creates a very colorful atmosphere' conveys that music produces a bright, cheerful feeling.

× No, I have taken any music classes because umm, I Can't Sing but I prefer live to listen.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes because I can't sing, but I prefer to listen live.

Negation with present perfect requires 'haven't' not 'have'. Also 'can't' should be lowercase and 'prefer to listen live' reorders words; however 'prefer live performances' may be clearer.

× Uh, so.

✓ (remove)

This is a filler fragment and adds nothing; remove for clarity.

× Yes, I listen to music while doing other things such as studying, exercise in cooking.

✓ Yes, I listen to music while doing other things such as studying, exercising, and cooking.

Use gerunds in a parallel list: 'studying, exercising, and cooking'. 'Exercise in cooking' is incorrect word order and form.

× In time, I like to listen to music because it's very comfortable and happy life for me.

✓ In my free time, I like to listen to music because it makes my life more comfortable and happier.

'In time' is incorrect; 'in my free time' or 'in my spare time' is correct. Also 'comfortable and happy life for me' is ungrammatical; use 'makes my life more comfortable and happier' or 'it makes me feel comfortable and happy'.