音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so", "however") and correct phrasing (e.g., "it depends on the situation"). Avoid repetition and unnecessary words.

範例: I prefer both types of music because it depends on my mood. For example, I listen to upbeat pop when I want to feel energetic, but I choose slower, sad songs when I want to reflect or relax.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then explain briefly why with a specific effect. Use correct verb forms and avoid vague phrases. Include one linking word (e.g., "because", "so") and a brief example of when you listen to happy music.

範例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because upbeat rhythms boost my energy and reduce stress. For instance, I often put on happy songs with headphones when I need motivation before exercising.

建議: Answer directly and use the correct tense. Start with a clear statement about your experience, then add specific details: what kind of classes, when, and what you learned. Use linking words (e.g., "when", "so", "which") and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I took music classes when I was a child. In eighth grade I attended weekly singing and theory lessons, which helped me improve my vocal control and made me more confident about performing.

建議: Give a direct answer, then explain specific situations when you listen to music and how it helps. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "boosts concentration" or "improves mood") and one linking word for clarity. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition.

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while working or studying because it improves my concentration and mood. For example, I play instrumental tracks when I study to stay focused and upbeat songs when I do housework to keep my energy up.

× I prefer both music it's spend on the situation when whenever we moods are happy then we listen happy music, when the mood is sad then I prefer to listen sad music.

✓ I prefer both kinds of music; it depends on the situation. When our moods are happy, we listen to happy music; when the mood is sad, I prefer to listen to sad music.

The sentence has several plural/singular and count noun issues: 'both music' should be 'both kinds of music' or 'both types of music' because 'music' is an uncountable noun and you need a classifier; 'it's spend on the situation' is incorrect and replaced with 'it depends on the situation' to convey meaning; 'we moods' should be 'our moods' (possessive pronoun) and 'listen happy music' needs the preposition 'to' before music. Suggestion: use 'kinds of' with uncountable nouns when referring to different types, use correct possessive pronouns, and include required prepositions like 'to' after 'listen'.

× Both the musics are great for great and the all the musics are very listen to.

✓ Both types of music are great, and all music is enjoyable to listen to.

'Musics' is incorrect because 'music' is uncountable and should not take a plural form; use 'types of music' or 'kinds of music'. 'the all the musics' is redundant and ungrammatical. 'very listen to' is incorrect word order; use 'enjoyable to listen to' or 'pleasant to listen to'. Suggestion: avoid pluralizing uncountable nouns and choose suitable adjectives (enjoyable) with the infinitive phrase 'to listen to'.

× Yes, happy music make me feel more excited because happy music creates happy hormones in our body and feels more energetic and reduce the stress in my mind.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because it creates 'happy' hormones in our body, makes me feel more energetic, and reduces stress in my mind.

Subject-verb agreement: 'happy music' is singular and requires the third person singular verb form 'makes' not 'make'. Similarly, coordinated verbs referring to the same subject need correct forms: 'feels' should be 'makes me feel' and 'reduce' should be 'reduces'. Also 'happy hormones' is informal but acceptable in speech; use consistent verb forms. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with singular subjects and maintain parallel structure in lists (makes ... and reduces ...).

× I feel very good. When there was headphones with me, I listen.

✓ I feel very good. When I have headphones with me, I listen.

The clause 'When there was headphones with me' is ungrammatical: 'there was' is incorrect for possession and 'headphones' (plural) with 'there was' is mismatch; use 'When I have headphones with me' to express possession in present context. Also change 'I listen' to 'I listen to music' or keep 'I listen' if context clear. Suggestion: express possession with 'I have' and include the object 'to music' after 'listen' when needed.

× Yes, I had taken music classes.

✓ Yes, I took music classes.

Using past perfect 'had taken' implies a reference point in the past; simple past 'took' is appropriate when stating a past action without another past reference. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past actions unless you need past perfect to show an action occurred before another past event.

× When I am child, I select the hobby of music.

✓ When I was a child, I chose music as a hobby.

Tense and verb choice errors: 'When I am child' should be past because it refers to childhood, so 'was a child' is correct. 'I select the hobby of music' is unnatural; use 'I chose music as a hobby'. Suggestion: match tense to the time referenced and use natural collocations like 'choose ... as a hobby'.

× In the 8th class, I attend all the classes of the music.

✓ In eighth grade, I attended all the music classes.

Tense: 'attend' should be past 'attended' to match past timeframe. Word order and article use: 'the 8th class' is unclear; use 'eighth grade' or 'in the eighth class/grade'. 'all the classes of the music' is awkward; use 'all the music classes' or 'all music classes'. Suggestion: use past tense for past schooling and natural phrasing 'attended all the music classes'.

× It creates me feel more excited to sing, sing, sing a song.

✓ It makes me feel more excited to sing a song.

Verb choice and structure: 'creates me feel' is incorrect; use 'makes me feel'. Repetition 'sing, sing, sing' is informal emphasis but unnecessary in a test answer. Article: 'a song' is fine. Suggestion: use 'makes me feel' for causation and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× Yes, I prefer to listen music while doing other things because it creates professionally work.

✓ Yes, I prefer to listen to music while doing other things because it helps me work more professionally.

Missing 'to' after 'listen' and incorrect noun phrase 'creates professionally work'. 'Professionally' is an adverb; use 'work more professionally' or 'professional work' depending on meaning. Also include 'to' after 'listen'. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns ('listen to') and place adverbs/adjectives correctly ('work more professionally').

× Music creates good hormones, Li music release good hormones in our body so body feels very energetic and hit and music helps to create work with proper skills and energy.

✓ Music releases good hormones in our body, so the body feels very energetic, and music helps us work with proper skills and energy.

Multiple issues: 'creates good hormones' is better as 'releases good hormones' or 'induces positive hormones'; 'Li' seems extraneous and removed. 'release' must agree 'music releases'. Missing articles: 'the body' or 'our body'. Awkward 'hit' removed. 'helps to create work' is ungrammatical; use 'helps us work'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct verbs for physiological effects ('release' or 'stimulate'), include definite/possessive articles where needed, and use clear verb-object structures like 'helps us work'.