音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., say “I prefer both” then “I listen to happy music when…”). Use clearer connectors like “for example” or “however.”

範例: I prefer both happy and sad music. For example, I listen to upbeat songs when I’m cooking, exercising or cleaning because they cheer me up and make me feel energetic. However, when I’m alone at night I often choose sad, calming music to help me relax and sleep.

建議: Give a direct answer then support it with one clear reason and a brief example. Fix grammar (e.g., “happy music makes me feel excited”) and reduce redundancy. Use a linking word like “because” to explain the cause.

範例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because it has an upbeat rhythm and positive lyrics. For instance, when I play lively pop songs while cleaning, I feel motivated and finish tasks faster.

建議: Answer directly then give concise supporting details with correct tense and word choice. Use past tense for childhood activities and avoid repeating words. Mention one specific activity from the music club to add detail.

範例: No, I haven’t taken formal music classes, but when I was a child I joined a school music club where we sang and learned basic instruments. I still play music informally with friends and listen to many genres.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and give one or two specific activities where you listen to music. Avoid filler words and fix grammar (e.g., “I listen to music almost all day”). Use linking words like “for example” or “especially” to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I listen to music almost all day. For example, I play music while commuting, cooking, and exercising because it lifts my mood and makes me feel more energetic and relaxed.

× When I when I am cooking or exercising or cleaning my house, that time I use happy music so I can make myself more cheer up and make more refresh.

✓ When I am cooking, exercising, or cleaning my house, I listen to happy music to cheer myself up and feel refreshed.

Uses incorrect verb forms and word choices: 'use happy music' should be 'listen to happy music'; 'make myself more cheer up' mixes infinitive and adjective forms — correct is 'cheer myself up'; 'make more refresh' is ungrammatical — use 'feel refreshed'. Also improved word order and removed repetition. Suggestion: use 'listen to' for music and pair verbs with correct objects and participles (cheer up, feel refreshed).

× But when I am going to sleep but I am living alone, that time I used to hear sad music.

✓ But when I am going to sleep and I live alone, I usually listen to sad music.

Misuse of 'used to' implies a past habit; the speaker means a current habitual action so use 'usually' and present tense 'listen'. Also 'but... but' is redundant; replace with 'and'. Use 'live' instead of 'am living' for habitual state. Suggestion: use present simple for routines and 'usually' to indicate frequency.

× Yes, always happy music fills me feel more excited.

✓ Yes, happy music always makes me feel more excited.

Incorrect verb phrase 'fills me feel' — use 'makes me feel' or 'fills me with'. Also adverb placement: 'always' normally goes before the main verb. Suggestion: use 'makes me feel' or 'fills me with excitement' and place frequency adverbs correctly.

× Also it cheers me up for my work, for my cleaning home, also everything.

✓ Also it cheers me up when I am working, when I am cleaning my home, and in many other situations.

Incorrect preposition 'for' with activities; use 'when' to indicate time/situation. 'Cleaning home' needs article 'my' and gerund phrase 'when I am cleaning my home'. Also 'also everything' is vague; better 'in many other situations'. Suggestion: use 'when' for actions and include subjects where needed.

× Basically I don't take any music classes but when I was child I was used to go to music club.

✓ I haven't taken any music classes, but when I was a child I used to go to a music club.

Two issues: tense and article. 'Don't take any music classes' is present but speaker contrasts with past habit; better 'I haven't taken any music classes' if speaking of life experience. 'When I was child' needs article 'a child'. 'Was used to go' is incorrect; correct is 'used to go' for past habit. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits and include appropriate articles; choose present perfect to describe life experience if intended.

× Also I listen music and also play music with my friends.

✓ I also listen to music and play music with my friends.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'listen'. Redundant 'also' can be reduced to one. Suggestion: use correct collocation 'listen to music' and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× Almost every single time in my day I love to listen music.

✓ Almost every time during my day I love to listen to music.

Missing 'to' after 'listen' and awkward prepositional phrase 'in my day' — better 'during my day' or 'throughout the day'. 'Every single time' is wordy; 'almost every time' is natural. Suggestion: use 'listen to music' and natural time expressions.

× Of course it's helps me to give more cheer up also it makes me feel feel free and fresh and more energetic also.

✓ Of course it helps cheer me up; it also makes me feel free, fresh, and more energetic.

'It's helps' is ungrammatical — use 'it helps'. 'To give more cheer up' is incorrect phrase; use 'helps cheer me up'. Duplicate 'feel feel'. Place 'also' appropriately. Suggestion: use correct verb forms and concise parallel lists for adjectives.