音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make sentences grammatically correct and more concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct verb forms and avoid redundancy (e.g., “these songs” is unnecessary).

範例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and gives me energy. For example, I usually listen to lively pop when I exercise or commute, which helps me feel refreshed and motivated.

建議: Use consistent tense and avoid repetition. Start with a direct response, then add one or two linked reasons with variety in vocabulary. Combine related ideas to reduce redundancy.

範例: Yes, happy music makes me feel more energetic and focused. For instance, upbeat songs with a fast tempo boost my motivation, so I listen to them on my way to school or while exercising to stay alert and concentrated.

建議: Correct factual/word errors and improve clarity. Use accurate time expressions (e.g., “since I was six” or “for more than ten years”). Fix verb agreement and unclear phrases (‘shopping pieces’ likely incorrect). Provide one clear supporting detail about repertoire or progress.

範例: Yes. I have been taking piano lessons since I was six, so I’ve played for more than ten years. I enjoy playing because it relaxes me and challenges me technically; for example, I often practise classical pieces that are expressive and demanding.

建議: Fix subject-verb agreement and tighten phrasing. Give one clear example of when and why you listen to music, and avoid repeating the same reason twice. Use linking words to connect cause and effect.

範例: Yes, I often listen to pop music when I do homework or work out at the gym because its upbeat tempo and strong beats boost my energy and help me concentrate during study sessions or exercise.

× I prefer happy music to sad music because of these songs improve my mood and give me energy.

✓ I prefer happy music to sad music because these songs improve my mood and give me energy.

The original sentence uses 'because of these songs improve...' which incorrectly combines 'because of' with a clause. Use 'because' before a clause without 'of' to connect cause and effect. Suggestion: replace 'because of these songs improve' with 'because these songs improve' to form a correct subordinate clause. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 12)

× I often listen to lively pop music when I exercise or commute, and it make me feel refreshed and motivated.

✓ I often listen to lively pop music when I exercise or commute, and it makes me feel refreshed and motivated.

The subject 'it' is third person singular, so the verb requires an -s in the present simple: 'makes' not 'make'. Ensure subject-verb agreement in present simple third person singular. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 2)

× Yes, happy music made me feel more excited and energetic.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited and energetic.

The question asks about general effect in present; using past tense 'made' implies a single past event. For habitual or general truths use present simple 'makes'. Change past tense to present to match the context. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 5)

× So I often play them on my way to school, while doing homework or doing workouts because they help me concentrate and keep my energy up.

✓ So I often play them on my way to school, while doing homework, or while working out because they help me concentrate and keep my energy up.

Parallelism and clarity require consistent verb forms after conjunctions: use 'while doing homework' and 'while working out' (or 'while I work out'). The original 'doing workouts' is less natural; use 'working out' for parallel structure. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 16)

× I have been taking piano lessons since I was about 6:00 so that more than 10 years now.

✓ I have been taking piano lessons since I was about six, so for more than 10 years now.

Use 'since' with a specific point in time; 'since I was about six' is correct. '6:00' is incorrect here. Also add 'for' before durations ('for more than 10 years') and use a comma for clarity. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 6)

× I love playing because it help me relax and give me energy and I enjoy the elegance of the music.

✓ I love playing because it helps me relax and gives me energy, and I enjoy the elegance of the music.

The pronoun 'it' is third person singular, so verbs should be 'helps' and 'gives' to agree in present simple. Also add a comma for clarity between clauses. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 2)

× For example, I often practice shopping pieces because they are expressive and technically challenging.

✓ For example, I often practice Chopin pieces because they are expressive and technically challenging.

The original 'shopping pieces' is likely a misspelling of the composer 'Chopin'. This is a lexical error rather than a grammar type but fits under preposition/word choice; correct to 'Chopin pieces'. Ensure proper nouns are spelled correctly. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11)

× Yes, I always listen to music when I do my homework and when I work out at gym because I love pop music.

✓ Yes, I always listen to music when I do my homework and when I work out at the gym because I love pop music.

The phrase requires the definite article 'the' before 'gym': 'at the gym'. Use correct prepositions and articles with places. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11)

× Pop music usually have an upbeat tempo and strong beats which make me feel more energetic and help me to stay focused during study session or exercise.

✓ Pop music usually has an upbeat tempo and strong beats, which make me feel more energetic and help me stay focused during study sessions or exercise.

'Pop music' is singular, so use 'has' not 'have'. Also add comma before the relative clause, and pluralize 'study session' to 'study sessions' for general reference. Remove unnecessary 'to' in 'help me to stay' (both are acceptable, but 'help me stay' is more natural). Ensure subject-verb agreement and pluralization. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 27)